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BRILLIANT! Can't we get something with the Princess'?

EDIT: I REALLY want to see Celestia's reaction to Twilights letter, PLEASE!

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I wrote an extra paragraph into this chapter just so you guys would have SOMETHING for that

>Finally reach Twilight chapter.
>It's right after Dashie chapter.
>My Body Is Not Ready.
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Brilliant. I was not expecting that at the end

Great ending

Good on ya, dude. Enjoyed this one. Hope to see more by you in the future.

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this story so much!!!
Any more? Please more!

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She's cute when she knows her place.

1779703 Cutness....killing me...*gasps for air and finaly goes limp.*

I loved this story far more than i ever should have... eh am not complaining!

Gentle breeze guide you home, and a warm smile welcome your return.

1778544 IKR!

could you make a story with Celestia Please

Ah. Sad to see this over.

There are some nice hooks for a sequel, though; nameless dude (or dudette) comes back for some more stories, and Discord manages to "step through" their mind into reality, or manages to channel some of his energy through them. In that case, you could make the story about somepony else entirely, since the most likely victims'd be the ponies he/she hangs out with rather than the Elements.

This here end does seem somewhat final. Still, a man can dream...

super fucking hot

Could we have a bonus chapter where he takes both Luna and Celestia? Or at least a chapter with Luna and Discord to show where Luna was the entire time

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Well, to be fair, Return of Harmony takes place BEFORE Luna Eclipsed, so technically she hadn't made her big reveal yet
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*embarrassed face* I'll be over here slamming my head against the wall if you need me :x

Amazing clop. Amazing detail. Amazing, delicious, orgasmic mind breaking manipulation. Yet I pray to God you burn in hell.

Yikes! Well, it was an interesting read. A bit dark at times but every fetish (is that the word?) matched the character so I kinda liked it.

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It certainly was a fun experiment. Not doing anything like this again any time soon, thankfully

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Even so I have to say this might the very second Dark clop fic (or any mind break/control fic for that matter) that didn't end in: And he/she raped the shit out of the mane six happily ever after.
Just for that I can proudly say that I'm clapping my hands as hard as I can for your story.

1800146 Grammar Nazi AWAY!

Well that was awesome.

Wait, how about a sort of sequel that features the Mane Six after Discord's 'victory'? To see how they adjusted to their new life style?

This song came on in playlist just when I started this chapter. Creepy coincidence.
If you haven't guessed, Twilight is my favorite pony, and seeing her broken like this was quite interesting.
You did a brilliant job with this story, destroying the Elements of Harmony in very believable ways.
I'm glad you brought up what he would do with Princess Celestia, as I was going to make a suggestion that you do a bonus chapter with her.
However, now I'm curious, what would he do about Luna?
I'm very happy you brought us back to the real world (figuratively speaking) at the end, I'm not sure I could have handled thinking Equestria had been plunged into Chaos.
I am looking forward to reading more of your most recent tale, keep up the amazing work friend.

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That is indeed the joke

The Draconequus spoke joyfully, as if his success was a matter of total celebration.

Well, it kind of IS for him. If you had a plan, and everything went perfectly, and you were the one on top of everything else, YOU'D be pretty damn happy too, right? You're a good writer, but you leave so much to be desired and you state things that don't help in any way or are just wrong or obvious. I'm criticizing you, but rather than saying 'piece of shit.' I'm telling you what the issue is, I'm being harsh but truthful. I'd be more than willing to help because I want this to do as well as it can.

1829149 I thank you for taking your time to do that, then. A lot of people could very well say "this sucks, have a dislike" and move on, but just that much is good for my improvement. It's true I end up messing up my writing sometimes with unnecessary details (and occasionally state the obvious for effect), but I'm always trying to improve (even though I just write as a hobby, I'm no author ), so thank you

1830115 I'm no author either, hell I wrote THIS, but I still know how a good story sounds. I'd be more than happy to help you revise it, after all, I am an editor for some authors here on FimFiction and they think I do pretty well.

Sweet, sweet mind manipulation

There are two of us(Discord PICTURE) in the comment section of this chapter, can you find the second one....?

I know this is supposed to be a really kinky clopfic and all, but it reads more as a character study than anything: it just makes me feel really sorry for Discord.

The framing device paints the entire story as a really sad attempt at passing the time, and while Discord's over-the-top narration gave me the occasional laugh, it also just makes me think "...wow, this dude is really lonely and sexually frustrated." I guess being trapped in stone might do that to somepony, but it's pretty pitiable.

I can't tell if that was intentional or not, but I'll give it an upvote for the occasional laugh I got reading it, and the depressing interpretation of Discord's character.

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I did not actually have that in mind outside of just writing an entertaining story with some silly bits here and there to compensate for the dark parts, but I'm glad you managed to articulate your thoughts on it so well. It's still just a very odd piece overall

And soon after one of the most successful clop companies was created, wowing and disgusting the world with its line of risque stories, bringing in a unprecedented amounts of profit in the first week.

The world's sanity was preserved however as the entire business and all it affiliates soon found that no, there is no actual breathable atmosphere on the moon.

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I love happy endings.

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I hate sad endings, with the characters being damaged without repair and stuff. I always make it to real to myself.

Thats why I actually really liked your story, because it was fake even in the story itself and.............woah, going to stop thinking now

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Haha, well I write mostly in the comedic and romantic sense. I don't think I'm capable of writing a truly sad ending, at least for now, anyway

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Well you do good work otherwise and frankly, I just don't understand why people like to write sad endings.

I mean, the whole point of reading, or writing as in my case, is to delve in a whole new world, whether to escape from real life or just for a little recreation. Sad endings just don't fit that idea I have, you can have sad stuff happen, but they have to be resolved in a manner that allows for happiness in the end.

Well geeze, went along that line for no reason. Hope you keep up the good work.

Edit: I realise after reading this people might take this the wrong way. I'm wasn't trying to insult or belittle people who write sad or tragic endings. I just don't like them and I can't see myself writing them for the above and other reasons. This does not mean I believe that there is a proper way to make or end stories, there is none and even if there was I wouldn't know it.

Some stories can only realistically end with a sad or tragic climax, and I admit some of the best stories I've read fall under that category.

Apologies to anyone who felt irked by this.

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Y U NO HAS SURPRISE BUTTSEKS?

Once again, another good story. Characterisations were nice, the alterations befitting the mares, and how you changed most, if not all, of the circumstances from the canon episode to fit the idea. I also like how Discord was so casual at the end. And, of course, him overdoing it with Fluttershy's corruption. What hath he unleash'd?

I'd be less ambiguous but I'm not functioning very well on limited sleep.

2765508 too true.

2765508 Yes.

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Why would you respond to the same comment twice?

2790268 Because there's no fun in making sense.

2866946 I did not know that I just googled it and typed what I found. thanks for informing me.

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No problem.

Sick sense of humor?

Why didn't Joker have that kind of disclaimer?