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Applejack helps Rarity to make a sad thing beautiful, as perfect as it can be and more, and then they decide- well, mostly Rarity actually- that having a foal of their own is a marvellous idea.
Yes. Applejack is somewhat confused too.


Comedy tag for some light-hearted humour and parenting antics.

For 394VikingPinkiePie who inspired this story with her artwork. I highly recommend following the link and browsing her DeviantArt. She also made that adorable cover art.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 54 )

I am not a huge fan of the Applejack & rarity ship, But it was a really good story! It's really cute! Keep on writing it :rainbowkiss:

It's pretty good so far, but I feel as if you skipped so many good parts that could have been told. Rarity doing pregnant pony things, Honeycrisp doing baby things, etc. you just decided to have the foal, skipped to the birth, then skipped ahead a few years. There's more story to tell!

This is super cute and I support this pairing so do continue, please.

I, on the other hand, am a very big fan of the Rarijack ship, and this is a fantastic story so far!
Honeycrisp is absolutely adorable and I can't wait to see what you'll do with her character in the future.
It's a great story so far!
Faved and liked and all that good stuff.
:duck::ajsmug:

A nice feel good story every now and then is great so long as it's as well written as this :twilightsmile:

I admit I didn't love this pairing, but you've made it a lot more believable.

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I'm glad you could enjoy it despite the pairing. :twilightsmile: Thank you for commenting.

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Some of those bits and pieces will be tying into future chapters, don't worry. :twilightsmile: They are some of the most fun parts and I wouldn't dream of overlooking them.
Thank you for the feedback.

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I'm glad you like the pair and the story. :twilightsmile: I definitely intend to continue this, it's too much fun not to.
Thank you for your comment.

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Rarijack is my most favourite of ships and I'm glad you like it too. Thank you very much for commenting with your kind words. :twilightsmile:

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I'm glad I could add to the believability for you. :twilightsmile: Thank you for commenting.

They've been sat there for a good hour now. They've been sat there for that same good hour every single day for the past four weeks

This is why writing in present tense is generally a bad idea; it leads to awkward and grammatically-incorrect constructions like "They've been sat" whenever the author suddenly finds that they need to describe something in the past tense, but can't switch away from present-tense verbs to do it.

My advice? Consider rewriting this whole thing in 3rd-person past tense. Present-tense narrative really only works well for a character's inner thoughts, dream sequences and hallucinations, and so on. (It can sometimes work as first-person narrative, but again, it has to be handled carefully to keep it from going off the rails.) Past-tense narrative reads much more naturally to most readers, and won't require you to resort to awkward constructions like "they've been sat." :twilightsmile:

(An' consider cuttin' back on th' coffee.) :ajsmug:
(What?)
(Yeah, then y'all won't be so tense.)
(*sigh* Say goodnight, Applejack.)
(G'night, Applejack.)

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Firstly, thank you for the constructive feedback. It's very much appreciated. :twilightsmile: In regards to the past tense, I agree completely and grew increasingly aware of the metaphorical grammar murder I was committing as I was writing but lacked the time, and to be honest, the willpower to go back and fix it.
I will do at some point because as you said, it would work far better from the third person past tense and avoid those awkward constructions which continuously haunt me. I'm just far too fond of the present tense. :twilightsheepish:
Once again, thank you for the feedback and I'll get to the rewrite at some point in the future.

Rarijack is probably my favorite ship if we keep it in the mane 6. This is such a cute story thus far so please keep it up. Now I may have missed it but I didn't see mention of if Honeycrisp was an earth pony or a unicorn though.

Adorable! The ship was very well done, and Honeycrisp is d'aww-worthy with a good parent-child dynamic. I very much enjoyed this story. :ajsmug::raritywink:

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Sorry about not making it clearer. :twilightsheepish: It was implied by Applejack saying to her that she 'jus' forgets bein' an' earth pony an' all.' :twilightsmile:
So, yes. Honeycrisp is in fact a unicorn.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story and thank you for the comment.

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I'm very glad you enjoyed it and I hope you'll enjoy the chapters that follow too. :twilightsmile:

LOL uncle discord i bet he's an awesome uncle

This was adorable. I loved it. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you. :twilightsmile: I'm very glad you liked it.

Yay! An update!
I love this story. Everything so far has been great!
The characters interacting is always interesting, but most of all, HONEYCRISP IS ADORABLE! :rainbowkiss:
Seriously, the most adorable OC I have ever seen.
Love you!
:duck::ajsmug:

Haha... I totally thought homophobic attack at first. Well played.

another very cute chapter :rainbowkiss: awesome wedding though :rainbowlaugh: cracked me up!

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Agh! No... Not the Doctor Who memories. Not that episode... It still haunts me!

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I'm really glad you like it! :twilightblush: And yes, Honeycrisp is the most adorable OC. Credit to VikingPinkiePie for making her otherwise this story wouldn't exist but I do try to play my part in amplifying the cuteness as best I can.
Thanks for the comment!

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You know, in all honesty, that thought didn't even occur to me as I was writing. :twilightsheepish: It certainly does give it an interesting angle on it though.

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I'm very glad you liked it. :pinkiehappy: I knew right from the start of writing this that their wedding had to be a disaster. There was no way it could possibly go well. The comedic value was just too great to pass up.

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YES! I WANTED THAT REACTION SO BADLY! :pinkiehappy:

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WHY?! :raritydespair: What did I do to deserve that?!

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You broke a PINKIE PROMISE! :pinkiecrazy:

lol jk... It's fun! :pinkiehappy:

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Don't question me, I can break the 9th wall! :pinkiesmile:

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:rainbowlaugh: you just knew, eh? Gosh, Rarity would smack you if she heard you say that :ajsmug:

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You've brained my broken with your 9th wall breakage skills... :applejackconfused:

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Oh lawd, please don't tell on me! :raritydespair: That mare is scary when she's angry!

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:pinkiesmile: I think I can fix it! Cupcakes!

:pinkiehappy: Hmm...

:pinkiecrazy: Cupcakes...

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No. You did not just pull the cupcakes card on me! You did not just do that!... I am seriously going to have to- to-...
... go and hide in a corner now and cry. :fluttercry:

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... It's okay... I can forgive you in time. Maybe not right now but someday. :fluttershysad:

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I'm not scared any more because AJ, as my personal favourite pony, is obligated to prevent me from catching a serious case of death from her wife. I am almost certainly safe. :unsuresweetie:

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:rainbowlaugh: yeah, I guess you can trust AJ with that

Favorite parts so far:
- The Rube Goldberg Wedding Fire
- Rainbow Dash doing/saying anything

I mean, the whole story's good so far -- awfully heartwarming in parts and honestly I think you did a much better job with the present tense than you give yourself credit for -- but those were the bits which gave me the biggest smiles. :pinkiehappy:

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The temptation to make the wedding a disaster was simply too much to resist. And who doesn't love some Rainbow Dash antics? :rainbowwild:
Anyway, I'm very glad you've enjoyed it so far. :pinkiehappy:

I'm not a big RariJack fan but this is amazing:rainbowkiss:

Heh, it’s been three years, man

Decent chapter.

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I'm nothing if not honest in my author's notes haha. Cheers though!

oh my god i am so so so happy

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