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Evil beware, we have waffles.

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As I said before in the mail, this is an enjoyable story. Love the interaction between Pipsqueak and Rumble.

I was away yesterday and didn't even get to see you took it down:pinkiegasp:, I'm glad you changed your mind, though.:twilightsmile:

After the final unwrapping, they bounced out of their bound prison! Nice, round D-cups with pointy brown nipples

:rainbowlaugh: Bullshit! I don't care how tightly you bind them, there is no way you're hiding D-cups. Maybe - maybe - Cs, but not Ds. I would have gone with Bs, personally.

Regardless, great story, mate. Very well written and very sexy.

Yay! Definitely going to read this once I get from work :pinkiehappy:

6054400 Please do, and feel free to tell me what you think about it when you do. i453.photobucket.com/albums/qq260/spacewings/RumbleWet_zps6564ca82.png

6053612 Yeah, enough people asked to see it that I decided I'd rather officially repost it in one chapter than circulate Google Docs of all four original chapters off to everybody. :twilightsheepish:

6053445 Thanks! I'm thinking of possibly writing an epilogue. Would you read it if I did? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_rainbowderp_flip.png

6054232 Thanks for faving and reading it, though I must ask, have you ever tried hiding D-cups? If not, then how would you know there's no way of doing so? Hm? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png


6054448 In the defense of Shiro this http://www.cosplay.com/showthread.php?t=188357 is a link to a forum discussing the difficulty of attempting to effectively bind D-cups, though it's possible to look mostly flat it's generally said that it :
1. Takes more than simply bandaging them
2. Can severely hinder breathing

But hey, what do I know, magic and shiz.:pinkiehappy:

6054448 I wouldn't mind an epilogue.

6054448 I have tried hiding Ds once, actually. Turns out my mouth wasn't big enough :trollestia:.

But seriously I know a few girls with D-cups, and a friend of mine with Cs dressed up as a 1920s gangster one Halloween. She was wrapped up so tight she could barely move, and you could still see her tits. The ladies I know with Ds all say that a proper fitting sports bra is ridiculously uncomfortable, and those sure don't hide them. So, no, I haven't tried hiding Ds, but I think, with the evidence I've gathered, that my assessment is accurate.

6054792 6055228
As the co-author of the story, I can assure you guys, that the present case is indeed of ze magic!
Don't forget how Pip met Princess Luna years before the events of the story and how she already knew about this condition Pip will face.
So yes, magic!

Any questions?


6056035 Uh huh. Magic. I'm sure :ajsmug:. *cough*cop out*cough*.

Seriously, though. I'm not really concerned about it. Yeah, I would have made them a bit smaller, but it really doesn't take away from the story what-so-ever. I'm just poking fun, is all.

Just finished reading it. I LOVE IT! The perfect mix of humor, romantism and clop. Although it was weird picturing Pipsqueak as a filly.

Any plans for a sequel?

Because motorboating is totally the first thing you do when you find out your best friend is actually a girl :rainbowlaugh:

But this was a great story - hell, I'd have no idea about Pip's true gender until the end if I hadn't read it in your blog post. True that there was foreshadowing which is obvious when I look at it now, but back then it was pretty subtle. Good job on that regard, the surprise would be akin to getting hit by a train if I didn't know from the start.

The dialogues were good and believable, and reminiscing about the past was a nice touch as well. Yay exposition!

Heh, when Thunderlane said "so many mares" as his explanation to the signed record, I imagined him saying that with a dopey smile :rainbowwild:

Also Scoot's reaction was priceless. Basically, scootaloo.exe has stopped working. At least Button did what every other guy would if they found out their friend got laid - epic thumbs up! It would have been pretty awkward if he ran to the bed and actually did a high five.... awww I totally want to see that happening somewhere now :rainbowlaugh:

All in all, really good story. Absolutely deserves the upvote and add to favorites, you have done well. Though I believe that maybe a small epilogue is in order - while the story ended on a pretty good note, there could be a little bit more said and done as a proper closure for everyone.
Also awesome comedy fodder if done right, becuase the reactions could be absolutely priceless :pinkiehappy:

6056644 6058000
You guys are in luck, there IS a sequel planned!
Its details are not polished yet but the basic flow of the story is solid, it will include a place mentioned in the story several times... and I have no freakin' idea when will we actually write it!
Any other questions about it -> ask Kirb. He is the main planner on these ones.
Oh and pahnazd, thank you for your kind words! It was fun to write this all with Kirb!


I loved this stoy. I was great.

Amazing indeed :)


First off, yay!

Second, you're welcome, it is true after all :twilightsmile:

6056109 dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/sillyfilly_Sweetie_Belle.png In a world with talking anthropomorphic unicorns, pegasi who control the weather, and with a geocentric solar system that somehow doesn't have its center of gravity constantly thrown off, and yet you're not able to suspend your disbelief that girls are able to hide D-cups? For shame. dl.dropbox.com/u/21167245/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_Viny_glare.png
And yeah, I figured you were just kidding. I just find it silly that THAT is what you find unrealistic about the whole setup. :derpytongue2:

6056644 I don't think you're the only one. The Pipsqueak (female) tag on Derpiboo.ru is surprisingly empty, which is a shame because Pipsqueak tends to look adorable as a filly. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png

6058000 Hey, Rumble is still a guy, and keep in mind that he has wanted to do this on a girl for years, so now that he's finally getting the opportunity, well... :rainbowlaugh:
But yeah, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm glad I portrayed their dialogue realistically. Thanks for watching me, too! As 6059297 said, we are planning out a follow-up chapter at least. Where we go from there, I don't know at this point, but it really depends on how positive the reception is.

