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Description: What was supposed to be a simple trip to Ponyville instead leads Soarin on an adventure that will determine the future of all Equestria. Will he be able to save Applejack and her friends from a fate worse than death?

Picture by Opal Whisper. You can check out their page at: http://opalwhisker.deviantart.com/

Note: the fic is complete, I'm just oploading it here over the next week or so.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 33 )

This was one if my first n favorite docs
Pure beauty

I'm happy to see that you're uploading this here as well. :twilightsmile: It's Always Sunny In Fillydelphia and Semper Fidelis are among the top of my favorite stories!

I remember reading this some time ago on, GDocs I think? Whatever, definitely worth a fave here.

Hey I remember this, good story have to re-read. I'm a huge sucker for SorJack.

Holy crap, this was finally posted. I think the sequel to my favorite shipfic deserves a spot here.

"Complete".

Please tell me that's a mistake.

Read quite a bit of this on Deviantart, glad it got posted here.

497607

Don't worry, it's got five chapters! I'm guessing Bobcat will upload them one by one over a period of time, but it was written and finished quite a while ago hence the status. The whole thing is up on Fanfiction.net or Bobcat's deviantart account if you don't feel like waiting.

497677

Ah, okay then. Thanks for the information.

Still remember this, insta-fave and thumbs up.

Just a question, is this a straight cut-and-paste or is there new content in this story?

508408 Aside from a few minor edits, yeah, I'm just reposting it.

>>Bobcat I'm hooked. And I randomly decided to only view it here, so please upload. I read more than I write, so you're kind of my noodle soup right now. If you don't mind the very subtle pun.

Awesome, glad to see this one here as well.

AHHHH. Why the cliff hangers. Why.

Avi

And then Celestia said "LET THERE BE LIGHT!"

I hope you're at least going to do something to continue this. It's been 9 months since I've read something new by the guy who got me onto the SoarJack ship.

579599 Sorry to disappoint, but I'm pretty out of the Pony community.

Yep. This was good. :rainbowkiss:

Ezn

Well, as much sense as it makes to give critique on a story that is old enough for the writer to probably already know about all its flaws and have improved his writing, I am trying to leave more comments on stories I read, so here goes.

There's a lot to like about this story: Soarin and AJ's relationship is sweet and it's great to see it developed beyond Always Sunny; the tone of the work is refreshingly close to the show, and you avoid common fanfic pratfalls of needless gore and melodrama (which would have been all-too-easily realised here); and your Applejack characterisation (as far as I could tell) is pretty much spot-on. Oh, and I thought the sound barrier thing in Chapter 2 was really freakin' clever.

However, your action scenes aren't quite there. You bog down the pacing with too much internal monologuing and word-fluff. Sure, some of that monologuing is important, and a lot of the fluff is certainly amusing, but all too often you trade good pacing for a little amusement, and it doesn't quite balance out.

What's more, there were far too many points (mostly in Chapter 4) where it felt like everyone was taking a timeout from fighting for their lives to chat. I couldn't help but think of Tirek standing around idly, tapping his hoof on the ground and looking at his watch as Soarin conferred with Big Mac and co, and then again as he conferred with the Doctor.

So, broadly speaking, I liked the story, but it was hurt by poor action pacing. Still, thanks for writing, and good luck with whatever you're doing now.

596508 I definitely appreciate you taking the time to critique my story. I agree with the points you made. The story was written ahead of a month long trip to Honduras, so at the time I felt like I'd rushed some things or not polished them as well as I might have. But I'm glad you liked what you did. Sadly, I haven't had time to do much if any writing.

When I first started reading this, I thought the only thing that could make this better was Doctor Whooves.
And then it happened.
Needless to say, I had a fangasm.

I believe you are the reason I am passing Latin.

SOARINJACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! FIVE SPIKES FOR U!:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

the titles aren't even english what the heck

2364591 I believe its in Latin, but the chapters are in English.

2364591 Son, the Story is called "Semper Fidelis." Obviously Latin phrases are a theme.

i love how when soarins plans lead to the conclusion that he might die he always thinks '' oh well ''

Phew. That dragon chase was intense.

Well, I absolutely loved this. TWO THUMBS UP. :ajsmug::rainbowdetermined2::pinkiehappy:

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