This story is a sequel to A Flurry Of A Cake Date!
Lil' Cheese Sandwhich-Pie and Big Sugar Apple are excited! They are going to make their first pie with no adult supervision! Woo!
Nothing could possibly go wrong! I mean...they know this recipe inside out! It is an easy recipe that their parents have been making since these two were in diapers! They are going to have so much fun with this - they can feel it! These two can taste the melt-in-your-mouth flavors already!
Easy peasy, lemon squeezy! A piece of cake! Easy as Pie!
Or maybe a complete and utterly hilarious disaster for the ages....who knows?!
This adorable and wonderful cover art is by Cirillaq!
Written for the amazing 1,000 words contest! (The experimental/random genre.)
This fic is so close to 200 views, we can do it!!
Why can’t I read A Flurry of a Cake Date!?
Hey! You forgot(?) to publish the chapter for the first story!
gottem
they do have a point, it is actually difficult to figure out which one has a less healthy diet
ah yeah i guess Flurry Heart would be a good bit older than these two!
thank you for writing!
Fair warning, I won’t be reading the prequel. You get a thousand words and that’s what I’ll be looking at… even if you published that prequel after this story?
Oh dear. You definitely should’ve given this one a once-over.
Yeah, this is... Well, it honestly reflects the subject matter. You tried to create something with more enthusiasm than skill and the end result is a bit of a mess. There is promise here. Most of all, you need to work on character voices. A lot of what comes out of ponies’ mouths in this story doesn’t sound like anything an actual person would say at any age. Similarly, Flurry’s flashback feels incredibly stilted and expository. (And frankly, making it second person rather than third doesn’t add anything to the story.) Make the dialogue sound more organic and you’ll be well on your way to improving your craft.