Everyone thinks they're the hero of their own story. Yet nobody wonders just what its like when you swear you're doing the right thing, that everything you're working for is because you have to do it, yet youre seen as the villain for doing so
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Love it, it's good. :)
That's two updates. Only about eight more to make up for.
Slapdash indeed. How's a maid supposed to make herself look as if she deserves to have the princesses working for her?
Fingers are awesome. It's the next best thing to having ten bony tentacle-tongues at the end of your arms, in terms of sensivity and dexterity. There may be one or two creatures in the animal kingdom with limbs that out-perform us in either sensory accuracy or physical precision, but I doubt it. Definitely not both.
Are you writing this on a tablet or something? There are some rather funny word choices here and there that make me think "auto-correct."
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Nice. Especially sociopath Chrysalis at work.
Not sure why the hell Discord through. Is he "reformed" here? Or somehow stripped of almost all power, so princesses don't even care anymore?
soooooo gilda eh, and nightmare moon..... i wonder when chrysalis and halfy are going to admit their feelings
Lesson for the future, never steal shit from a changeling. That stallion is lucky to be alive.
Hah, Chryssie is literally hiding in plain sight.
More please!
Two updates so fast i love it! Though i feel bad that im about to point out a lot of things in this chapter, sorry
as he saw the mare flinch away from him,
You accidentally put in a double space before Gilda
like a sort of massage really,
acting as sorts of spelling and grammar checkers for her. (Sounds more reasonable, though at the very least you would have to use the word spelling not spell, i think you could have it as spelling and grammar checks and it would still be fine)
And I can't really say Chrysalis
Perhaps you mean prime candidate?
If she saw a puddle of mud after a rainy day, (after a rainy day or a rainstorm or anything but don't stop at rainy)
pacing a good what? it seems you missed a word
as she raised a forehoof and,
either knocked it against the wood, or knocked it against the wooden door works here
rather than begin to yell at me for putting myself at such a risk,
I probably seem like a complete asshole going through so much here but i want you to know i really do love your story and am really happy to see it update
yay
Looks like Discord shall through Chrissy's disguise with the quickness.
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Meh, if anything I prefer you point these out for me to fix. Makes things a lot easier.
:D
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Unfortunately, yes, I am indeed writing this on tablet. You see, I tend to move while writing, so mobile devices serve me greater purpose than an immobile computer. Unfortunately, this also leads to some... Interesting mistakes.
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Perfectly understandable. There seem to be quite a lot of people here who write on their mobile while on the train and such. I just asked out of curiosity.
It does lend itself to some of the funniest mistakes, though. You haven't laughed until you've read Nightmare Moon proclaim "That nigger will last forever!" Not your story, of course, but I've seen that happen. A bit juvenile of me, I suppose, but I still got some major stomach cramps from that one.
Wow, the 2 new chapters were nicely detailed, and so fast!! I wonde though what actions Celestia is gona take, and if it is enough time left for Chrysalis and Nightmare Moon to replenish their magic fully
Celestia and Luna are scouring Canterlot and the whole of Equestria in pursuit of him, Nightmare Moon is trying her best to get past the friend zone, Gilda takes every opportunity she can to flirt with him, and Chrysalis can't keep her mouth to herself and essentially lives off of him... Jeremy is a wanted man.
Anyways, I'm loving the interactions between the characters in this story; their distinct personalities and rich dialogue really makes this story feel like something more akin to a written sitcom, which I have no problem with so long as the story is advancing. Nothing ominous was foreshadowed in this chapter, yet I can't shake the feeling that shit's about to go down sooner than us readers can imagine. Glad the hiatus was broken. Cheers!
If witchcraft did it I'm buying a pointy hat.
Also being a griffin in a town full of ponies gives a bonus to intimidation
So Luna's invading his dreams now.
You'd think she'd have a better disguise than the moon
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Okay... I mayyyy have been laughing at that photo for a solid 3 minutes. Only may...
7306235 Yuuuuuussssssss
7306892 No. Nightmare Moon is best ship.
Oh God Yissss
Awwwww yeeeah, i got my daily dose of a awsome fic, glad to see that you updated it again so fast.
Dear god man, I thought I was gonna have to put your fic in the graveyard. Don't scare us like that.
OMG thank the old ones, your back.....with new chapters I was scared shitless when I thought you canceled I was all like but now I'm all like
Witchcraft, eh? Then hail Satan, and gimme moar.
7342830 Witchcraft actually isn't satanic. Witches and other pagans in Europe were actually similar to Buddhism, Native American spirituality, and other animistic earth-based religions that predated most current ones today. The Roman Catholics came to the region with their followers, wanted to grow in power and influence, and control most of Europe . They kept their followers uneducated and dependent upon the church and used censorship to sway public opinion. To convert some pagans, they employed many tactics like converting pagan holidays to Christian such as... Easter-Ostara, Christmas-Yule, All Saints Day now Halloween- Samhain. They also molded the saints and archangels to resemble many pagan gods(this spawned the practice of praying to Saints instead of directly to Yahweh.) They Christianized many pagan beliefs. And then they began to demonize witches and druids and many other Euro pagans. They twisted the-now- majority's uneducated masses view on witches and sewed fear into them.
