Vinyl Scratch and Beat Tempo have been friends as long as anyone can remember. They began their musical journey together, and only recently grew apart. Beat climbed up the ladder and became a pop rock sensation, while Vinyl remained content DJing local parties, never hesitant to drop the bass. However, the two always kept a promise: never let success or fame change who they are. When the two are reunited, Vinyl realizes that Beat has not been able to keep this promise.
Part of the Rising Sun AU
Chapters (8)
Nice start but I think I can see why you got the downvotes. The whole bit where Vinyl talks about how she and Octavia can't be in a relationship because Octavia is too prissy basically, and then throwing in your OC that we pretty much know is gonna be her love interest is well.......
To be frank it sounds like you're bashing that ship and saying that your OC is the one for her. I know that you probably just wanted to make sure people understand this isn't an Octavia and Vinyl shipfic but maybe you should redo that part, just be very vague unless it's important to the story.
3238329 It's a nice theory, but that's not what I was intending. Honestly, I just wanted a reason to use the "I preferred di-never mind" joke. Honestly, I think I got downvotes because it's got a sex tag and there's nothing really THAT sexual... yet. But now that you mention it, it DOES kind of seem that way. I'll fix it up.
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Looked at the changes and I think it's a lot better now, good work.
3238628 Hooray! I'm accomplished!
Good stuff this chapter, though you may want to calm down with the antics a bit.
3247327 Well, I was sure I've been repeating it enough, but just in case:
They're both nutcases. Maybe not clinically insane, but they're just a little less than everyday sane.
Things do get a little more serious as time goes on, but it's tagged as comedy for a reason
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True, I do have a question though.
Are we going to see chapters with Beat's POV soon or is that going to be saved till he apparently fucks up?
Also it sucks that I'm the only one who commented so far.
3247424 That's usually how it goes. Not often I even get comments :P
I'm currently writing chapter three, and though you WILL see Beat's POV, I'm not exactly sure when a good time to switch will be.
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Usually I would expect just about when he screws things up, like just before or right after.
The pacing might be a bit quick, but that could just be me knowing somewhat where this is heading.
i like this story. u should have went into more details about her hs - colege years thought very few spelling errors. ummm alsow more details on vinyl and beat early days on how they became freinds, other then that uv got my like.love it need more
3252800 Yeah, you're spoiled!
Spoiled it! Spoiled it! Spoiled it!
3262632 Hue hue hue hue
Holy shit I demand this story to be featured. Right now. Do it. You not doing it. Oh wait, black ops 2 just finished loading, gtg.
3272356 If I knew how to I'd do it.
So......not only did Beat manage to go to a different town, have a photo shoot with arguably the best and also one of the pickiest in the business, and then get back to the restaurant, but he managed to do it before a waiter could come back with just two beers.
So either I'm missing something here, or Silver Service is the worst waiter in the histo-
Okay, the first option then.
Also;
Indulgent Mares, the best fine dining magazine in Equistria.
3272759 Uh... Inquiring Mind, the pony that greeted them when they came in XD
And, remember, he DID say he was taking orders for others as well. I never said Silver Service got right to the drinks, and we've seen how fast some of Photo Finish's photoshoots are.
ALSO, he was exaggerating when he said he went to a different town XD He was just taken out of the building.
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Oh.......
Next time though, just go with the first name, because I actually thought you just misspelled "I'm".
About the photo shoots, you don't see all of it during the episode and what you do see isn't the most accurate. It takes far longer than what they showed for them to decide the right pose, lighting, camera angles and all other kinds of things. All of which they have to change to fit Beat so that he looks his best. And then there's the actual preparation time for Beat himself, make up and other such stuff.
This ends up taking hours, and that's with professional models that understand when someone says something like "You're just not glowing enough."
Sigh, that's what watching America's next top model because you find it easier to just sit there rather than finding something else to do when your sister watches TV.
As for the waiter, this is apparently a highly exclusive restaurant and they only ordered two beers. If it took longer than 7 to 10 minutes then I would be surprised.
3272823 Stop questioning irrelevant plot points! You're not programmed to do so!
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The time of man has come to an end, soon all will be in the cold nano metal hands the smirkytheadians!
3272951 Anyway, I had intended it to take place after they were leaving, but I felt an interruption while they were there would've had more of an effect.
