Just a dream I once had, all of it
It's true, Celestia has a lot on her plate: the stewardship of Canterlot High School has recently fallen into her lap; her dear younger sister has recently started a job at the very same high school; and the details of her romantic life are... best left unsaid. Any sane individual wouldn't want to add a child to that mix, but those adorable bright blue eyes were irresistible.
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Interesting
This seems VERY interesting!
Promising start! I'll be keeping an eye on this one
Little Sunset is just adorable... also, BLOOD?!
So a tiny, innocent Sunset falls through the portal at a much younger age, call me intrigued. I'm guessing Princess Celestia just took her on as a student, and maybe while playing feel through on accident. I'm curious as to how Princess Celestia is coping with missing her, is she orphan, does her family know she's gone? What will happen once the portal is active again. I'd love for Princess Celestia to visit EQ Girls world and try to find her lost ward someday, maybe with Twilight.
Not a bad start. Aside from Sunset's talking, I'm interested in seeing where this goes.
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Hahaha, yeah, Sunset's talking bothers me as well, and I'm the fool who decided to write it! I really wanted to get a bit more nuanced with how the portal affects ponies who crossover because I felt like the movie handwaved a lot of it as weird interdimensional magic. First thing that comes to mind: what happens when you get a creature who speaks the same language but is used to crafting it with a much different mouth. Viola.
Glad you enjoyed it!
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Trust me, I was in a similar situation when I began what would my 2 year period of writing eqg stories here. And while I'm not 100% proud of some of them, people enjoyed them for what I did during that time.
Muttering from MHA?
Curious on several levels, not least that comment about the princess's eyes. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
Im so sorry but i read Stay Away in a pick me or some accent. I REALLY emphasized the h
I love your prose; it tickles my brain in a most pleasing way.
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Ahhh, thank you! I've been working on it
D'awww, Sunset sounds really adorable so far in the story, yet I am also unsure of the year this could be set in within the human world, given Celestia is only in her 30's, but who knows. I hope she can take care of the poor girl, considering Sunset is somehow a toddler or just really of a young age or so in this.
Seems like that teacher of hers was Starswirl.
I'm trying to do something similar regarding the book I'm writing.
Its good! Good chapter and good story
There may be an excess of linguistic grandiosity in the narrative tone, but that could just be your style not perfectly matching my personal taste, which is not a sign that you should change anything. In any case, looking forward to seeing just how Sunset reacts to the return of what she sees as an ersatz Celestia. Maybe she's decided that an imitation of the familiar is better than the utterly alien experiences that have replaced her.
I’d recommend a transcript of the form as a backup, but this is a very nice bit of immersive storytelling.
Doctor Feelgood??!
You sir, are amazing!
Sure wasn't expecting this, but it's gives us a good idea of what's coming next/up.
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I second that recommendation. image hosting sites delete the images one in a while, it would be sad if someone finds this story a few years later and is not able to see the image.
Nice KISS Reference
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Maybe we have similar tastes, I like the premise and general direction of the story, but I needed to start skimming paragraphs for info eventually to keep from losing interest and putting it down.
I will definitely continue reading to get a more informed opinion though, a lot of the text was just to establish the setting, and now that it has been done maybe it will lighten up.
holy shit, this fic is very promising, i love your prose! keep up the great work!
Great start! Looking forward to reading more.
Ok what the hell? This hooked me up worse than coke and pizza.
I really like your writing style and am invested in the story. I hope to read more of you soon!
A younger Sunset would be a bit more trusting and less sensible to reveal her origins to Celestia, regardless of whether she believes it or not.
I'm liking this.
REALLy good so far hope it updates soon
just now getting back into reading stuff for this fandom and saw this fic and insta clicked
thoe its not updated for a while hope its not dead
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Never dead ;)
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so can we expect an update soon
I’m loving the story so far! I can’t wait to see where this goes!
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no
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aw ok hope everything is ok
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Ouch
Tia's gonna be a mawa!
If you get the reference, then you've been around the fandom about as much as I have.
I’m confused, when does this story take place?
I'm skipping this chapter because I don't speak English and I don't understand anything.
Not to mention she's half lost on what to do over everything that's happened.
Part of your theories are indeed correct Celestia.
It's obvious where this is going.
Glad to see this story got updated, was beginning to worry if it would cointine or possibly be cancelled.
Oh, I'm sure Sunset's will take this very well. No lingering trauma whatsoever...
Mama Tia incoming!
I'm interested in seeing how they reasoned Celestia would be a good foster choice for Sunset, I don't know how real-life fostering systems work, but I I imagine eligibility relies on factors such as how frequent cases where kids in need of foster care pop up as well as the background of the individual and how many other more eligible caretakers have already applied for fostering in general.
Now in her favor: Sunset was deliberately asking for her in chapter 2, and since she doesn't need any additional medical attention they need to have someone take care of her outside the hospital. On top of that her sister is apparently an academic genius and (Hopefully) between the two of them they can keep a stable income within their home (though if this is anything like the American education system, they might be short on cash)
That said, the position isn't the most stable, it was already established she JUST started her position as principle and could lose it if the higher-ups deem her unfit for the task.
Now an ideal fostering system would probably support them while they take care of Sunset, but even with the money this looks like a risky choice for a child that appears to be coping with trauma by creating a fantasy world.
Again: I don't know the process in real life, just making my best guess.
This is probably the best I have ever seen an organized foster system handled narratively on Fimfiction, and I have read my fair share of Scootadopt and Momlestia stories.
The system isn't some golden process without flaw, but still takes enough agency to be believable while also setting up the frame for Sunset and Celestia's relationship And gives the reader another perspective from a third party of how this situation is being handled.
For it's function in the story, you did an amazing job.
I LOVE that the social workers don't immediately call Sunset crazy. I mean, we know she's not delusional, but they're just working with what they know. Instead of tossing the bacon bean into an asylum or, Celestia forbid, an orphanage, they allow for cooler heads and expertise to prevail.
glad to see this update as i LOVE this fic so much and im glad to see the technical stuff be discussed
and i suspect the therapist is piecing together that sunset may be telling the truth despite how impossible that is
also loved the kim possible reference
How awful.
Guess that mean she has no counterpart.
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Thanks, haha. My father was a state employee - though he didn't work in social services - and once told me that the unofficial motto of most state agencies is 'whatever works'. Typically, as long as everything seems okay, no one cares. That's why I always get a bit annoyed when people act like bureaucracy is perfect because... no, it's composed of humans
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Yeah, it always bothered me when people are oft dismissed as crazy in these stories. In reality, most professionals would think that you're trying to cope with a traumatic event
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I've seen a few fics where Sunset has no human world counterpart and this, for some reason, is such a delicious idea to me
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Gotcha
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I think what really helps this is that the people who would realistically care are trying, but also understand the reality of the system. This is very evident when they bring up that, aside from putting Celly at the top of the list, everything else will need to be done responsibly.
They don't see one flaw and decide to break all the rules, but rather play by the book and only intervened when they saw an unusual problem with Sunset. Bending the rules just enough to give her the best chance they thought was available.