Pink-Mended Sparkles

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When a spell temporarily blinds Twilight, Pinkie is left to take care of her as they discover new feelings, which they try to express creatively.

Thanks to 6-D Pegasus for proofreading the first 1,000 words and writing a few paragraphs.

Thanks to Forcalor for proofreading.

Thanks to Hyper Star for proofreading.

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MaverickTSU

MaverickTSU #1 · Dec 24th, 2023 · 2 · ·

It so wholesome, and yet a bit sad, I love it!

PseudoBob Delightus

PseudoBob Delightus #2 · Dec 24th, 2023 · 2 · ·

Lovely story as always. Thank you, Silk Rose.

Hyper Star

Hyper Star #3 · Dec 24th, 2023 · 3 · ·

"Yes, you're good at this, parchment."

Parchment isn't capitalised

'Ey, you didn't take my advice about the whole Twister, Parchment thing! It just seems a bit awkward, no?

I have successfully done it, I HAVE FORCED ANOTHER TWINKIEPIE ON TO THIS SITE! Plus, I got to proofread for one of my favourite romance writers! Let's just check two things off my bucket list...

I said it once, I'll say it again, the whole blindness thing and Pinkie's regret at having Twilight cast the spell gives a teensy but more of seriousness to your usually fluffier stories. Fluttershy... not sure, it's just that when she said "what's up" to Twilight the image of Rainbow Dash jumped out, lastly, it seems a bit extreme that Pinkie would have Twilight cast a spell to make it easier for her to confess, she could know the consequences of lovey dovey spells (cough LESSON ZERO cough). So, I'll be giving this an "Okay."

Silk Rose

Silk Rose #4 · Dec 24th, 2023 · 1 · ·

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Fixed the capitalization, thanks!

I tried to make it feel better, did it not come across? I tried to consider your feedback with Forcalor's at the same time.

For Fluttershy, I could have probably chosen a better phrase for her, I agree.

Regarding the spell, I kind of just used it as a means to an end. I should have given it more thought and maybe come up with a better inciting incident.

I really like this story, and I loved writing it. I think I've learned a lot from it and can't wait to release my next one.

Thank you once again for proofreading it!