A what if to the show. What if Spike was older and wiser. More powerful and faster. Raised and trained by Princess Celestia, he will change the way the story is written. This is Spike guardian of (Filly!)Twilight Sparkle and the element of courage. Watch as Spike and friends change the story to something new. Spike x bigharem. Powerful(later) spike. Dense Spike.
(Critzem is welcome as long it contrasted. Hope the summary is better. I was never good at making these. Also first story on the site! Also I got an editer. Look at author note if you want to see.:-) )
Chapters (2)
>whole lot of twist.
>Spike harem
>yea that's totally an original and creative idea that hasn't been done a million times
> (Critzem is welcome as long it contrasted.) The autism is with this comment
I haven't read a single word of the story because it's already clear from the surface that this is the kind of immaturity that makes people look down on Spike fans.
Wait...it's a trollfic, isn't it.
4798224 twilight.ponychan.net/chan/fic/src/133046298410.jpg
So many friggin errors and I won't even try to read the rest of this.
4798819 Sorry if it bad. I was never an good speller and looking for someone(or some pony) to beta or hoof read my story and help fix my mistakes. If you know anyone that can help, please let me know.
4797936 Sorry I'm may be confuse. Are you saying an whole lot of twist and harems was use an lot right? If so, I'm talking about an different way to tell this story. Not the actual twist. Comment me or message me if I misunderstand your words. I get confuse easily.
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4801172 Huh?
4800924 it's okay, but I do recommend trying to get an editor for your stories.
4801706 Do you know anyone that can help with that?
4801719
I can help you there if you want.
4801848 Really? Thanks!
So how does this work? (Don't forget, I'm new to this site.) 
4798325 Thanks for helping dude. I got the gest of it.
4798124 No it isn't. Sorry for being misleading, that wasn't you were to see. I try to be more clearer in the future. This story suppose to be an different take on the story, but with Spike as the main hero. I always love the underdog of story's,movie's, and show's.
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Well... I'm kind of new to this too...
Ok, I'll rewrite this and then send you the edited version somewhere within a week's time (going on vacation tomorrow), sound good?
4801924 Sound like an plain to me!
4801719 sorry I don't know anyone that could help u with that, just post this story in looking for editors and u might be able to get some editors
4801942 "Sounds like a plan to me!" You mean.
4802015 (found in the corner with fluttershy crying playfully.) Yes.
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The only part I liked was the final letter. At least you got your grade correct...
I didn't know the Incredible Hulk wrote MLP fanfiction!
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Hulk sad! Hulk smash!
...Actually, I think I know the next fic that'll hit the feature box.
"The Hulk Writes a Clopfic"
Get on it, internet.
Due to unforseen circumstances, I'm going have to ask for more time. Sorry amigo
, hope you don't mind
HOWEVER!!!
I will send it to you as soon add I finish it.
quick heads up, I change quite a bit to help the story flow better and tried to add a little humor
4837202 I don't mind and looking forward to it.
I'm pretty sure we all know that Spike will never be more than a comedic add on.
4876179 Still fun to use though.
I'd like to speak to your "editor".
That was not even half of it.
Also, why did you get him to edit since his one and only story (which is cancelled) was in great need of editing. Did you even glance at his profile ?
4891131 yes I did. He did an good job,though. He rush through this. Plus, if you want to talk to him, just click his name. I doubt I didn't put his name in this story.
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He did a horrible job.
the edits I gave you weren't even the first half of the story! Like I said if he is already doing bad with his own stories you shouldn't ask him to help you with your own. That'll just make it worse!
Looks good now
"A what if to the show. What if Spike was older and wiser. More powerful and faster. Raised and trained by Princess Celestia, he will change the way the story is written."
Well then he'd be a Mary Sue. I'm a major Spike fan.... but overpowered characters just don't make the cut to me, no offense.
4976198 None taken. he not going to be that powerful to later.
4976198 Sorry, had to rush somewhere and been busy. Anyway what I meant to say was that Spike will gain more power and skills set as the story go. I want to build him up for later adventure. It never fun to have an main character insanely strong right off the start. It get boring.
For now Spike will be just above just average. But barely. He will be an brilliant strategy person to win most of their problems.(Think Sherlock Holmes brillant brain, Doctor Who insane yet funny way of talking when thinking things.)
That all for now folks.
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Alrighty then. I have confidence you can make this story work.
Have a stache for luck
p.s. Ignore the haters, keep doing you bro
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Are all of them humans or anthros ?
5047554 Kind of both. Bad guys will be anthros and the guys(which is most) are human. But still animal like features. Hope this clear up some things to you. Here an muustache.
Sorry, life. Barely started editing today *lots of bows for forgiveness*
5165187 It okay. But plaese finish quickly.
It's like Google Translate threw up.
Please continue!
spike = dragon - scales harder then diamonds - claws that can CUT DIAMONDS - teeth that cut diamonds like a hot knife to paper - a tail could probably lift 2 tons as a 12 year old - can breathe fire that can make lava feel cold - and can swim in lava... my question time a) how did a kick to the jewels hurt him that badly b) how did the shot to the make him numb c) how come he couldn't stop his fall d) how did sword do that much damage to him if it was quick summon e) why wouldn't he just quickly climb that pillar to grab that sword f) for that matter why couldn't he just use his claws in that fight as well?
but please continue this is a good read!!!
When is the next update?
I don't want to sound like an ass or hate this story, but wtf! Why did you make it like an anime? I mean seriously. Made them sweat drop? a lot of unnecessary things and reactions. plus adding your comments in the story and making pinky break the fourth wall that badly. I mean yah she does break it alot, but that? Plus u made her talk about the author giving it to her. And what the hell is "vis"? Also a lot of unfinished sentences.
I mean hate me if u want I'm not saying stop making story's, but please for the love of God take out all the unnecessary anime stuff and all the over reactions please. I cringed throughout all of chapter 2 and hade to stop myself from beating my head against the wall from all the cringing.