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Just a dream I once had, all of it


It's true, Celestia has a lot on her plate: the stewardship of Canterlot High School has recently fallen into her lap; her dear younger sister has recently started a job at the very same high school; and the details of her romantic life are... best left unsaid. Any sane individual wouldn't want to add a child to that mix, but those adorable bright blue eyes were irresistible.

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This seems VERY interesting!

Promising start! I'll be keeping an eye on this one

Little Sunset is just adorable... also, BLOOD?!

So a tiny, innocent Sunset falls through the portal at a much younger age, call me intrigued. I'm guessing Princess Celestia just took her on as a student, and maybe while playing feel through on accident. I'm curious as to how Princess Celestia is coping with missing her, is she orphan, does her family know she's gone? What will happen once the portal is active again. I'd love for Princess Celestia to visit EQ Girls world and try to find her lost ward someday, maybe with Twilight.

Not a bad start. Aside from Sunset's talking, I'm interested in seeing where this goes. :ajsmug:

Hahaha, yeah, Sunset's talking bothers me as well, and I'm the fool who decided to write it! I really wanted to get a bit more nuanced with how the portal affects ponies who crossover because I felt like the movie handwaved a lot of it as weird interdimensional magic. First thing that comes to mind: what happens when you get a creature who speaks the same language but is used to crafting it with a much different mouth. Viola.

Glad you enjoyed it!

Trust me, I was in a similar situation when I began what would my 2 year period of writing eqg stories here. And while I'm not 100% proud of some of them, people enjoyed them for what I did during that time. :twilightsmile:

Muttering from MHA?

Curious on several levels, not least that comment about the princess's eyes. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.

"S-s-shtay awwray." The words spilled out of her mouth, garbled, almost unintelligible, not like a lisp or the frustrating struggle with an unfamiliar language, but like she had not the slightest inkling how to use her mouth.

Im so sorry but i read Stay Away in a pick me or some accent. I REALLY emphasized the h

I love your prose; it tickles my brain in a most pleasing way.

Ahhh, thank you! I've been working on it

D'awww, Sunset sounds really adorable so far in the story, yet I am also unsure of the year this could be set in within the human world, given Celestia is only in her 30's, but who knows. I hope she can take care of the poor girl, considering Sunset is somehow a toddler or just really of a young age or so in this.

Celestia idly stirred her coffee, swirling forth recent memories. The girl - Sunset Shimmer - hadn't interacted with her after the call had been put into emergency services, too focused on flexing the digits of her hands and feet as though she had never seen herself before. When she caught a glimpse of herself in the polished surface of the Wondercolt statue, she had turned white as a ghost, bringing balled hands to her face and feeling it as though she had to assure herself that everything was where it was supposed to be. Celestia caught some muttering about 'ponies', 'princesses', 'Equestria', and much more, each nonsense word deepening the pit of worry in Celestia's stomach. She was no child psychologist, but she did have to take classes on child development in college, and she vividly remembered a lecture in which the professor - an old, gray-bearded sentinel of the psychology department - had gone on about young children's tendency to create elaborate fantasy worlds. Healthy in moderation, but it could also be used as a form of escapism for children who had endured terrible, traumatic things. As Celestia's eardrums rung from the sonic assault of the girl screaming at a pitch that would put Aguiari to shame, she couldn't help but wonder what horrific, unimaginable terrors Sunset Shimmer had been put through.

Seems like that teacher of hers was Starswirl. :applejackunsure:

I like it, but I feel like it's missing something. A certain 'oomph!' that will push it in the right direction. But we don't necessarily need perfection, do we? It's a useless endeavor. But I'll promise you all something: every chapter, I'll try to improve. I want each chapter to be better than the last, each one striving closer and closer to that limit of perfection even if it can never truly achieve it. Only then will my love affair with this story be consummated to its fullest degree.

I'm trying to do something similar regarding the book I'm writing. :ajsmug:

Its good! Good chapter and good story

There may be an excess of linguistic grandiosity in the narrative tone, but that could just be your style not perfectly matching my personal taste, which is not a sign that you should change anything. In any case, looking forward to seeing just how Sunset reacts to the return of what she sees as an ersatz Celestia. Maybe she's decided that an imitation of the familiar is better than the utterly alien experiences that have replaced her.

I’d recommend a transcript of the form as a backup, but this is a very nice bit of immersive storytelling.

Doctor Feelgood??! :rainbowlaugh:

You sir, are amazing!

Sure wasn't expecting this, but it's gives us a good idea of what's coming next/up. :applejackunsure:

I second that recommendation. image hosting sites delete the images one in a while, it would be sad if someone finds this story a few years later and is not able to see the image.

Maybe we have similar tastes, I like the premise and general direction of the story, but I needed to start skimming paragraphs for info eventually to keep from losing interest and putting it down.

I will definitely continue reading to get a more informed opinion though, a lot of the text was just to establish the setting, and now that it has been done maybe it will lighten up.

holy shit, this fic is very promising, i love your prose! keep up the great work!

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