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It was a good idea, but maybe you could have just had him leave (obviously leaving Vinyl pissed) but upon asking how long it would take he stops outside the restaurant and schedules it for the next day, and to add a bit of tension you could have that being the day Vinyl get's to take where they go.
3272996 that's too much too soon.
You know, I think Vinyl is judging a bit too much here. I mean it hasn't even been a week as far as I know and she's already decided that he's changed and has completely broken the promise. I get that she would have little doubts but I don't think she would end up crying in front of all of them like that just from the three little things.
Also;
....heh...hehehehe......Muhahahahahahahahahahaha!
My influence becomes ever more powerful!
3291344 Think about this: She's known Beat basically all her life. I don't know about you, but I've known a few people that long as well, and I can tell very quickly when they've changed. Thing is, Vinyl knows the following:
Old Beat would have said "Fuck it, I'll play local shit for free because it's fun!"
Old Beat would have said "Fuck you, Photo Finish, I'm busy."
Old Beat would have said "Fuck those guys, I'm about to teach a little filly to sing! And hopefully she doesn't mimic my language."
Both she and Octavia can see how far Beat's fallen with just a few actions. And you gotta remember, that promise was sacred to her. It was a symbol of their powerful friendship, and if Beat really has broken his promise, then that means it isn't a stretch to say he'll drop Vinyl too if it benefits him.
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My world is a cold dark empty place, filled with nothing but solitude and silence.
Don't have friends that I've known since the beginning of my childhood so yeah, not able to really judge this I guess. I do see your reasoning though.
Come on, write more! The story is getting interesting!
3297444 Mama Mia, I'mma workin' on it!
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You're not working fast enough.
There's enough of my fingerprints on this story to convict me of three murders.
3307554 Not really... to be perfectly honest, all this had already been floating around in the back of my mind, your suggestions were just what made me decide to use them.
I was going to say something. Shit what was it? Umm... Damn it. Never mind.
3310783 Must not have been that important. Here, have a
Looking at all of the story......it's pretty good.
Grammar was fine as far as I could see and the characters seemed.....genuine is a good way to say it I guess. My only complaint is that the story itself seemed kind of short for all the stuff that happened, though that may be just because you wrote it all quite quickly.
Great work on this, nice to see someone not be afraid of doing an OC romance story.
3314545 Well it's not supposed to be that long, in all honesty. The only story of this series that's going to be showing any length is the seventh.
Aw man! I wish there was more!
alright
I have a few other nitpicks, but I'll refrain because this story is too sweet to be overly nitpicky about.
3324927 See, this is why I can't be my own proofreader. I still miss obvious stuff.
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This is why I have my friends Bawss and Hoot, they read my story directly after I update it and then yell at me because it's too short/has mistakes/doesn't fit their headcanon/etc. because I miss all the obvious stuff too.
Hahaha, I love them anyways.
O.O another Pony with Beat.
3438236 Buddy, not to sound mean, but this OC is probably older than yours. I started writing before Season 2 started, and although what you're seeing now is a product of my work after the end of Season 3, Beat's been an idea in my head since I started. Design and personality inspired by SlyFoxHound, and name inspired by Jetset Radio and a random google search for music related words (hence his last name Tempo)
Before I read this, what do you mean by story 5 of virtues?
If there are others, I want to read the first one
3438538 Look through the descriptions in all my stories. Each one has continuity with each other, but you don't actually need to read any others to understand the story. HOWEVER, stories 2, 3, and 4 (Moving the Stars, Chaser, and Home) are going to be rewritten.
This is getting good
Wow! This chapter brung much liquid from my eyes! I have to say this is the best Vinyl fix I've read, granted I've read only a dozen. Everything was nice and related to actual life in its own way, especially how people Change when they taste fame and fortune. Also when something very important to themselves is lost, change occurs almost immediately. Touching in many ways.
However I digress.
10 out of 10 for romance
9 out of 10 for grammar
9 out of 10 for overall story
1 like and a top fave for this story.
3441396 Well, thank you
Not really into the whole "beat tempo" thing because I have abolutely no clue who he is, but you still did a good job developing the plot and making it very interesting. Well done
3461630 Well NOBODY ASKED YOU! Jk,jk, he's an OC. It's not like you're going to know who he is prior.
Ooooooh!
The classical "Friend becomes famous and totally abadons friend and becomes a jerk." cliche, nice move. 