Caleb Serusa
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This is really interesting. You get a fave.
Sentence structure could use a little work in places, and I noticed the absence of several speech marks. Other than that, good.
thank you very much for your reviews :D I'm sorry the grammar and that still needs work, still trying to get to grips with it I'm afraid. but hopefully its not too difficult to read
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No, not unreadably bad.
You might consider altering the bit where Celestia takes a gander at Luna's genitals. Came off a bit incest-creepy.
This is an interesting concept. Let's see if Luna can be fixed.
This is good. Onward to more!
This could use some editing in terms of grammar. In terms of the story itself, don't stop whatever you're doing to make me want more.
Update?
Seriously? Luna had to bow to Celestia when in court?
well I'm going very AU here but I figure there's a good chance when they were first gaining their powers Celestia had ever reason to let it go to her head. Not in an overwhelming dictator way but she had a lot of arrogance and a sense of entitlement due to being, well, the ponies god. And it was probably natural to put down her sister without realizing what she was pushing her too. All because she felt this was how things were supposed to be.
Whether I can continue to make sense of this mindset, (if I've even succeeded in the first place) remains to be seen
would love to know what it is that Luna wanted
( and hope it is positive and won't bring pain to Celestia)
But I am glad Luna understood that it is not really worth it to gain the love of ponies that doesn't really care for her, hack even from twilight and the rest for the mare.
If they truly want to help her, they would had forgiven her, guide her, remind her that she is free if not in person than in letter. But so far I am seeing only the doctor (or doctors willing to help but Luna only agree that only one can check up on her) and Celestia making an effort on wanting to help and make her better.
Really glad right now that Luna knows that her "friends" are basically her personalities and she now have the knowledge as actual proof that Celestia mean what she said though she is confuse on what had happen.So that Luna can continue on walking forward to recovery.
What I don't understand is that why Luna has fangs?
Would be nice to know that Celestia woke up with their hooves together
Looking forward for the next update
This is now one of my favorite works of fanfiction, in any fandom, ever.
Fucking feels are being raped over and over.
I just finished reading this in one go then thought to myself "ohgodwhy" because now I have to wait for the next chapter. It's just that good.
There's nothing specific I can really pick out that really appealed to me, luna's mental state, the relationship dynamic between her and her sister, too many things to list really. So Instead I will simply say this, I approve.
thank you very much for your comments guys
damn so nervous to check them but im like 
they don;t hate it!
Little Q & A, Luna having fangs is a little embellishment on my part. Figured that being possessed for several hundred years would leave some side effects on Lunas body, plus it was a way to make her even more scary and intimidating to the ponies. On the outside at least
But anyway thankies again :)
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to be indifferent in the beginning to angry than sad (crying and heartbroken in my part) than happy again than sad all over again in such a short time
I miss Twilight
Great story, pretty well-written.
Yes, your grammar is improving, but a proofreader probably wouldn't hurt
Not bad.I wish Luna will be fine. Waiting next update!
Update?
Love it! I hope this has a happy ending.
This is fantastic! I'm really glad that somwone has finally written a story about this and you have done a very good job so far. I think that you've done a great job showing how someone would act after that 1000 year isolation and any grammar/syntax errors really don't detract from the story (although I have seen quite a few). I am definitely looking forward to seeing more
Keep up the awesome work!
Update?
sorry guys for the long wait. i am working on the next chapter promise. just work and life are conspiring to make it difficult
can't set a date but its almost done. 
This was magical
I cant help but notice that Luna has feet.
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sorry
i check my work as best i can but always seem to miss stuff. hope the little grammar problems don't detract too much from the story
This. Right here. That just sealed my thoughts on how this story ends, and i'm ecstatic for it. I know it won't end exactly the same way i'm currently thinking, but the ending's general feeling will be the same.
Just found this last night. My curiosity's been piqued, Caleb. Faved, thumbed, tracked.
If you want anyone to look over your stuff before you post it I wouldn't mind doing it. I really like what you're doing here with the sisters' relationship (though I hope it doesn't go the incest route) and Luna's behavior is very believable. This is the kind of really dark AU I like.
