Gallant Topsail has dreamed of becoming the captain of a ship ever since he was a colt. When he became of age, he hastily enlisted in the Equestrian Royal Navy. He is currently stationed aboard one of the finest ships in the Equestrian fleet, the ERS(Equestrian Royal Ship) Resplendent. However, his dream of a captaincy is far from becoming reality, he is merely a cabin boy. Just as Gallant begins to loose hope in the possibility of attaining his ultimate goal, something happens that will change his life forever.
Chapters (18)
Interesting , I'll see how this pr
This reminds me of the first half of Robinson Crusoe. I'm liking it.
Okay, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
So the story escalates...
How did Flareluck get to be Admiral while Gallant was a cabinboy for so long until recently?
3969417 I plan on explaining that in a later chapter, for now though I'll leave it up to the imagination :)
3969432 Headcanon registering: He fucked Celestia brainless. Got promotion. Profit.
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Not quite what I had in mind, but an interesting thought nonetheless.
Tia's gonn' fuck shit up.
Ending was well honestly, kind of rushed in a way, but it was executed in a nice, heartwarming way that sort of makes up for it. I'll be honest, this wasn't a GREAT read, but it has potential. The retirement line by Celestia and the reference to Mainsail at the end were nice touches, though. Can't wait to see more of your work. :)
3971014 Thanks. I kind of felt the same way about it after I wrote the last chapter. I'm still working on my writing style, and hopefully I'll be able to have it more well rounded with my next few stories.
I added this story to the Battleships Group under the folder "Ship of the Line". I "Mainsail" in the same group under the folder "Age of Sail and Wind". Also, I added both stories to the group "Royal Equestrian NAVY!". Thought you'd like to know.
3975220 Alright, thanks for the info.
Very nice, you got me hooked.
3975228 Glad you like it.
Well, I like where this is going. I'll keep reading.
Very nice. One thing. This and the previous chapter could be a single chapter. If you want your readers to stick around, try to keep the chapters over 1000.
Should there be a word after "Than"?
Also,
to help teh flow of the story, it could be "After all, Gallant reasoned to himself, the captain was still a normal pony underneath his rank, but, for some reason, he was still suprised
Need a space between "a" and "part"
Well, that was unexpected.
To be honest Ships of the Line from 1600-1880s were the kinds of ships I was expecting Equestria's navy to have with a few Monitor and Virgiinia Class ironclads for coastal defense
How would you like a free edit of this story? I can fix the grammar problems, and the wording in some places to help make the story flow better.
3975757 That would be nice, I suppose.
After Reading Naomi Novak's Temeraire Series I've gained an interest in Age of Sail and Naval fiction