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JKinsley


I'm Jordan Kinsley, and I'm a relentless shipper. Send me a PM or leave a comment about my stories, I love getting feedback. Patreon!

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Twilight needs help researching flight dynamics to improve her wing-granting spell. She seeks out Rainbow Dash's help. Dash has other reasons for helping Twilight...


If you're a Twidash fan, thanks for giving this old thing a read. When I wrote it, I did ship Twidash myself. Alas, no longer. I will not be writing a follow up, I will not write another Twidash story unrelated to this one. Between some kind of artistic integrity and a desire not to remove a story no matter how little I care for it, this story will stay here.

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Comments ( 25 )

I like the fact that you made connections to the new daring doo books. And its still a nice sweet little story.:twilightsmile:

is the only thing you changed the Daring Doo comment?

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Most of the content was left unchanged, but the wording was altered in more than one place.

Nice edit:twilightsmile:

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There are a few new additions, but most of the content is related to the new material from Read It and Weep, yes. There were a few, very tiny edits for missing words. But the biggest changes were for Dash's dialogue to Twilight near the end.

Absolutely adorable! The only flaw I could see was Dash immediately welling up with tears when Twilight didn't reciprocate her feelings straight away. It just seems a bit out of character.
Other than that, loved it. 5 stars.

So amazing.
100/00

It seemed a bit rushed, but other than that it was a great fic! :twilightsmile:

wow just wow AMAZING!!!!!

Nicely done. Color me impressed.

fine i will be the first to say it DAWWWWWWWW that is a cute story :twilightsmile: :pinkiehappy:

This sorta felt rushed.
The romance came completely out of left field with no build up to it.
The story felt like it veered off course after that.

The premise is solid enough and could work, but it needs to be fleshed out and expanded.
Give us some time to understand when, how, and why Rainbow developed feelings for Twi.
Give a bit of closure with the flight research, perhaps by Rainbow actually teaching Twilight to fly once she managed a better spell. That could be a great scene to work with.
And put something at risk. There was practically no tension, nothing to keep the reader on the edge of their seat.

I think you've got a good base to work with and if you built on that you'd have yourself quite the story. :twilightsmile:

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I hate to say it, but this story is finished and I won't be making any changes to it. That's not to say I'm not aware of the problems, but I'm just not willing to make the changes to fix them. I would basically have to start from scratch, and I have other plans for a TwiDash fic.

ADKoR has never been my focus, anyway. It was always a side story, something to work on while I was stuck on Canterlot's Guests. A lot of what I was aiming with writing this was practice for writing something like a kissing scene or other tender moments.

And I really only wrote this to be something cute, nothing more.

its awesome and romantic :pinkiehappy:

This is why I like Fimfiction. A ton of short, sweet, endearing stories that always have some originality in them despite the amount I go through.

Nice story, good work.

THE D'AWWS.... Y THEY NO STOHOHOPPP!?!?

This story isn't perminatly done right?

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Hi old account,
I see nopony has responded to you, so here.
:rainbowlaugh:

Man, you totally skipped over the important parts!

Like did she ever finish that wing spell? :pinkiegasp:
Did it revolutionize anything? :rainbowhuh:
How many ponies got hurt trying out wings for the first time? :pinkiecrazy:

Okay, real comment incoming. (though I'd still like to know :P ) :rainbowlaugh:
I thought it was adorable. (anticlimactic?)

Does size matter? Ugh!”

That depends, Twilight. What did you have in mind? :trollestia:

The d'awww…it's fatal!
:pinkiesick::fluttercry:
:twilightsmile::heart::rainbowkiss:

5308600 (say it like a moose) Noooooooooooooooooooo!!!

"Betcha your books can't do that,” said Rainbow cheekily.
“No, no they can't.” Twilight reached up a hoof and began stroking Rainbow's mane.

What? Twi, your books can't do that? I feel like I'm better than you now in one aspect!

This story is Perfection~

Yas! TwiDash!

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