I always thought of myself as the adventure kind of pony...
"Are you sure this is such a good idea?!"
"Of course it is! Twilight went there right? So why not us?
But sometimes, it's good idea to listen to that little voice of reason in your head...
Where am I? This doesn't look like a high-school. Wait, a second... What in Equestria am I?!
Because sometimes, that little voice of reason can be the difference between a good time...
Dear Luna...their going to kill me!
And fighting for your life...
Deathsia Presents:
STRANDED
RRRRRAAAAAHHH! *sound of tireiron hitting skull and body hitting floor*
Pant... Pant.... Pant...
Chapters (2)
it seems like this should have either the dark or sad tag depending on where you're planning on going with this, almost certainly dark
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I had thought about that but upon looking at what each tag means and stands for, I felt that a dark tag wasn't needed. and a sad tag means that the story won't have a happy ending. But don't worry, I'll be surely updated and adding/removing tags as I Progress through chapters.
3239184 that comment makes me think you plan on pushing the line a bit, but i'll trust your judgement and see just how far you go with this.
Deathsia... You had my curiosity... Now, you have my attention.
Seriously though, this looks like it has potential. And in print there's roughly 2000% less uncanny valley in the change from pony to human, so that's a plus...
interesting story so far, curious as to who gave them the spell and why they have been split up. also am i mis reading or is sweetie now a proud owner of a wang?
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No she's not!XD I may need to rewrite that part a little.
As a farther note: I am attempting to keep this story teen so I am skipping out on the "finer details"
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ahh so it's her "lady parts" but she just doesn't recognize them in this form. that's why i asked I was sure you weren't a fan of that stuff. also glad this is going to stay teen, i was worried the other two had been taken away and being kept for some sick sex trade operation.
I gotta say i really love how you write this. it's as if your describing her actions if she was an infant which to many would seem odd being she is near her teens (or in this case in her teens) but when you consider the fact she's never done any of this nor has any clue what her body parts are is absolutely brilliant. for us it's obvious how something as simple as walking works or even grasping but these are things we've learned over years of trial and error. even the moments of her running are done perfect for some one just learning to walk. this is why i love your stories you think of the smallest details and place them as they'd work in a real life situation. like her being nude. most would have her transported to this realm and her fur replaced by some type of clothing. you (while trying to keep it PG) portray her as she is in her own realm, naked and needing to find clothing. I gotta say you've succeeded in showing how a pony would adapt to human form much better then EQG did. I really look forward to reading more even if I want to strangle and do bad things to the butt monkey's chasing sweetie.
Not a fan of the Language in the first chapter, though it does put a spin of reality to it so I'll let it slide. (Not sure if Language is a Qualifier for Mature content or not, so I will leave it at that.)
The detail of learning is well done, and very will portrayed, and the Idea is amazing. That is why I stared this story.
Keep up the good work.
Mr. Flare
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Thank you! I'm glad your enjoying this. To be honest I was worried that this story was yet another dud of mine.
I have a ton of projects I'm doing atm, one of which is a RPG maker game which I have made recent breakthroughs in understanding how my battle system engine works due to the fact I didn't make it myself it's been a learning process with alot of reverse-engineering which ended with me breaking the engine five times until I was able to understand how it worked.
I'll try to make time to get another chapter out though! If you would be so kind as to plug this story elsewhere so I can get more readers than by all means do! Reviews fuel my creativity!
Did you ever do the sequal for the secrit to my success?
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I will do what I can, I'll do some things to help in a bit. I have to pace myself on what I promote, because I tend to do that often. Take your time, the best stories are done with the time you take.
Was gunna start reading this next. Seemed interesting. Then I saw the canceled tag. Oh well.