Misconception

by Drizzle Quill

Sequel

Alright, the sequel is up. Here's a link. Hope you enjoy! It's fun to write.

Comments

[quade]

there is a weird glitch with this story in that even when all chapters have been viewed, it still says that there is an unread chapter in the favorite tracker, if this is a problem that could be addressed in some way that would be great, but if not I understand. until it is fixed I will just have to leave the the story in my read later to keep track of it.

[Drizzle Quill]

2949711

I deleted one chapter. Maybe that's what it's showing? I'm sorry, I really have no idea how to fix this, and I don't know if others are having this problem as well.

[Drizzle Quill]

3162253

Thank you! Actually, Applejack doing that is completely explained in the final chapter.

[Lovinlife]

3162257 Yeah, I figured there was more to it.

[Drizzle Quill]

3185710

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed. I left it on a cliffhanger that is continued in the sequel, Clear. I would hope that would help you understand why I left it where I did. Thank you again!

[Lovinlife]

3186448 I'm glad you enjoyed the review.

I do understand that you had left this story on a cliffhanger to allow the reader to draw up their own conclusions, this is just a bit flawed that causes it to not work, in my opinion.

You had originally set up the story mostly around the questions of "What would Applejack and Rarity do?" and "What would Rarity's father do?". The second question sort of takes a back seat in the middle of the story when it goes between Applejack and Rarity and their emotions.

So, at the end of everything, you had answered that main question so the reader's interest had already lessened and you never bring up another question in this story, not talking about the sequel. This is why I think that you could have gone a bit further by showing everyone's final thoughts and ended it on the two questioning their feelings again in more depth...then roll the cliffhanger.

It leaves the reader strangely satisfied yet still aching to see what happens.

I know it sounds like I'm preaching , I just wanted to clarify why I don't think the ending was very well executed.

[Elric of Melnipony]

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[Drizzle Quill]

3221527

It's the fanon name that the fandom has gone with, so I just went with it.

[Themaskedferret]

Very cute.

[ColdGoldLazarus]

Heh, fun story; The sequel should be good!