Feels errywhere.
i want this to end in pure anguish for Celestia
i honestly do
and i hate myself for it
and i love myself for it
i want suffering
i want happiness
i want a sisterly hug
i want sisterly hatred
i want
i want
TRUE TRAGEDY, ANGUISH, PAIN AND SUFFERING!!!!
a happy end
so you DO think of her as a dictating self-proclaimed goddess! i was fearing there for a second
now, im ready for the hate but i need to say it, im 100% with noble on this. something as loose as luna in this senario should to full extent be considered a danger and not thinking of her as such is folly and naivety on a disgusting level
also: “Luna is my sister. We grew up together. Nothing will keep me away from her. Throw all the arguments and objections you want at me and I will ignore them”
this sentence right here proves what i just said and firmly supports the suggestion that celestia should as soon as possible abdicate as a monarch of any political, governmental or military power
This was best part of story. I hate politics, but story have more logic now. Hope Luna will be fine
CURSES!!!
thank god
I WANTED HEARTBREAK!! HATRED! ETERNAL AND UNLIMITED HATRED!!!!
thank you for this better conclusion
I WONT STOP!!! I WANT TRAGEDY!!! DEATH!!! HATRED AND SCORN!!!
i think that that is enough of you for now
I SHALL NEVER BE SILENT!!! IM HERE, IN THE DEEPEST CORNERS OF YOUR MIND!!! IM HERE AND IM A PART OF YOU, YOU HEAR ME!?!?
I. AM. YOUUUUUUU
yes you are but we are sated for now. he doesn't feel the lust anymore
this is actually not on exaggeration. this story is making me feel these emotions and that tells me that this story is Great. (yes, that is Great with a capital G)
This story is sooo f**king good!!!!
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nope just an accident. never seen any of G1.
One thing still bothers me. Why would Celestia be checking out Luna when she "presented" herself a few chapters back. Why would she even think that at that time?
This is shaping up to be one amazing Luna fic.
Looks like Google don't likes your fanfic. The usual way of finding everything (fimfiction Name_of_Fanfic) don't work for Lunacy is expected. Pity, I lost a week, waiting for update on fanfiction.net.
Please continue. I rarely like fanfics where Luna was possessed by some daemonic entity, but you pulled it surprisingly well.
Heu! Poor Luna.
I really hope that Luna's public speech don't end in total spectacular disaster like I expect. At least she still will have that party and thus chance to befriend six very crazy mares.
Especially particular "pretty little mage".
Schizophrenia =/= Dissociative Identity Disorder. Sorry. Psych geek here. It sounds like a psychosis, but frankly, if I could diagnose your Luna (not that I'm qualified) I'd probably diagnose her with bipolar 1 with psychosis.
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honestly had to wiki it and pick the one that seemed most appropriate lol.
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The wiki magic didn't tell you that DID and Schizophrenia are different?
I don't think she has Schizophrenia. It took A WHOLE LOT of qualifications to receive that diagnosis back in the DSM 4. That doesn't seem like something they'd change in the DSM 5.
You should probably look up Bipolar 1 with psychosis... That seems a better fit.
Yikes, this is probably bigoted of me, against schizophrenics, but hey, if the shoe's too big, maybe she shouldn't be wearing it.
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naw its cool. learned a long time ago Wikipedia doesn't know all the secrets of the universe. but i will have a look at bipolar disorders, always had an interest in such disorders, they're very fascinating
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I hope I'm not overstepping my bounds, but you may want to look up neurodiversity bloggers too, and perhaps let that ideology inform your treatment of Luna.
Update?:
Heh. I was listening to this song http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b2jmC8-bP5g when i found this story.
And here I am.
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What?
Would you pass up the opportunity?
sorry everyone just got really bad writers block but its still coming! Just trying to figure out how to finish it off correctly and its driving me nuts!
but promise havent given up on the story 
i w8 more. More love for woona
I liked this a lot. I feel like the long length was worth it. I knew something was up with Prince (un)Noble. There were some typos like forgetting quotation marks when breaking up quotes with action ( ex., "she yawned, this was") and its/it's confusion but it was still legible.