'We're often silent. We don't yell and we don't complain. We're patient, as always. Because we don't have the words yet. We're afraid to talk about it. We don't know how.' -Svetlana Alexievich
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Following a violently suppressed protest, Gallus and Gabby reflect on what options they have to live a better life. Jaded from what he had witnessed -- and unsure there is a future for his people -- Gallus lives convinced that some things will never change. Gabby however points to a brighter, though more distant horizon. She promises that though he may not see it, to trust that the future will be better.
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Wait, I thought this would be the set up to a full AU story. I think I conflated this with Jinzou's planned magnum opus.
(Also, I added this to "tracking" by accident and quickly undid it.)
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I do sort of have plans to get this written out in an AU format. Undecided at the moment.
I liked this short-story.
It felt intimate. Even though Gallus felt a lot more mature than we see him after he arrives in Equestria, Gabby seemed spot on with her unrelenting positive attitude.
I've never seen griffin portrayed with slavic inspiration, but I can definitely agree to it: a fallen-state keeping everyone bothered enough not to bother. The older generation not exactly clashing with the new one (Grandpa Gruff and Gallus are a great contrast of differing generations in the show itself). Yeah, it works surprisingly well.
Cheers,
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Glad you enjoyed it! I saw the culture of the griffons and thought about how much it reflects my own, so I figured it would be a good fit.
I look forward to this!
This was a great short story. You told quite a bit of story in a little over 1500 words. Gallus's backstory, and the cultural norms (and oppression) were sprinkled throughout and set up very well. I could see something like this as a canon backstory for Gallus. Feeling stifled, decaying in Griffonstone, wishing for a better life. I had never thought of Griffon culture being similar to Slavic/Russian societies, but I can certainly see where you got the inspiration for that. I also thought including their full names at points was a nice touch. Have a fave!
EDIT: Deleted comment was a duplicate, hit the wrong key.
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Glad you enjoyed the story! This was my first published story in a year, and I am quite impressed with how well it has done given the circumstances. I hope to utilize this influence a bit more, as it seems to have connected well with the audience.
Dang I wasn’t expecting this to be so bleak. Probably shouldn’t have just dove in off the short description, but hey, can’t go back now!
Call me pleasantly surprised! For being so short, this fic has a lot packed into it. Politics. Despair. Hope. It’s impressive that you can build so much in so short a story. Honestly, I would totally read a longer story in this continuity. Seems like there’s so much more that could be done with the idea that the griffons live in a society similar to those behind the iron curtain. Maybe the Student 6 get involved and help bring about the fall of the tyrannical regime? I’m just spitballing here, but that’d be pretty cool.
An interesting take on another direction the griffon lands could have taken after the fall of the monarchy. It might be interesting to see this version of "The Lost Treasure of Griffonstone".
Check out this awesome review you got!
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Thank you for the review, it is very much appreciated! Admittedly, I wasn't planning to write beyond what I had here, but I have been considering writing more for this. I figure at some point there could be a sequel or continuation. Again, thank you for your comment!
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Thank you for the comment! This is not something I have considered before, perhaps it is. Thank you again!
Gallka is that supposed to be his real name or a nickname?
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It's a nickname, sort of like making "Nicholas" into "Nick".
Poor Gallus he felt like nothing would never get better but then Gabby came around and talking with him how is he been doing he felt like nothing would never get better and nothing would change so Gabby kind of suggested that he should go to the school of friendship but he has some thoughts he doesn't want to because he felt like he's just running away from his problems well technicality not really he just needs a break from it and maybe someday it will change he just has to be patient and don't worry he will meet other five creatures who will become his friends 😊
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Ahh I see ok I just wanted to make sure
This was an... almost somber read. Especially considering somw current events... but I think it hit almost spot on. I always thought Gallus was more mature in the show than he let on, so this kind of fits that whole depiction. It just... makes sense.
Very good, short read. Pretty much the perfect length! Not too engaging, but engaging enough that I could empathize with these two opposites sides of the same coin.
Onward we go though! Time to read the sequel! For better or for worse...
Wow. All I can say is REALLY great job on this one-shot. Greatly enjoyed this chat between Gallus and Gabby just before the former enrolls in the friendship school. Yeah. I can see the points both of them made, though Gabby had an ESPECIALLY good point about how things WILL eventually change for the better if one maintains a positive attitude and continues working for it. And, of course, we KNOW Gallus will definitely live to see things change for the much better (and, in fact, play a key role in that).
All in all, the characterizations and wrap-up are definitely quite well done.
Any reader deterred by the length is completely missing out here. You managed to weave an excellent dialogue with very real politics and poverty impacting the characters. Plus, you managed to make it as effective as hell. The ideas of the mail fraud taboo and bak and forth between Gabby and Gallus really ring true about how youth in these dire situations will still show some of their childishness in how they interact with the world. Great work!