The Moon Worshiper

EThe Moon Worshiper Part 2: Knight of the Moon
MLP: FiM
Adventure
The Sequal to The Moon Worshiper. Dark Sidewinder has been made an offer from Princess Luna herself!
Luna
OC
CreatureofTheNight · 14k words · 10 5 · 662 views

A mysterious pony sends Luna letters once a month in secret, until Pinkie Pie catches him one night. She comes to the logical conclusion that he's a vampire pony, and must hunt him down with her friends.

Cover art done by Oak Sabletwist

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Diamond dust

Diamond dust #1 · Sep 25th, 2014 · 2 · ·

There's a lot of errors here that you might want to correct or Apple Bloom will have to face the terrible truth ,
that she's in fact a colt and not a filly .

Also you're being a bit too fast with this story , just because you're OC got red eyes isn't enough to prove that he's a Vampony.
they could at least try to notice his fangs.....

Last thing :

The Griffin gasped at the red marks on the face of the figure as it grabbed its cloak

yeah i know....i got the same reaction everytime i see a Black and Red OC's story.......
no but seriously......red marks.....are you really trying to convince us that your main character is a vampony because he got some red marks on his face ?
unless you got something to prove it , to me that's just a theastral with some red tatoos on his face.