Pinkie Pie's four and three quarter months pregnant with octuplets, and in need of a new wardrobe to wear. She gets distracted on her way to Rarity's boutique by a novelty T-shirt that allows her to pretend she's recovered part of one of her Pinkie senses.
This story was originally released on February 23rd of 2021. The cover art is by Forfun41 and inspired the story, as I'd expected its description to contain something similar, and wrote this when it didn't. I've cleaned and given colour to the cover art sketch.
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This was cute, but if I can offer some constructive criticism:
When two characters are interacting, you should separate the dialogue like so:
That and some grammar issues aside, I liked this. Maybe someday you could write a full-on human or anthro pregnancy clopfic? Those are hard to find around here.
Do you have any character in mind that you are envisioning the father to be, who is it supposed to be open-ended because if that's the case I'm going to think it's discord I really like that ship so not a very popular one for some reason they'll be so perfect for each other show the woman's might destroy the world but they're so perfect for each other
Pinkie Pie is the person would draw a smiley face on her belly and make it talk
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I appreciate it, but I dislike splitting dialogue in that way. What were the grammar issues? I carefully proofread before uploading, so I'd like to know.
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Yes, just use your imagination.
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All right, I'll admit some of these might be a little nit-picky but here goes:
Capitalize that second "she".
"and prompted the other seven to move on their own"
Instead of "She'd", why not put "Pinkie" there.
"Pinkie's new shirt was more than cool enough. She only bought it because she didn't want to wear any other shirts today."
"I can't help it! You jut out the most here, Pinkie."
"Oh, Rarity. I'm not growing, my babies are!" Italics put emphasis in your dialogue.
Like I said, some of them are kinda nit-picky.
This was a cute little story; not amazing, but definitely worth a read. I second what CapNTilfy said about grammar and paragraph structure, but that would be my only real complaint.