6059729 Thanks. I saw you put it in your gallery "You better hope your story makes it on this," which I'm assuming is a good thing? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png


6059944 Yes. It means your story is very awesome and very lucky to make I onto my account XD

6059944 The rest of that stuff might actually be possible. Perhaps the sun isn't an actual star, or the clouds aren't really water vapor, but you're violating the law of conservation of mass, one of the core principles of physics. So, yes, your boob hiding is actually less believable.

You just got scienced.


and the teachers weren’t lecturing us about ‘eating our hay before our pudding,’



“Oh, 1974 by Van Haylen.”

I think you mean 1984.
Very enjoyable though. You get a like and a fav.

6060088 :yay: Yay! I'm happy!

6060318 dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_RageFace.png Fuck! I'm angry!

6068270 I love to fill my stories with little in-jokes like that. There's another Pink Floyd reference at the beginning, too. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_Lyra.png

As for the Van Halen (Van Haylen) album, yes, I did that intentionally. The actual album is 1984, but I changed it to 1974 for the story's sake: 1974 was the year Lauren Faust was born.
If I had chosen a different album, I still would've changed the title:
-Mares and Fillies First (Women and Children First)
-Derpy Down (Diver Down)
-For Unlawful Canter Knowledge (For Unlawful Carnal Knowledge)
-Foal Warning (Fair Warning)
-A Different Kind of Trot (A Different Kind of Truth)

But yeah, thanks for faving this and The Amulet of Marea! I look forward to writing more stuff.


Great story. I liked how the whole gender of Pipsqueak was handled. Plus the Van Halen music was a nice touch.

“H-h-he-l-hello Sweetie Boobs--uh, I mean Belle!”

I couldn't stop laughing for like twenty minutes, I think that was my favorite thing out of the whole story. :rainbowlaugh: I still keep giggling like an idiot every time I see that bit. Oh that was great!
Anyways, I think y'all should definitely do another one on Button and Scoot! I'd love to see that. I really like these, and I'm so glad to know I'm not the only one who does Skype RPs with my friends. :derpytongue2:
Keep it goin'! :twilightsmile:

6078127 Thanks! I intentionally threw plenty of foreshadowing in there, but tried not to make it overly blatant--that way, when people look back at it, they say, "Oh yeah, it does make sense that she's a filly."

I was actually worried about the initial reception--when I first released this story, everybody downvoted it due to the incorrect assumption that it was a slashfic. Maybe if they'd known from the beginning that Pip was a chick, then again, it wouldn't have been a twist ending since everybody would know it was coming, eh?

6090966 I'm glad you liked that one line so much. :pinkiehappy: That was Zeph's line right there. He's kind of become my writing partner-in-crime clop.
We may do another one. Personally, I ship Button with Sweetie Belle, but with characters that young they can go anywhere with their shipping--hell, just look at Rumble and Pip for proof of that!
Actually, I might do ones for all of the CMCs, since I already did one for Apple Bloom.


...teachers shouting ‘Wrong! Guess again!’ at the students...
...teachers weren’t lecturing us about ‘eating our hay before our pudding...

I swear, you make reference to the outro of "Anothe Brick in the Wall, Part 2" than Edward.
No, not the character, you other uncultured swine.
And here's proof, for the also uncouth, uncultured swine:

Wow. I wished there were more fics like this.

6219782 Sorry for the nine-week-late response, I've had a lot of stuff going on. Anyway, glad you liked it, though if I may ask, more fics like what? More fics with reverse gender reveals?


6464546 Yes. It's always a mare hiding a cock. I want to see more girls that pretend they are guys.

6464668 Lol, well, I'm glad you enjoy it. Honestly, I was afraid people wouldn't read long enough to that point, and at first that was true until I reposted it. But thanks in any case!


Loved it, though kinda wish you left the original cover art so I could see it, or at least linked it at the end.

However, since I can't seem to turn off a part of my brain when reading, I noticed a few things::twilightblush:

It was as if it had were yesterday…

Gonna guess the 'had' shouldn't be there.

Like a swift mountain river reaching the plains, Rumble’s emotions slowed down, becoming settled. He gently put his right hand on Rumble’s shoulder. “Pip, I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to… to…” Then Rumble pulled the crying Pip close to him. “Oh Pip, I’m so sorry.”

So Rumble put his hand on his own shoulder?

“And don’t try to deny that you would’ve told other. I’ll be honest, if it were the other way around and I’d found out that you were a filly, I would’ve told everypony.”

I'll admit, I'm not an expert on the accent, but I feel that should still be plural.

She walked over to the table by the door and picked up her new album, the gift Rumble had given her, and pulled the record out. She then put it in the phonograph and started it. “Side A, track five,” she muttered to herself and stood back up.

No spelling mistakes this time, but the link is dead.

Anyway, thanks for the fun story! Makes me wonder if Pip will change their mind about Waterworld? :ajsmug:

Like a swift mountain river reaching the plains, Rumble’s emotions slowed down, becoming settled. He gently put his right hand on Rumble’s shoulder.

I think you meant Pip's shoulder there.

7419787 Fixed, thanks.

7415021 Also fixed! The original cover art can be found here, and the missing song is below:

And yes, I can imagine that Pip would change her mind about going to Waterworld. :pinkiehappy: My only question is, how will the school deal with the revelation that he is actually a she? Find out next time on Dragon Ball Z! :derpyderp2:

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