In short, witches weren't bad. The Church wanted power and if they couldn't convert the few pagans left in the region, they painted them evil and had them burned. This led to the bloody persecution of a fair people. And forced them into hiding. Whether Neo-pagans today are hidden practitioners come out of hiding, or pretenders, religious tolerance is slowly rising.
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Well I learned something new today!
7355879 *raises eyebrow* You do realized that not everyone accused of witchcraft subscribed to that vision of witchcraft, right? "Female Spell caster" Is an idea simple enough to crop up in a whole lot of cultures with very little if any crossover, nevermind the fact that a whole mess of accusations can be attributed to plain ol' jackassery. Because let's face it: you don't need to be a witch to be accused of witchcraft.
More specifically, I was referring to the character in the gif, whose hate-boner for gypsies is weirdly literal. I don't know whether the Roma people have a tradition of witchcraft that jives with yours, but somehow I doubt it.
TL;DR: Cool story bro.
When you come back, you really come back. In other news, I gotta stop opening new chapters, bookmarking them and then walking away from the computer. It would work fine for a normal person but I have to clean the bar every two or three days.
Nice one with Chrysalis. I was pretty sure the mystery mare was her around the time she started talking about her "goals" (pretty sure you meant "foals") back home but it's still a nice touch. Plus it gives them an in at the castle and something to rub Celestia's nose in when she inevitably catches up with them. That's gonna be funny. "Good job on the whole anti-Changeling measures, Sunny Buns. Not only did they fail but they actually allowed the exact Changeling you've been turning the nation upside-down looking for to waltz right in to your castle while it was on high alert, handle your food and even clean your private toilet without you any the wiser. That 'star pupil' of yours is a real success story. Oh, and I know I said 'handle your food and even clean your toilet' but it was actually the other way around."
Glad to see you back at it.
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Glad to see you enjoy it. Oh, as for the spelling mistake, I'll fix it as soon as I can. Yeah, writing on mobile can be irritating at times .
In how long it took this to update, I forgot how fucking weird it is to share a name with the protagonist.
MOAR
yay update!
when will the next chapter be out?
Just had to say this had one of the best renderings of Ye Olde English with Nightmare Moon
Made any progress on the next chapter?
Something triggered a memory of this story so I though I'd try to check in.
Please update this great story!!!
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Hands, human magic baby! *Bow chicka bowwow*
Oh come on, you know you want them. A nice scritch behind the ears, slow luxurious stokes down the back and then, maybe a little light scratching just over the croup... mmm-maybe a lot?
Yo! You still working on this one?
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It is. I've just, unfortunately l, been extremely busy as of late. As such, updates have been scarce.
7813033 Awesome! I understand! Please take all the time you need. Just wanted to make sure one of my favorite stories hadn't been abandoned.
Did you disappeared againg?
Is this story dead?
7964271 I hope not.
7965085 Oh... I feel so sorry for you. You must not know how things work around here. See, if there's any fic that's made well, especially if it's unoriginal, it will go through bouts of hiatus before eventually dying off. It's just how it is.
Please, try not to get too disappointed.
You know, halfway through the story, my first instinct was that maybe Jeremy was targeted by Celestia because of a strange prophecy or somesuch about him becoming an enemy of her (possibly even ending her rule) and uniting her enemies and/or restoring them to power. But given the clue about him supposedly dying in a fire, along with an unmentioned amount of other ponies/individuals that seems rather unlikely. The way things are set up, I can't really see him (at least not without invalidating his entire characterization so far) having actually committed a crime atrocious enough for the sentence he's apparently been given. And the only other obvious option (him having been framed by someone else) has some major issues as well. Namely: That any horrendous crime would have been big news, that Celestia would have to be semi-incompetent to miss the frame-job, and that anyone skilled and influential enough to pull it off probably would've had little to no reason to target Jeremy.
Either way, I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes in the future. So far it's definitely one of my all-time favorites on the site.
I'm gonna take a guess and say this story and your Bioshock crossover (both amazing) will not be continued in a loooong time . I really hope I'm wrong...
Very slowly pokes the story with a cattle prod to see if it reacts.
Amazing story so far! Has a grate plot an charter development! I always like these ones were chrysalis (or villains in the show in general) are not actual evil per say anyways I hope to see more of this awesome story soon!
I'd ask to get the defibrillator, but... well... that's not going to be much help at this point.
Maybe if the mad doctor returned...
Here's hoping to a stormy night.