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What if two mares of great magic had been born in each other's towns?
Twilight Sparkle in Hoofington, and The Great and Powerful Trixie in Canterlot?
Would that change their destiny?

Brought up in the rich and high-class city of Canterlot, Trixie had all life could offer. When her magic began to blossom, her parents did everything they could to make sure she got into Celestia's Private School for Gifted Unicorns. Out of sheer pride, Trixie knew she had to pass that entrance exam and make her parents proud.
Unlike the test of the Dragon Egg that is posed to students who have already been accepted into the school, the test posed to Trixie was to lift a Phoenix feather a foot into the air. This test is actually much more difficult than it sounds, as it requires perfect control and power to lift such a magical item.
After struggling with the feather for almost an hour, Trixie was about to give up when a crashing boom ricocheted across the sky, and startled her into awaking power she didn't know she had, causing her to not only lift the feather far into the air, but also imbue it with life and create a newborn phoenix. As the instructors dived for cover from the brilliant blue flames that were beginning to surge, a red phoenix could be seen winging off towards the Solar Tower.
Before any lasting damage could be done, Celestia arrives to calm the awoken magic, and take the young filly under her wing as her personal student.

So it seems that destiny has indeed changed... But will the change of two fillies' paths change the path of a black Alicorn's as well?

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Comments ( 36 )

Yeesh... AJ's just tryin' to be neighborly. :ajbemused:

This has some very cute ideas- I particularly love the Sapphira/Spike twist- and it's written very competently. I particularly love that you've remembered that Trixie is kind of an ass and not a great big woobie. It'll be interesting to see how she manages to turn things around!

Certainly sounds intriguing, plus I'm a suckers for the ol' What If- particularly when they're creative enough.:rainbowdetermined2:

This has the funky seal of approval! :pinkiehappy:

I will be following this. Have a like and fave.

Interesting... I'm very curious to see how Twilight is getting on, and how their meeting goes, and how Trixie does with the other elements, and...! I guess what I'm saying is I want MORE!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Good job with this so far. Didn't notice any spelling/grammar errors and I liked how Trixie was handled. You kept her personality without the speech habit.

Looking forward to seeing Twilight's role - I hope you don't keep it as small as Trixie's was in the show. At some point things are going to have to diverge to the point where each scene isn't a 1:1 match to the show, or I'll lose interest.

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Well, the story is certainly going to parallel the show, as that is the style of AU I'm planning, but I definitely won't be sticking nearly as closely to it once I get the first "episode" done.
Right now I'm doing it so you can see how Trixie differs from Twilight in the same situations.
And when Twilight does show up, I promise you she will have a major role in the story... If for no other reason than she is one of my favorite characters. :raritywink:

Hmmm, I wonder how will they defeat NMM when Trixie is clearly not on good terms with every future Element Bearer.

Interesting! Looking forward to more!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

This is very intriguing. Please, continue this. I think this fic is wonderful and I would like for you to continue regaling us with this delightful swapping story. :twilightsmile:

There was that “F” word again. :rainbowlaugh: Poor Trixe. Friends? WHADUHELL ARE THOSE?! :trixieshiftright: This chapter was absolutely lovely CG. I daresay await on bated for another. :twilightsmile:

Personally, I don't like such short chapters, but I will forgive you this one time. :pinkiecrazy:

Yes! Loving this! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

I just want to know, how will you work with the fact that the Element of Magic is away from this story? Will Trixie become the Element? Or will they not be able to defeat Nightmare Moon? Or maybe even when the elements spark to their associated ponies Twilight will just randomly get teleported there? Actually that last one could end up being pretty funny... please use that if you're not already past that point yet!

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Don't worry, I've got it all planned out. I won't end the story with a cliffhanger. Just trust me,M'kay? :raritywink:

Boy...that escalated quickly. :rainbowderp: As always CG, beautiful chapter. You never fail to disappoint. :twilightsmile:

she could hardly breath

1. Breathe.

At least Rainbow didn't accuse her of being a spy... yet... maybe... I DON'T KNOW!!!:pinkiesad2:

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Rainbow doesn't give enough of dang about Trixie to follow her.

Some of you may notice that I changed my cover art. This is due to a very very popular fanfic having also been using what I had chosen as well. Can't blame'em for that, it was an awesome pic. I found this picture the other day, and due to a scene in this chapter, decided it was just as fitting. If, however, any of you have a picture you think would make perfect cover art, by all means, mail me a link :raritywink:

Love the new cover art!

It's interesting how you have trixie going through the obsticales to the castle all by herself without the others to help

I think this new artwork seems to fit the story better anyway. :yay: It's interesting to see how you are having her grow in maturity through trial in the story. Most people would just prefer to keep her snobbish, which is why I love this. I shall await a new chapter, even more eagerly than the last. :twilightsmile:

Loving the story! Keep up the good work!:twilightsmile:

As stands right now, I don't see how Trixie is going to become anyponies friend. Let alone, figure out the deal with the 'Mare in the Moon.' However, Trixie probably needs some humble pie and she sure as heck not going to get it in Canterlot. BTW,

shooting off at top speed to Faust knows where.

I don't see Trixie thinking that.

G.P.T. Lulamoon... Actually it is interesting that she isnt great and powerful when celestia's protege. And she went in alone... Maybe better than the elements of disharmony but... Will be watching this one -- G.P.T is about to have some issues.

Personally, I like short chapters. As long as there still is quality.

Trixie is not going to bring back Celestia, is she? Trixie went in alone, therefore, there will be no spark to bring forth the sixth Element. Let alone be able to bring back the other five when Nightmare Moon shatters them. I just don't know what will become of Trixie afterwards.

with a ll their might

You have an extra space in here.

Very interesting... She is making by all by herself... for now that is:pinkiegasp: Other than that, I have no coherent answer that can come off the toppa my head...:pinkiesad2:

Not bad I have enjoyed it so far. Keep it up C:

I've decided to put this story on Hiatus until after I've finished Ascension. There's several stories I'm working on, and I have to admit this one's slid rather low on my priority list.
Not abandoned- Just sleeping. I promise I'll finish it, possibly by roping my friend into writing it with me. XD

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