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Its needs a lot of work... and maybe more words to the story.
3791532 the story still has three more chapters
Ruuuushed
It.........REALLY need some editing.......feels really rushed and a pain in the ass to read.......-1/10
it needs a little more, right now it feels rather rushed and like a puppet show
Less rushed story and I WILL LOVE YOU. nuff said fav and like (for now) with hopes of a better version of it.
3796937 one it is not finished. two I am taken
Sorry
so rushed and unexplained as fuck. it could be good, but this needs AT LEAST 3k more words to explain the story, build characters and have sex
Really short and feels rushed, but I like where this is heading. I hope to see more soon.
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What I meant to say it's that it needs more pacing to the story. I do love the idea of more chapters, but you can still make it sound a bit better, without the need to say: and they fuck the end.
Make it more vivid, give it more sauce to the smex scenes.
[check this fimfic ===>] Twilight midnight violations. by Aribandetyral
Here is a good fimfic you can take a look for ideas on how to pace your story (I don't meant to say copy/paste ideas, Just look at the writhing pace of it).
Good porn is like a rollercoaster; with loops dips and little flourishes throughout. This was like a bullet train. Zipping at breakneck speed to arrive quickly at its destination. Take time to enjoy the journey.
Full pic please?
3812328 Sorry but I can't put up the full pic because it is NSFW I would get my story removed for that reason
3881249 i think he was asking for the link to the pic, not to put it as your cover page for the story
When's the next chapter coming?
5496230 lol 1 comment a year later and still no update , sigh dead fics all around......
5514141 Yep. Damn!
I wish updates were as fast as this scene.