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GjallarFox


I shall slay God for his crimes against me.

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Twilight has been very lonely, and has relapsed on an old habit. Fluttershy has been depressed and lonely for nearly her entire life, and hasn't been able to break her habit. When Fluttershy and Twilight both realize that their habit is a serious problem, maybe they will be able to heal together.

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Nice work. Hit me in the feels since I dabbled in cutting once upon a time. Thankfully, I found it wasn't for me. Sadly, someone dear to me cuts, but I try to help her avoid it when possible. Still, nice work. Very emotive.

Wow. This hits home.

Dang.

Thanks.

Hmmm.... Quite the disturbing story I liked it kind of heartbreaking though that they never got past their habit to live life together.I hope for some kind of sequel or after events if you have that in mind.

This is deep man. Very emotional and interesting. I haven't seen a story quite like this until now, so originality points to you! There was some awkward phrasing where you used the same word or phrase close to each other, but it was only once or twice. Overall good job. :moustache:

Well shit. i thought there was going to be a happy ending. It went fast but that's fine. it was good

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There's an invisible chapter undergoing edits. Forgot to re-adjust the status. :3

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I need to work on more one shots, any ideas???
ANd i can't wait to read whatever you have left

well time to scrap my fic. was starting one kind of similar. i myself have been a cutter for 25 years now. well done. not going to lie i hope this ends well with the invisible chapter.

Not gonna lie, the part with Fluttershy cutting made me cringe not because I can't handle blood and stuff but... I hate it when bad things happen to wings as my headcannon places a rather high value on them... great story and all though.

This story is...darkly beautiful. The pain of loneliness is something that nobody is safe from, no matter how loving our friends our or how plentiful they may be, and it was demonstrated wonderfully in this story. Once again, you've gone and blown me out of the water my friend. Bravo :moustache:

Disturbing and nice at the same time. Nicely done

Marvelous...simply marvelous....

This is exceptional! Good job Darq!

I have had experience on both sides of the line although I'm not proud of it, and this story captured them perfectly. I am startled that you haven't had experience with at least being the one that eased the pain even if you haven't been the cutter. Great story over all.:twilightsmile:

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I honestly have no idea how I'm able to write about things I've never experienced. I've never had my first kiss, yet I write make-out scenes pretty damn well according to my fans, and now I write this and supposedly I did it perfectly. I don't know how I do it.

Thank you for taking the time to comment. :3

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2805869 Anytime! I love commenting on peoples stuff! But no one comments on my stuff:fluttercry:

I loved the story but I was like "Awwww that's it?!" :fluttercry:

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There was only so much story to tell. I couldn't exactly extend it without making it drag too long and kill Twi because of it. I'll write more dark TwiShy whenever it comes to me, but for now, that's it. Sorry.

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2818907 Don't get me wrong, I loved the story. I just like to read a lot at night and your fic had me feeling all warm and fuzzy inside and suddenly I couldn't scroll down anymore. I read it a few times over though cuz it's an awesome fic :)

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Adorable ponies cutting themselves = Warm & fuzzy. ? Am I missing something here?

Either way, thank you very much. If you haven't already, go read 'The Frozen North'. That's a much longer read with lots of warm fluff and adorableness.

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Dude this story almost brought me to tears man I mean really it's pretty heavy stuff

This was a well written story. The Fluttershy x Twilight (idk their ship name sorry). One change I might suggest is change the word cutter to self harmer or something. Some people can think it's slightly offensive to be called a cutter... But overall a really good story.

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I believe the Ship name you're looking for is TwiShy :yay::heart::twilightblush:

I have this thing about not censoring my work. If it offends someone, that's their beef. I won't be apologizing for using terms that I feel are the proper terms. Plus, there are various types of 'self-harmer's out there. Cutters, burners, among others. Either way, the line 'I'm a cutter.' wouldn't quite have that same percussive finality to it if I were to change it to 'I'm a self-harmer.'

I thank you for the honest opinion, but concern me not with the "People might be offended" crap. I don't care about offending people. I stopped caring when people started trying to convince me that a Christmas tree was a 'Holiday tree'.

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Darkly beautiful. I know these feels. Shitty dark feels i've felt. And things i've considered doing, and have done. Beautiful Poetry, once again.

Brings up Bad memories...though it makes me have hope in the end. Maybe i'll find something like that. Love.

Excellent story. Sorry to ramble about stuff.
I'm off to read something happy and great! Like The Frozen North or something you wrote! <3

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The Frozen North is the perfect thing to read after this dark story. It's sickeningly sweet and adorable. It's essentially soul-bleach.

And I like rambling comments. <3

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2871512 I could use that then. I'm off to bleach my soul! <3 Thanks for giving me something to do today btw. Was bored as hell. I'll just read all your work :) <3

About a week ago you recommended that I read this story so I decided to give it a shot. Now that I have finished it, I can honestly ask you this: Why would you do that? :fluttercry: Great story but man it made me sad.

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I was listening to Exile Vilify. On a 10 hour plane ride.

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2931837 Excuses haha, anyway I look forward to the next chapter of Blind :twilightsmile: TwiShy is one of my favorite pairs so I am glad to see a good story for it.

Once again, a very good TwiShy story, I'd give this a 10/10 :D

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One question.

How are your feels?

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Comment posted by flames0199 deleted Aug 1st, 2013
Comment posted by flames0199 deleted Aug 1st, 2013

DarqFox what do u mean, how are my feels? Sorry a bit tired so pardon my stupidness

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How did this story make you feel?

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it made me happy knowing fluttershy gets to be with twilight, and made me feel a bit creeped out that they both cut themselves, I like that in some stories, why?

How can something be so dark and so adorable at the same time?
I'll give you a 3.5/5 on this not my favorite but it was somewhat enjoyable to read.
~Tobben

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This story was not meant to be adorable in any manner. It was meant to be incredibly, soul-wrenchingly dark, with a bittersweet ending. This is not a sweet story. This is as bitter as it gets. Coffee grounds are candy compared to this.

If this story is "adorable" to you in any sense, you may quite possibly need to re-evaluate what you consider "adorable".

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PS: Please do not give me a number rating on my stories, as it actually distracts me from doing my job of writing the story. If you like it, that's great. If you don't that's great. I give zero fucks. My stories aren't written for my followers. They're written for me.

5137764 First off i use the term "Adorable" very loosely and it was more to describe the end part of the story. Plus i'am a very grim dark person myself so anything with the smallest of romantic gestures is cute to me.
Second, I use numbers as a way to scale my likeness of the story, i can stop with the numbers if you like i just use them for an easy way out of writing a long comment about what i like and din't like about a story. I'am rather lazy like that
~Tobben

The scene when Fluttershy talked to Rarity just doesn’t feel right.

This was stupendous! As a former cutter, I will attest to how hard a habit it is to break and how the pain just seems to make things go away. You captured that pain perfectly and really did well in building up the bond between Fluttershy and Twilight!

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