A zombie apocalypse has started in Ponyville. It infected Spike when the Mane 6 and him went to Zecora's and infected the Mane 6 when Spike attacked. It's all up to the Celestia and Luna to stop this madness.
Warning!
This story is not for younger audiences. This isn't as gruesome as Cupcakes but I have this warning just in case.
Also wanted to point out this is my first MLP fanfic, let alone a MLP grimdark fanfic so critiques are allowed. Hopefully I don't regret saying that.
Zombie apocalypse art by Sethisto. Spike art by TehJadeh
Chapters (5)
The synopsis confuses me. Don't you need to be dead to be a zombie?
Oof. This fails for one big reason. 1,575 words is not the right way to do a Zombie Apocalpyse story. That word count is good for the opening chapter that sets everything up. But not for the total word count.
And that leads to the next thing that doesn't help the story. These chapters are way to short. You stuffed way too much into to too little of a space.
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yeah didn't really explain it good. oops
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well this is my first time writing a story. doesn't really give me the benefit of the doubt so i will just say oops
I swear that I know this content somewhere.... But it's fail for my opinion.
P/S now I know, this is from one of "The adventures time"eps
The dialogue is stilted, you don't use the proper punctuation both within and without quotation marks, there are spelling and grammar errors, and your writing is _stuffed_ with the kind of pattern characteristic of third-grade fiction:
Verbs are not necessary after every statement, and often speakers can be inferred from dialogue content. Example:
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You know, this is totally plagiarism though.
That’s what you get.
Wow, I didn’t think the bite penetrated his scales.
So I’m guessing they’re not gonna kill the zombies.
Teleport?
Déjà vu
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nah screw that lol
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True.
So it was just a story the gang read?
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yeah...