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Luna has been banished to the moon by her sister. After 1000 years in isolation, the poor alicorn is truly sorry for what she did and is ready to come home. But when a strange visitor befriends Luna in her isolation, the two find their stories of banishment to the moon merit many similarities. Luna's new friend offers her the key to her escape, but also rekindles the hatred in her heart, a hatred that took the mare 1000 years to forget.



Also, cover art not by me! I'm working on drawing ponies, but not a great artist. Cover art by HeriticOfDune

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Comments ( 196 )

Oooh. I like the idea of this.
I'll reserve judgement until Wheatley appears, but I can't wait to see it!

So... did Chell miss Earth's moon and portal Equestria's instead, or did Celestia exile Luna to our moon, or are you going with the more extreme conjectures that put Portal 2 around 100,000 years after the first, in which case we could guess that the Combine is gone, humans are extinct, and ponies took over the world?

Even though this crossover has been done before, it is well written, so I will be tracking to see what spin you bring it.

169676
In the first chapter of the game, the emergency AI states that Chell has been in suspension for "9.9.9.9.9.9.9 -bzzzt" days. This is not the full amount of time, she spent more than that. But just by that, doing a quick calculation leaves us with aprox. 27397 years. The human race is 100000 years old, a lot of shit can happen on 30000 years. It is more than that in reality, only god knows home many millennia we are talking about here... It is perfectly possible that Equestria is Earth on thousands of years in the future.

"So you sent your own sister to the moon? I assisted a fat orphan in sending two monstrosities to that white ball in the sky." I cant help but think this idea came from the Celestia-GLaDOS letter Ellen McLain read :/. But good job anyway!

169676 I know this is a popular crosover, i'm trying to take a new (or rather, less used) spin to it. And I had the same thought pattern as LorenzoP, about how 30000 years have passed and all. Thanks for the criticism, though, i'm already thinking about a part two if I have time with my other story and school and all.

169765 I have seen that video, and I would be lying if I said it didn't plant a seed in my mind. I'm trying to use only original ideas in my story though... but if I do seem to be mimicking other stories, it is completely coincidental, trust me! :pinkiehappy:

Take my first born in exchange for more chapters. Do it NOW:flutterrage:! You think this is a choice:rainbowhuh:? YOU BETTER TAKE THIS BABY:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

Tracking! I really liked how you portrayed Celestia, not as a mentally unstable despot, but rather as a kind ruler doing her best. I also love the moon rovers as her 'friends', and the way you spent more than one sentence on the story exposition. Can't wait to see more!

Honestly I'm not sure where everyone is getting at with a Luna and wheatley meeting. I've never seen one done before but then again I'm relatively new compared to most here.

I can't wait to see where this goes, tracked.

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Valve has been mum about how much time passed between the games, so it could be 30,000 years, or as little as 10. My personal head-canon is between 30 and 200 years (I assume the Announcer was malfunctioning, and there is honestly no way those potato batteries would still be there after several millennia), enough time that Chell can have a happy ending in a world freed of the Combine oppression by Gordon Freeman... but this is not really the place to debate such things. Keep up what you are doing, I look forward to reading the next chapter.

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http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/09/story-of-cores-and-alicorn.html

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

:twilightsmile: I'm tracking to see where this story goes

Space pony. Got to meet the space. YAH. Cause we're in space. SPPAAAAAAAAACE.

Next chapter will hopefully be uploaded tonight, waiting for my proofreader. I expect the REAL action to begin about chapter 3!

I liked Wheatley's reaction when he met Princess Luna, just like the frantic scatter-brain there, but I appreciate how you expanded on the pensive regret he showed at the end of the game to develop his character. I look forward to seeing his relationship with the Princess blossom, but don't forget about poor Space Core! That guy's naive bliss at having achieved his life long goal will be the perfect comedic foil to the mournful exiles.

And Rick and Fact are out there too, right?

OH MY GOD, YOU'RE A TALKING PONY!

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

My stars, take them, you must.

183947 They were never shown out there, but they could have gone in the giant vortex. They could be anywhere...

183947 I think we'll have just enough wackiness with the Space core alone, not even accounting for Wheatley being... well, Wheatley. Thanks guys for all the criticism and support, and I think I can pay my bills now with all these stars!:pinkiehappy::heart::pinkiehappy:

admit it.. you read that in his voice.

Awesome.
That's really all there is to say on the matter.

all I can say: WHEATLEY!!!:pinkiehappy:

Okay, this one's kind of dark... I needed Wheatley to be a little more evil than before, so if he seems just a smidge out of character, i'm sorry!:raritycry: I tried to rationalize it! Also, like always, comment and proofread all you want!:moustache:

Well, Elements will make Luna okay again... But I wish Wheatley was more of a good funny guy... You know, I really have to finish Portal 2
But seriously you should have Wheatley the way he was in previous chapter

A few minor spelling and grammatical issues, otherwise it flows just fine!

On Wheatley's character, it's not too much of a stretch from the Portal 2 Wheatley. We honestly don't know how being stuck on the moon would affect him, we just know he regretted letting the power of running the Enrichment Center get to him. Maybe his desire for Luna's friendship may be a bit OOC, but it's not evil.

All in all, a good, solid read.

Needs moar Space core.
I eagerly await the next update.

And then they punted space core to the sun!!Yay~!

awesome story, I only found a couple of spelling issues, but otherwise, fine! I really liked it!:pinkiehappy:

What!?
Wheatley is the bad guy!?:pinkiegasp:

Dammit! I had twenty bucks on Space Core!

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SSSPPPAAACCCEEE!!!
And now back to your regularly schedueled doldrums.

Sorry that Wheatley had to be evil, but this story needs one bad guy, and now it has two! Maybe Wheatley will change, who knows? I'll go through and fix, but if there are any specific grammatical or spelling errors bothering you, it would make things go faster to give specifics! I'm really bus with school, you know!

Also, a quick note on my next chapter; there will be one part that NO ONE will like, not even me. DO NOT KILL ME!!!!:applecry::fluttercry::raritydespair: IT WILL GET BETTER!!!! So save your initial reaction of Chapter 4, and just be patient! Also, i'm looking to write a funny story for once, anyone have any ideas they are dying to see made real?

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You're not going to murder Space Core, are you??:pinkiegasp: Because you know, if you do, nobody will ever forgive you.:flutterrage:

I am disappointed to see Wheatley take a turn toward the Dark Side after he was making progress in the right direction. Despite how you rationalized it, it still seems like character regression to me; we know Luna eventually gets a happy ending but it would be tragic, neigh a crime of poor vision, if you have Wheatley going through the exact same path as from the game, to suffer the same, or worse, fate. I think that even a "moron" would have learned his lesson the first time.

aww is this another dead fic?

245745 No, just taking a while. Life gets in the way, man! :ajsleepy:

Thanks for being so patient, everypony! :pinkiehappy: Here's another chapter for you to read! Any comments are helpful, and remember; by giving me thumbs up's, you help me to pay my rent!:eeyup:

“The stars… will aid in her escape.”
Jesus ! That sent a shiver down my spine for some reason.

250715 Oh,, I got a lot more in store for the Space core, don't worry... (cue evil laughter):flutterrage::pinkiecrazy:

MUAHAHAH HEADSHOT! :pinkiehappy:

celestia just got wheatley'd :moustache:

p.s. AWSOME CHAPTER! ^_^

Whoa, a role for the space core that's not comic relief!

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