Epilogue: Treasure Seeked
Daring Do is in the forest of the hidden temple again. Why is she there… ? To right some wrongs, and get her life back on track. How? Here’s how… .
“Okay… . So if I go here, and reset the artifact, then I’ll be able to get these diapers off of me for good, and I can live normally!” Daring Do said as she’s feeling confident, and also because she’s looking at a map that leads to the same temple as before, so that way she’ll get back to normal, and no longer be in diapers anymore… !
Yet eventually… , she soon gets a nagging feeling… . Almost as if that she’s gonna miss those moments that she had with King Sombra once she succeeds. She then sighs, knowing that she could never come back from this decision, and heads onward to set things right… .
After an hour of dodging traps, fighting cabilaron’s crew, and lastly resetting the artifact in the artifact room inside the temple, Daring Do has successfully done it, and now everything’s back to normal… ! At least until… .
“Uh oh… .” is all she could muster before hearing and seeing the temple walls shake; almost as if it’s punishing her for what she did before when she first visited… . And since she’s returned, the temple senses this as an opportunity for punishment time… ; by crushing her.
Luckily for Daring Do, she was quick! And with a hat brim wipe from her hoof, she gets into a stance with a determined look, and starts sprinting away on all four hooves, whist also dodging the fallen boulders from the temple… .
Daring Do is now at the outskirts of the Everfree Forest, panting and sweating from running that far back out to the edge of the forest. She eventually sighs with relief, knowing that all this is over, and decides to go to Ponyville Cafe to get herself something to drink.
But before she could make the trip, she soon pauses, looks behind her now exposed rump, and then says; “eh… . I can just get more diapers for myself anytime… ! And besides… .” she snickered as she’s thinking about something. “I’m sure that Rainbow Dash would just ‘love’ to see herself in one too; hehehe… . I just sure hope she doesn’t hate me for it… .” and continued her trek to the Ponyville Cafe… .
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Grammar is important to a fiction. This is awful. The idea is good but grammar is not. 2/10.
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Fun read, even if there isn't much of a plot to it, I didn't consider a Sombra and Daring shipping before, the writing is a bit stiff and awaked at times bot is mostly fine. Keep it up dude
I'll be reading this later to see if it's really the worst horror ever created as the vote ratio claims, but I will note that the stories by this author which are NOT about this fetish have much more reasonable ratios; the sort of ratio I would expect from the mostly correct grammar and reasonable sentence structure in the description. In other words, initial evidence says that this hate is about the fetish, but full assessment to come later.
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Uh, the majority of their stories don't have enough votes to even have a ratio…
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If you don’t like the story due to fetish content, why bother being here… ? I mean honestly… . 😒
11243509
Why because of the fetish? Then don’t comment on here
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Thanks
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What does that mean?
11243447
Probably because people like you promote incest with your stories… . Fucking disgusting is what it is. Get a life! 😂
11243424
Grammar is fine. You probably just need glasses
11243552
So... I was trying to defend you, here, but then you jump down my throat... And then you follow up with an insult to somebody else for writing a fetish that's attacked for literally the same reason this one is, displaying a breathtaking lack of self-awareness. Perhaps your vote ratio is deserved, perhaps it isn't; I'm suddenly not so interested in reading to find out.
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You sure? Cuz to me, and the way you worded your sentence, it didn’t even seem in the slightest that you’re defending me at all. Especially with you calling it “a horror” to question whether if it’s even bothering to be worth reading… .
And I called out someone for their fetish because that fetish they have is just illegal. While the fetish I have isn’t, and is more private. So don’t say otherwise because that was justified
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I admit I may have phrased it in less than the optimal way, but I proceeded to provide evidence that it was doubtful whether it was actually as horrible as the votes made it seem. I apologize for the phrasing.
But not for the other part. Incest in fiction is not illegal, at least not in places where fetish content in general is legal. And in places where the act itself is illegal... it's not justified. Or, to put it differently, it's justified as "ugh; that's gross", the same justification for denouncing any fetish, including yours. To say denouncing somebody for having an incest fetish is justified because incest is illegal some places is identical reasoning to claiming that slavery is good because slavery was historically legal. Legality doesn't dictate morality; it should be the other way around, but that doesn't always happen.
Anyway, diaper and related ABDL fetishes are only "legal" because they're so niche that they go under the radar. In the social hierarchy, your fetish is actually below incest, and would be just as illegal in many of the same places if it was brought to legislature's attention. So again, you are displaying an utter lack of self-awareness.
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Depending on what you meant by self awareness, believe me. I’m aware of who I am. I honestly don’t need people like you telling me that I’m not self aware, which I actually am. I don’t need people telling I have bad grammar despite the fact that I know I have bad grammar.
