Fluttershy can't deal with the panic attacks anymore. Feeling unsafe in her home, she attempts what comes naturally to her: peace.
Thanks to 6-D Pegasus for proofreading.
Entry into A Thousand Words Contest II.
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Love the way you conveyed her panic, as well as her desperate attempts to placate the monster. Your way with limiting the descriptions really adds to make it feel more immersing from her perspective. Awesome awesome job!
this story reminds me of faith: the unholy trinity, probably due to the cover art.
I wish there was a game based on the story.
Whoa, got me the chills. Poor Fluttershy doesn't know what to do besides make peace of it, but it didn't seem like it was reciprocating
I love how this was written, too
Ooohh...chills...
Who knew Angel could be so demanding at dinner time.
oof, relatable
dang, just what is this creature?
and augh, i can just imagine her panicked and desperate cries for help
and oof! well done in getting us inside Fluttershy’s head, who as fear-prone as she is, is facing something that would deeply frighten anypony. thank you for writing!
This is a good demonstration of never showing the monster until it’s too late, but the ending undercuts the dread by raising a very relevant question: Has no one checked on Fluttershy for however long this horrid squatter has been running her ragged? Heck, have any other animals tried to get her help? Maybe it’s just my predisposition for happy endings, but I see too many outs here to really believe the peril.
Still, good building tension and, again, leaving the nature of the monster ambiguous to let the reader’s imagination fill in the blanks with something worse than you could ever fit in a thousand words. Thank you for the entry.
cool