Luna and Nightmare Moon are transported to the Capital Wasteland during the final battle against her sister. Join them in their attempt to return home and reclaim her birthright with the help of a girl named Sarah, fresh out of Vault 101.
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MOAR!
Not quite the lone wanderer we've come to know and love,But still a decent greenhorn.Keep up the good work,Wanderer of the wastes
Get rid of that.
Decent chapter. A bit... Exposition heavy, but, there really as none beforehand, so, you can get away with it.
Loving it so far.
Interesting. Is Luna using 'we' to account for Nightmare Moon, or is it just etiquette for Princesses? Or perhaps both?
Damnit ed I can't read this fast! Just because you're an awesome writer doesn't mean you can flood us with great work!
I kid, I kid. Seriously; though. great work, as always.
Niiice
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Thanks for the catch
I was aiming for both exposition and characterization with this chapter; hopefully I got both
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Who knows, certinally not me
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Yeah, some characterization definitely went on. Just try to not get too heavy with exposition until it's needed for the story. Obviously it is now, because the readers are still clueless. But I mean for later.
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I'll keep it in mind for the future man, thanks for the feedback. Also do you like what I'm doing with Luna?
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Yeah, I do, actually. I thought you were just doing straight up Luna. But, using Nightmare and Luna is... Kind of nice. Considering she has to contend with her personal voice of reason and the influence of Nightmare.
Looks like Luna guards dreams in the wasteland too.
Awesome chapter.
well the progression is quite nice, i'm watching this story with a lot of curiosity
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keep it up !
Sigh... Another FO3 fic where the Overseer dies. Now that asshole Allan Mack's gonna takeover.
Good, good, Darth Sidious and I approve.
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*certainly
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Screw that, Nightmare Moon for Overseer. She's got 999 years, 364 days to go, right?
Wonderful. Bit short, bit lacking in the murder, blood, guts and gore department, but necessarily so, I suppose.
Only one problem -
Going strictly by show canon (because I haven't read the comics, and likely won't for quite some time), neither of the Princesses were _ever_ (legitimately) the sole ruler of Equestria. Direct quote from S1E02 - "We were meant to rule together".
Now, granted, Celestia technically did during her sister's absence, but that is more due to the difficulties of filing paperwork whilst imprisoned on the Moon - she never actually _stopped_ being a Princess, however.
...
Oh, and this is going to change the series ever so slightly. A thousand years of surviving/fixing/conquering/ruling the Wasteland isn't exactly going to make a more forgiving and peaceful Princess of the Night.
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First off thanks for the informative coments; it gets really old just seing people say MOAR and getting one that actually took time to write always makes a writer feel really good
Now then onto your points; I'll change the things that you mentioned in the first comment.
Ah, that. In order to write this story I'm going to be changing canon quite a bit. Mostly because at the time of writing this we don't know much about the history itself so I can get away with bending it to create my own little universe. For example, the events of Hearthwarming? Compleatly ignored, or if not ignored changed to what I want them to be (mostly becasue there are too many logical problems with the play in general).
Wait and see, I have plans
Lastly, thanks again for the long comments
3336438 MOAR... Of the great story line, and I really enjoy how nightmare moon isn't JUST evil, but also afraid of being hurt again. In later chapters I'd really like to see different guns picked up just because... Well it's the wasteland, maybe it's just me but new or well loved guns in a story just kinda rule... maybe I'm crazy, anyway keep up this story and I will certainly keep reading with interest
3336296 ...I don't think she has a sword like that because she like baking cookies... just sayin :) tho maybe it will be a good anger release
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Whilst that is true, I was pointing out how all those scary, but relatively harmless stunts she pulls on the M6 are not very likely to be at all harmless after a millenium in the Wasteland.
3336489 What do you mean? I bake cookies with my sword D:
3537044 Hey your not the only one /)
Another well done chapter :)
Well, so far I have to say this story is looking pretty good, I like what you have going here.
Luna and Nightmare, together in this vast wasteland and low on magic, in a land unfamiliar to them and they are forced to trust this strange 'human' if they want to survive, and exact revenge.
Sarah, the lovable vault dweller alone, armed only with her rifle teams up with Luna/Nightmare and together they all go look for Sarah's dad...
Oh the encounters I can see, make me smile a bit.
Good show man! this has caught my interest on a massive level ^^
Opening left me slightly confused, but only just, to the notion that it took place in the past.
Well that escalated quickly...
Clover, nothing exists in the shadows that wasn't there in the day.
One; misspelt 'feel', two this is also why I too like the night-time.
To understand why demons and monsters exist, one only needs to spend a night along in a dark, quiet forest.
The last chapter said 'covered in scratches', now it's only a few dozen? Surely being covered implies more then a few dozen.
Even in a land with supermutants and behemoths, noting would do anything of that nature to a human.
Only needs one 'o' in 'to' in this case.
Chapter two said that two bullets nailed her in the shoulder.
See, told you.
Also, the bullet that Sarah's whining about came from an assault rifle, not the sniper.
Nobody said that in the last two chapters, three if you count this one.
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True, but most predators hunt between dusk and dawn
"feel"
"Night" should be capitalized cause it is part of a title.
I thought she shot at her father in an earlier flashback.
I respectfully disagree on that point. Luna is much prettier.
This is the third time I've seen a premise like this, where Luna (and Nightmare Moon) are banished to another universe for a thousand years instead of the moon. My personal favorites so far are Nightmare Moon Crashes the Oblivion Crisis and The Wizard and the Lonely Princess. I like how Luna and Nightmare Moon learn things while they're not in their home universe, most notably their signature dreamwalking ability. I hope the Royal Canterlot Voice can be weaponised here. I might be wrong, but I think the story might take off right after Escape! or Trouble on the Homefront.
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Hmm, I'll have to check those out.
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Depends on if/when the author has Sarah and Luna/NMM do the GNR side-quest route... OFC, you've probably already read this, so...
That is adorable.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I3s6TfiA8c8
this is how I saw it