Now we need more of this pairing... I'm sad it's over...

Wow, I really never thought I would have enjoyed the story aspect of this as much as I did. I originally found it just looking for something to get off to, but now I actually want more... Great story, would really like to see a sequel where more stuff between them happens.

Why the hell are we in Rumble’s room?!

Oh my god, my sides!

I have mixed feelings about the ending. On one hoof, Rumble is hilarious. On the other hoof it is really sad what happened after the kiss.

I would like to see this story continued. Coming off of the second chapter there is clearly substance that can be explored. You've already set up Lightning Dust as a complex character, but only scratched the surface. That and Lightning Dust is one of my favorite characters, and I'm a sucker for redemption stories. Plus that ending was kinda depressing, but I can also see the desired effect you were going for, even as you teased the possibility of more as Thunderlane continued to mull on the situation.

All up to you of course.

I rather enjoyed this, as the characters are well portrayed, and that's about all I have to say. If you nail characterization then you have a good story in my mind.

One problem that might just be a typo: bared and barred are two different things. To bare your skin is to be nude. To bar somepony's path is to be a dutiful guard.

One thing was for sure: he could not let Rumble see his room in the state it was in. Baring that was the mare that was still snoozing on his chest. Thunderlane brought a hoof up and poked her head.

She is preventing an objective being reached, not baring something often concealed. Should be "barring that was the mare…" etc.

Otherwise I would very much enjoy another few chapters to bring this further out of one-shot territory.

A week or so later and Lightning realizes she hasn't suffered her estrus!

I didn't enjoy this story so much in the erotic sense. But the comedy and romance and drama all hit home quite well. The erotic parts were probably better than I give them credit, too. Just personal kinks and preferences,etc. But yeah. I gotta say it was really well written, overall.

I kinda feel like there should be a sequel to this

Thunder and Lightning, huh? I sense great potential in this pairing.

3 rounds of sex? I detect a pregnant lighting dust. Do make a sequel on this please

....I've got to be honest: for two characters that I had no reasons to think should be stuck together, this pairing works...oddly well. The ship name is catchy too. The dynamic between them is complex, allowing for a lot of (surmountable) conflict to overcome that makes any romance story interesting.

...I want more.

Thunderlane talks about wanting a family, Lightning Dust seems lonely and wants support. A sequel basically demanded itself when the story was written. I am invested in these characters and their lives... I want a continuation, maybe a series.

You know, I don't know what I expected when I sat down to read this. What I GOT, however, was one of the most adorable, drunken, sexy and cute stories I've ever read. The jokes were funny, Thunderlane's stupid sense of humour is right in line with my own, and it was easy to believe that the entire thing was a vicious cycle of mixed, drunken attraction. And then this chapter, I wanted so badly for him to fly out and talk to her. To my mind, this could become one of my favourite pairings in this entire setting. You, sir, have my rapt attention regardless of whether or not you plan to do anything further with it.

5352363 Finally! Someone got the reference!

SEQUEL!!!!!

i'd love to read more of this ship :)

Wow, this was really good! A perfect mix of humor and erotic moments, along with great characterization. Not to mention Thunderlane and Lightning Dust would make a perfect couple; there needs to be more fics with them. Definitely one of my new favorites stories.

I really enjoyed reading this, it was well written. Good job! But honestly I really think this needs a sequel. That ending totally left me hanging there, NEED A SEQUEL! PLEASE!!!

Wow, that is a terrible ending. After (technically) 2 rounds, i have a glimmer of hope a sequel is either here, or will be here. If not, I be very dissappoint...

...I am dissappoint.

Other than that.... Very well written, good development with few words, and most of all..... Ha! Haha! HAHAHAHAHAHA!!! Oh Rumble, you so silly.

i dig this ship

This is one of the very few stories that left me dazed and speechless for hours. Nice werk!

That ending though This was fantastic, although I'm sad the author is ded. This definitely needs to be continued.

Wait that's all of the story?!
It's been 5 years already, when can we have a direct continuation or sequel to the main story? There's been a lot of potential continuities and opportunities for exploring about Thunderlane or Lightning Dust past. Damn why cant we have more stories like this one. Holly shit!

This is so perfect, just similard to ThunderDash but so different.
WE ALL WANT OTHERS STORIES WITH THIS SHIP !

That was amazing! 10/10