Okay, to put this in simple terms, I just have my own personal opinions, and like to share them. If people hate it, then they should at least have some common sense; which “you” lack obviously.
So don’t go saying that my fetish is illegal. It isn’t! It’s only defined that because people made into a kink! And before you say anything, yes there’s a difference. Look it up.
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You earlier:
Sure.
I didn't.
I double-checked just in case I was misremembering, but it would appear that these are indeed synonymous: An abnormal sexual desire. I'm guessing you're one of those repressed people who don't want to admit that they have sexual feelings, or are even associated with people who have sexual feelings. Religious household?
You're clearly not thinking very straight right now, and it's understandable; all that red can be very upsetting. The best thing to do is take a step back and do something else. Play a game or watch a show you like; treat yourself to not having to think about this mess for a while. Regardless of what you think about me or what I've said here... you're not doing yourself any mental good staring at that red bar or these comments right now.
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Firstly, I’m not overly religious. Secondly, it’s not a kink! It’s different! I don’t find sexual pleasure in diapers, diaper usage, farts, and whatever else stories like these involved. I just find them interesting (not in a sexual manner). And lastly, I know I’m not in a good mental state. It’s not my fault that I have problems like this.
So to put it bluntly, I get it, stop commenting back, and just forget it already… . It’s over!
11243683
Like what? It could’ve been better or something?
Not bad.
11243724
Seconded
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Also please try not to take this the wrong way. I'll try to explain a little bit better. As you the writer it is your job to fix the grammar. (taking good care of it.) Sometimes changing peoples minds can affect that you are willing to do so... and that's what a good writer should. Fix the stuff so people can read it clearly. It's not about the fetish of the story... it's the grammar itself and how it was.
The idea is pretty good. I do like the idea for this story. But how it was treated with the grammar is not well done and I hope you go back and fix some of the stuff.
If I was a writer which I am if I made a mistake I go back and fix it. Because of reputation. If I make a bad story of bad grammar and it was.
If it is one of your most hard work when writing a fiction and if you make a mistake it's best to find the problem which is us the critics and make some changes.... (not like story change no I mean just grammar changes is all.)
if a person is trying to rewrite your story there not very good. (what i mean by this is changing the idea) two different things here.
My goal in all of this was hoping you fix the mistake of grammar... not for the idea. (not changing the idea of your story. More of making grammar so it makes more sense.)
Grammarly is my suggestion. Very useful, even the free version.
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Thanks
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Does it work if you’re typing on a phone? Cuz unfortunately, this is what I’m always using since I don’t have access to a computer, nor do I even own one.
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If your phone can get on the internet then my suggestion is yes you can. For grammarly, word, and I think virtual tutor grammar online which is free. Well that is the first option if you like to do stuff alone. Or you can get a person to help you out.
The second option is find an editor, proofreader on this site which there are groups. Some are terrible some are good. You just got to find the right one. (which does take too long and I highly recommend programs.
I don’t understand why this is getting so many dislikes, but I think it would be better to change the rating to Teen and add the Fetish tag. I did that with my story that involved this kind of content and it got disliked much less.
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It should work no matter what. Do you know how to copy/paste on your phone?
Big suggestion: use a Google Drive and get Google Docs. You have an email, so saving your work to the cloud can go a long way.
I fairly enjoyed this read. Each chapter was short but sweet. I was going to give you my main criticisms, but Scout Feather already summed them up better than I was going to. I'm also particularly confused about Sombra and his motivation. He basically goes into the home of a random pony he doesn't know, finds she's under some curse and takes care of her while she recovers from it? I'm not following up on why he's doing any of this. Were any of Sombra's actions established in a previous fanfic you made? The story has the alternate universe tag, but the story refers to Sombra as "a villain". Not sure about what's going on there. This was cute and wholesome, though, I'll give you that. I want to check out more of your work after this. Hope you'll continue writing.
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Thanks! Also, I kinda did put a “random” tag on the story, cuz it wouldn’t make sense, nor does it connect with anything else. Hence why the Sombra x Daring Do non canon pairing
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Oops
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I guess…
11244018
That’s fair
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“Some are terrible, some are good” XD. But in all seriousness, I’ll try my best to use your suggestions when I get the chance, since I’m still fairly new to this site
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Touche
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Hehe 😀
This was great! Ignore all them ponies who say otherwise.
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Thanks friend!
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You're welcome!
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you're welcome
Kind of agreeing with the dislikes on this one it isn’t all that coherent and seems to just throw random stuff out there.
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Huh??? I know about the dislikes, but what do you mean of the method one… ? I’m confused