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Badmiral Biscuit
Sometimes slice of life is saucy.
Badmiral Biscuit
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color me impressed this is a good story.
a nice slow build and it is vary properly detailed.
I also heard they really like to smash!
Troubleshoes: "Take that, you wannabe studs!"
And he won't rest until his mission is completed, no matter how long it'll take!
Troubleshoes: "Are you really in charge here?"
Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.
My shot at an extended ending:
I'm not good at writing, but I probably got my idea across.
NOt bad. Would love to see more of this ship
That was fast.
Glad my input on Trouble Shoes earned him some love.
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Thank you!
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Nocreature smashes better than Yaks.
He coulda had a career as a pinup stallion (although in another of my stories, a mare remarks that the stallion the penis is attached to also matters).
Which is just the kind of stallion a mare wants.
Ain't that the truth?
Thanks!
Ooh, that's an interesting idea. There is some art (and might be some fics) with Celestia hooking up with horses, since ponies aren't big enough to satisfy her.
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Hmm, that's an interesting thought. I don't really see it being a long-term thing, but maybe it could be. Rain wouldn't want to live in a pony city, but Troubleshoes might like living out on the prairie.
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Sometimes I do fast
And Troubleshoes needs some love, that's just a fact.
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He'd be in less danger of hurting some pony
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Yes he does
Very intriguing start. Looking forward to more.
This chapter sure got me interested in your pony words
👍
Very entertaining
More?
Nice final
And we all probably wonder... Did he made her a Sandwich?
But seriously, did he get lucky?
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Thank you
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Thanks!
Don't get too invested in clopfics; this is an account where I sort of come and go. For non-clopfics (if that's of interest to you) there's plenty on my main.
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I don't know if Rain would like a sandwich, even if Troubleshoes made her one. She'd probably enjoy some horse treats, though, and I'm sure Troubleshoes knows where to get them.
I'd say yes. Long-term, maybe? He certainly could give up living in normal pony society and hang out with Rain's herd.
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♡
True love.
I was gong to say that you had a funny way of spelling Amira, but your way is funnier.
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It's just his luck. . . .
This is your official review for the Furry Foray Festival Contest!
I've tried to be as objective as possible, but of course there are limits. I've tried to avoid being biased or arbitrary as much as I can, and hopefully I've succeeded at least somewhat. The full, final results will be announced on May 4th, and winners will be contacted shortly afterward to ask how they would like to accept their prizes. When readings these comments, please keep in mind that I know I'm often overly critical -- to the point where I can always find nitpicks even with the greatest works of literature. So don't take anything personally!
Notes:
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(Haakim was also a stallion, but Troubleshoes didn’t know that.)I was not expecting to bust out laughing like this at a clopfic ... but this author's note did it, for sure. Literally laughing out loud at this. I can only imagine an alternate story where Trouble Shoes finally gets to Saddle Arabia. Meets Haakim, and they get along great! It's finally looking like Troubleshoes is going to get lucky. But then bad luck strikes again: he finds out Haakim is a stallion at the very last minute.- The first chapter is a nice mix of comedy and just enough sexual undertones to lay the groundwork. The second chapter is great and really hot. But the last chapter is what really brings this fic's score down -- the final chapter was way too brief and over too quickly, which badly hurts the score in a bunch of categories.
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She felt his dick stirring under his chinprobably her chin? Unless Troubleshoes is even more ludicrously well-hung than I thought.-
At first, the actual sex was anticlimactic. Almost obligatory.Well, you can say that again! Definitely could have used a longer, more detailed chapter for this part. The whole fic has been building up to it ... but then it's very brief and not particularly detailed.-
slurping his salamiI guess this sort of makes sense when it's from Troubleshoes's POV ... but even then, such an absurd phrase really kicks me out of the story. Out of the story just long enough to start thinking, "Wait, ponies are vegetarian. Why would they have any concept of Salami?"- Pretty nice job showing Rain's POV. Those parts of the fic were some of my favorites. Really captures the feel of her movie. Seriously -- had the theme song involuntarily playing in my head during parts of this.
- Overall, quite nice, but suffers from being so short. Definitely not as long or fleshed out as it needed to be.
Scores:
Provocativeness: 90
Progression: 25
Payoff: 25
Pacing: 30
Personality: 91
Prose: 81
Total: 342
For more information on what these scores mean, see the scoring rubric.