thehalfelf, otherwise known as The Black Wizard, is a strange, humanized cactus whose only intention is to 1) play all of the video games and B) ship all the ponies
Pinkie is not always the easiest pony to be around, with her maniac energy and crazy outbursts, but she means well, and she loves her friends dearly. What her friends don't know, is how sensitive Pinkie really is, so what happens when she overhears a discussion had by her friends, about her?
Note: This story is a rewrite of Broken by TheCloudtop.
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"Lets try making a cake-pie!"
REFLECTIONS. REFERENCE.
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Well, Broken was originally written by Cloudy, and Cloudy was with me when I wrote this... and when I write a lot of stuff, really, so I mean, it's the little things.
2132118 Yes, yes it is.
2132267
I know the feeling. Just hold on, and if it gets too bad, tell someone. You'd be amazed how much others can help.
Stay strong, and I'm happy I could have helped.
2132118 "The Little Things eh?"
You don't mean... THESE!?:
Also I'm all for awesomely hidden references to other stories, especially ones by the Cloudtop, you've seen me posting on theCloudTop's blogs once twice or ten times right?
2132313
I'm always there man. I'm doing the same thing.
2132318 Indeed, I haven't talked to you as much though, how did you meet TheCloudTop?
Just reads the description:*sniffle* poor pinkie
. A pretty descent story, thumbs up for me.
P.s. maybe you can read my story my day in Ponyville.
2132364
What is this self-promotion shenanigans?
Just kidding. I've finished four different chapters for four different stories today. I'll go check it out.
2132485
Thank you.
2132958
Yeah it was interesting to write.
2133018
I do comedy well too. And adventure.
Bro, I do life. All day, every day.
But it did kick my ass for awhile. I had to get up and finish editing the Two Good Sisters, so I got over it pretty quickly
2133049
Who is the story guy?
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Beautifully written. And a bad ending too...
Can't say I like if this really would've happened in the show, but I suppose Party of One explains somewhat. And this was a major amusement to my free time. Well done.
This gave me a certain bundle of feels that I find hard to put into words. Anger and hatred directed at the five for being the cause of all this, even if it was a misunderstanding. A lingering feeling of hope and admiration for the 'Old-Pinkie' as she tries to brighten up 'New-Pinkie'. There's the sheer sorrow and pity for both Pinkies, slowly being contorted into a hollow, dark, cold, empty and oh-so chilling sensation in my chest, dulling me to the core, reminding me of how much the other five do take her for granted in the show and how much Pinkie Pie tries for them. How much effort and love she puts into her parties and friendly gestures, often overlooked and ignored. The way she is brushed off as being 'random' or 'crazy', ignorant and in some respects, understatements. 'Party of One' at first, just appeared hilarious and so un-Pinkie I couldn't take it seriously... But now, after reading all these fan-fictions from those who could understand her psychological schisms and mental break-downs, I feel enlightened. Enlightened and so very guilty for misjudging her poor little soul.
Then... Well, then came that bittersweet ending. Royally demolishing my heart, treading and grinding it into the dirt, leaving me with a painful ache of emptiness.
I love you for this but at the same time... I hate your guts for leaving mine with such misery to deal with. Well done, you glorious cunt, you.
2136400
Go read When Good Sisters Go to War. It was specially written to fight off depression. And, though the prologue is short, it sets the mood for the whole thing.
Dammit, these stories always get me...
*crys* this story is just to sad WHYYY!!
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I finally got to read this, but now that i've done it i really dont know what to say. I'll give it my best shot.
It is certainly better than broken on pretty much every point, yet still suffers from some of the same problems in a lesser degree. (Especially twilights comment about pinkie, it is extremely out of place and out of character. while all the others says that they find her slightly annoying, she goes all the way by saying she has mental problems, which is just wrong of her to say) Now that we get to see more of pinkies actual viewpoint it makes a lot moe sense and it is easier to connect to, but it is extremely repetetive.
Nothing, it is a mess. The last sentence was a full summarization of the plot. While reading this, i could not help but think that it was pretty randomly written, it goes from saying that she is depressed, to an actual scene, to repeat of nothing, to more of nothing, to something that does not really fit, to more nothing. And somewhere in there you have some sort of alternate personality pinkie that really does nothing at all except help bring across the point that pinkie really does like nothing.
The story also lacked an actual emotional impact. While it did certainly give off the depressive aura and general feel very, very well, it lacked a real impact. My biggest compliment for 'broken' was the ending.
That extra free is really important for the ending and was what really made the story. Adding that to the end of this story will up it by several points.
Overall it was a great story that i would recommend to people wanting some simple sad emotions, but it does lack on some points and it seems extremely tiring to read for anyone not used to read stretched out stories.
2142145>>2140328>>2136400>>2135028>>2132485>>2132267 Seeing as this story is a rewrite of my own, a rewrite that I asked for, did any of you look at the original? Just curious.
2147720 Thanks. If you could, I would really appreciate it if you would let me know what you think of the original.
...why was this so good?
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Eh, you don't really like either one more than the other. In Pieces is simply Broken with new paint, and a different writing style.
I can't believe I never commented on this.
When I first read it, I was amazed. Not only was I impressed with your work on Last Hope, but now, In Pieces was up there on my favorites (Well, now it is. I was busy that day.).
Great job, dude.
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You just wait for How the Heart Burns. I'm sure you'll love it.
2612439 With all the crap Cloudy's been giving me, he'll rip me a new one if I don't.
2612439 is it bad that I like the idea of Pinkie dying and Pinkamena regaining control?
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I didn't write this, man, this is a rewrite of a friend's story that I didn't even want to do in the first place. I did it for him, and since I don't really like writing sad, and I have billions of other story ideas, I don't think this will be getting a sequel. Sorry.
*Looks sadly at Pinkie* Awe Pinkie Pie..... :'(
Wow....I really liked this. Some moments had things a bit too rushed, but other than that, really enjoyable.
And emotional. Also, ending it there avoided the difficult task of a having a realistically paced recovery. Not bad ^_^
Godamn. How do I even word response that? My heart hurty. Sad face.
Big mac? You good bud?
I get up anyway, life's an upstream battle against Godzilla while a stick, there's no place for giving up
Sometimes I just want to go all " WHAT THE FUCK IS A KILOMETER *EAGLE SOUNDS, GUN SHOTS, AMERICAN MUSIC*" on Rainbow dash
And you do? Lickle biatch of a lifeless husk?