To Fly

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After tragedy strikes, Rainbow Dash plans a trip to comfort Scootaloo. During their time together catastrophe befalls Rainbow Dash. With no one else around Scootaloo must make a choice that could cost her everything.

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littleman001

littleman001 #1 · Jun 30th, 2023 · · ·

Not gonna lie, Rainbow Dash is my least favourite member of the Mane 6 so I was hoping for a little sadder ending. Not the worst case scenario, but still something.

Nevertheless, a good one shot. Good interpretation of Scootaloo's angst about not being able to fly. Also, you jumped on the orphan Scootaloo bandwagon, but at the same time you didn't. You just killed off her canon parents. Think outside the box, am I right?

Nice work.

Hoofprintz

Hoofprintz #2 · Jun 30th, 2023 · · ·

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Tbh, Rainbow is my least favorite too lol. I can't stand her half the time. Other half, she aight.

This is a Scoots fic and so I really wanted to show that it doesn't matter she can't fly. She's great anyway and should be happy with what she has.

Yeah I don't like that her parents weren"t dead in canon. That hurt her character severely in my eyes so I killed them off here.

Thanks for the read and the comment!

Forcalor

Forcalor #3 · Jun 30th, 2023 · · ·

I think Dash can be great in fanfiction if handled correctly. In show she comes off immature sometimes iirc, but there is certainly a depth to the character, a constant personal struggle to uphold some values. None other of mane 6 have it pronounced like that I think, except Twilight
Good story

Hoofprintz

Hoofprintz #4 · Jun 30th, 2023 · 1 · ·

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Agreed 100% Lost and Found Dash is amazing. That tends to be the case. FF generally destroy canon characters imo.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #5 · Sep 18th, 2023 · · ·

As she plummeted motionlessly to the bottom of the falls, directly toward the jagged rocks below, I lamented my weakness. That was the problem, wasn't it? I was the issue. Any other real pegasus would've been able to quickly leap to her rescue without thinking.
I, on the other hoof...

oof, and if Scootaloo didn’t have a complex about that before… :(

Why was my life like this? Why couldn't I have what everypony else did? My parents were never around when I was little and now they... And to top it all off, I couldn't even do the basic thing that every pegasus could. It was so unfair.

yeah, that is a good summary of Scootaloo’s unfortunate life so far

"Squirt..." Rainbow Dash's whisper followed by her weak embrace revitalized me.

aww that is so Rainbow Dash

I didn't need to fly. I'd gotten this far without being able to. I had friends. I had a career. I had hobbies. I was happy, even if everything didn't always go my way. Even if I'd never be able to...

so true, your life has been a glorious story, Scoots!

While my wings couldn't carry me, they could still be used to help. They always had. I'd always hated them because they could never do exactly what I wished, but since I was a filly they'd done the best they could for my sake.

so true. love Scootaloo coming to better terms with her wings when she’s older

"Yep, there's definitely some stuff broken." I laid back down and took in my surroundings. It was a standard hospital room... except the small basket of fruits marked with a "C.M.C. forever" sticky note. I loved those girls... I always would.

aww!

For the first time in my life, I realized something. I didn't need to fly. I never would. My friends, my big sister, my life... they were all amazing already and flight or lack thereof would never change that.

aww, so true!

great Scootaloo coming to terms with her life’s unfairness story, with the full circle of the role reversal between her and Rainbow Dash, and her parents’ deaths reflecting their absence from her youth. thanks for writing!

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #6 · Sep 18th, 2023 · 1 · 1 ·

Maybe it’s just because I’ve been around as long as I have, but “Scootaloo can’t fly” drama is too well-worn a path for me to really enjoy. Kudos for not taking the easy way out and miraculously giving her wings full functionality mid-plummet, but the story doesn’t do anything to stand out. It’s serviceable (which, to be fair, is more than I can say for some other entries.) Thank you for it.

Hoofprintz