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DeathToPonies
sup! im really kind and love the show and its charaters but you know how it be when those tingly feelings get involved. like my style? talk to me about custom stories and comissions!
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DON'T DIE, APPLE BLOOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Yeah, What the fuck?
the use of images here was quite artistic, once again proving you have the highest iq of anyone on fimfiction
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im sowwy di d i hurt your feelins :c
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de
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I'm kinda confused, a little worried, and very scared
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is ok stay tuned and watch what happens
MOAR!!!
I hope Rumble gets lucky and finally get that apple pussy!
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moar is here
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Oh, goodie!
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lol
but the real question is...from the kidnapping or from applejack?
We need more this is great
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theres some more for ya
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happy new year buddy! appreciate the comment
What the fuck is this story
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prepare for more
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I'm frankly very confused about what is happening
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As of now (chapter 3),
Apple Bloom started a webservice where she sold provocative pictures of herself, but Applejack talked her down and shamed her for it.
Meanwhile, Lyra is an abusive piece of shit to a dogged Bon Bon, while also apparently being a part of some kind of filly torture and murder ring.
And some weird new characters just showed up.
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So, why are you writing this?
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because i want to make people laugh, cry, jerk off, and be desperate for an update in a compelling story all at once
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I mean, you kinda got the first one at least, 1/3 ain't bad
*Deep breath*
Wow. Okay, I have a note...
The pacing in this story is ridiculous. I read through all three chapters, and though I was able to follow it, you didn't make it easy. The plot flies by at ludicrous speeds, in so many directions that I now have literary whiplash.
Now, don't misunderstand, I like the concept. This was almost fun to read.
But your style seems to be blink-and-you'll-miss-it jumps from one place to the other. You swap scenes sometimes with less than two hundred words, and it feels like you couldn't pay attention to a scene for more than a minute. There's no time to stop and smell the roses; there's not even enough time to realize that there are roses that can be smelled.
It's unlikely that I'll come back, unless you ask me back, but at least think about what I said. Really, do think about it.
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Thanks for this review! I'm trying to improve my writing and storytelling so this kind of thing really helps.
I'll give you a ring when I'd like a re-evaluation, eh?
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Please do. I'd like to see this with a bit more depth and detail.
Fucking murder is the best kind of murder.
Mostly I just feel sorry for Bon Bon. Damnit Lyra, I know you've got important foal torture and murdering to do, but you could at least try to be a decent wife.
Damn! I cannot wait to see more.
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daaamn man you gonna make me come back to this site? ok, just for you tho
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Aw, I'm special! Thanks man.
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only because you have a karkat avatar and im a huge sucker for the old days of homestuck (and if you cant tell by the vaguely remnicient gif panels its an inspiration here)