The farm. Her family. Apples. After years of adventure, it all comes back to a legacy she's committed to keeping alive. Otherwise, what's it all been for?
Written for the A thousand words contest II in the drama category because... well just because I guess.
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Aw, this is so sweet! And kind of sad; the weight of the family burden is heavy, it seems. Still, they found a way. Best of luck in the contest, fellow competitor!
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Not really in it to compete, just shaking the years of rust off
Glad you liked it though, and good luck to you too
Its sweet, sad, funny. Surprisingly wholesome.
Gotta say, the idea of Mac just bluntly telling AJ "I'm shooting blanks" is fucking hilarious
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With only so many words to work with I had to kill quite a few darlings, but I wasn't losing that bit. To be honest, I was a bit surprised how many notes I managed to hit.
I'm surprisingly happy with how it turned out, and glad you enjoyed it
I really, really hate to look like an idiot on this website. The story is nice, it's well written, and the emotional aspect is top notch. Very good short story. But I have to ask...
What is the story about? I reread it like 3 times but I don't understand. Could someone actually explain it to me because it's a good story, I'm just a dumbass.
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It's understandable, since almost everything in the story is infered. In a nutshell, Applejack finds out neither of her siblings are able or likely to have kids, and Rainbow (who's implied to be in a relationship with her) convinces her to put everything aside before childbearing becomes a risky affair and, well, get pregnant with her through nebulous means, because she understands how supremely important the Apple family legacy is to her.
It's not the first time I've written something where the lines I expect people to read between are a little too close together
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Thank you for not judging me too harshly, and now that I understand, it speaks a lot more loudly. I almost feel silly not seeing it. Still, my opinion hasn’t changed. Still well written, still emotional, and seeing the depth in only a thousand words makes it all the more special. 10/10 then!
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If a reader doesn't understand a story, it's in my opinion far more likely a failure on the author's part than theirs.
Still, glad you enjoyed the prose
It's a good story, but it is clear only if you're well-acquainted with Apple family and related characters. Personally I am not, so gears in my head needed to be turned a few times before it worked for me
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I was afraid of that. Not much I can do to fix it either with the word limit. Ah well, thanks for the thoughts.
oof, the Cake Twins? it makes sense for the Cakes to have been middle-aged at that time but damn, way to really set the timer
i literally wrote Scootaloo taking over for Rainbow Dash and wondering how she was a teacher in the first place, but oof, it’s another thing to see her talk about herself this way
hehe yeah, if pony pregnancies are analogous to human ones they are a hell of a lot to go through from everything i’ve heard
augh so true. this is really good eatin’ for AppleDashers
oh that is so very Rainbow in this moment
beautiful paragraph
just a lovely piece of AppleDash, and exactly how i imagine the relationship to go. excellent work, thank you for writing!
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Honestly this is my favorite piece out of my entries. Even if it's apparently a bit difficult to puzzle out, it's the best prose in my opinion of the lot. Which is amusing to me since I'm generally allergic to writing Applejack in a romantic capacity
This is a tight-knit little story. I like the pattern of comparing Honesty to each other Element and all the steps that to the situation. Storytelling through implication is important for something this short; you need the subtext to carry its weight when you have so little text to work with. You pulled that off quite well here. Thank you for it.
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I like how it turned out. From the singular perspective of my own satisfaction with it, I'm content. It was a fun little exercise in subtlety, even if I might have pushed the envelope a bit too far for some readers.