What if Twilight had to replace Stygian in the Pony of Shadows? For a while, they'd just have to move on with their lives until The Pony Of Twilights, formally The Pony of Shadows could be seen again and the Mane 5, even some with relationships, have to fight to get their friend back. But can they?
(( image for cover if links being stupid https://www.deviantart.com/dragonfoxgirl/art/Corrupted-Commission-709102415 ))
Note: Spike in my AU will have also come to Ponyville due to the Rainboom and will be the same age as everypony, around 24.
Chapters (11)
Chapter 7 to come soon!
(8/13/21)
Why did you disable the ratings?
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Im disabling ratings until I finish the series, I want the series to be done first is all. But if you wanna leave feedback in the comments, I'm happy to hear it <3
It a ok start but you left out Starswirl and Stygains reactions to what happened. Unless it's in the next chapter or so.
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I do plan on into getting those laterm i kind of wanted them to have their own... y'nknow?
Okay. Whatever your "reason" for disabling the ratings is. It doesn't make your story look good at first glance. Especially with this being your first 😑.
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Its so I can finish it first. I'm going to finish it first so you can get the whole story. If ya don't like that then you don't need to read the story.
I want the whole story rated not the first couple of chapters. Id rather you dislike the whole story when im done with it, rathern that like or hate it too early.
Thanks for almost 400+ views on the first chapter as of August 31st, y'all are amazing <3
Sorry about the delay in the next chapter, I've had a huge surge of anxiety lately causing writer's block. I promise I'll be cranking em out soon <3!
The synopsis confuses me. How can Twilight become the Pony of Shadows instead of Stygian if those events happened long before Twilight was born?
Granny Smith doing the same thing Grandpear did, and she going to wind up alone with no one wanting to be her family anymore.
This is just winding up to be so damn.. mediocre.
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But how will you get an accurate review if people don't have the ability to like or dislike the story? This is a part of criticism weather you like it or not.
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In the first chapter this is explained. Twilight had to replace him as it needed a vessel. There will be more on the reasons later
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Yes. Im waiting for the story to be finished. Id rather you dislike the whole thing rather than like the first half, hate the second or vice versa. Don't like that style? Then kindly leave your review and be gone. I'm sorry you didn't take to my story and I hope you find better reads for you <3
This is getting pretty interesting.
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Ahh Glad you find it interesting. I promise that eventually it'll get a bit moresuch. This is kind of a first arc in a sense!
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I see. Working on the next chapter?
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Working on it, I have lots of plans for this.
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Ok. Btw thanks for the watch 😃
Hi
UPDATE: Sorry for disappearing but I had a sudden medical incident involving my right hand and couldn't type. Hope to upload more chapters soon! I also suffered a lot of anxiety and writer's block so hopefully, we can tackle that.
Thanks for staying with me through this, all the nice comments reassure me in this fic. Love y'all!
Brohoof!
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Great to have you back.
Hope to have next chapter by new years!
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Where's the next chapter?
Sorry, I haven't been on schedule, I've been applying to jobs and going through a huge writer's block. I hope to release monthly chapters as of February. To get me on a proper schedule for this. Let's say the 10th of every month is my goal. Let's do this!
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I wish you luck.
Where's the next chapter at?
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its up :>
The story seems to be ok for now. having writers block is not healthy... and to prevent from that is not making another story (making multiple stories could effect your writing and maybe never go back to it like some authors.) Hopefully you don't do that. hopefully you make a fiction and complete this first before anything else. I wish you the best of luck.
P.S I do agree with Mystic Sunrise on this that disable ratings could also effect as a writer since most people rate the first chapter most of that is pretty true. Your true goals is to not make the fiction go into bad groups... (which will effect you entirely if it does.) if you can't accept critics then writing will be hard for you. As users of this site have their ideals and opinions.
For the The Gilded Fox comment I have to say that is true and false... True that people like to give the fiction some hope this may put less stress on the writer. For the false that it can be is that trolls and other mean people on the site can control if it's good or not. (such as troll groups and gangsters.)
In my opinion though I have to say their both correct though. Wondering what kind of audience your trying to grasp?
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I already explained that Id rather have people rate the finished story first. Thats just the way id prefer it. Ill hapilly take constructive in the comments. As for what audience Im going for, people who prefer a slow buildup for the outcome, i promise it goes somewhere i Just have to set everything up first.
Coverart sauce: https://www.deviantart.com/dragonfoxgirl/art/Corrupted-Commission-709102415 (SFW)
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Thank you so much! I couldn't find it anywhere for the life of me only on that forum. Ill update it right away!
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seems interesting so far
Ok as soon as I comented that I began to have computer issues. Just my luck, right? Anyways - hope to write more soon
Okok OK: If i dont have incredibly bad luck with computers I hope to get TWO CHAPTERS out in march.
edit: tbf i didn't say which march