Yesterday was a big day. The best part was my sister, Flitterheart, and I both got our cutie marks! My mark even came with a crazy new ability, too. And I got a new sister, well, sort of. She calls herself ‘Cozy Glow’ and she lives in my head. I haven’t told Mommy or Flitterheart about her yet. Maybe tomorrow. Right now though, I’ve got to prepare for our double cuteceañera. The whole family’s going to be there, and we’re always strongest when we’re all together.
Unlimited power!
Will you stop that, Cozy Glow? It’s not funny.
Mark my words, Cozyheart, we’re going to take over the world. Or die trying.
Written for the Cozy Glow contest, I chose the prompt: Cutie mark yesterday, cuteceañera today!
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Once again, the disabled ratings ruins what could be a cool story. I was even going to read it too, and I usually don't read Cozy Glow stories. Not like it is though.
Call it being petty. But if authors can't be mature about the fact that not everyone will like your story, and will tell you as much (the good ones will at least tell you why they don't like it), then you shouldn't be a fanfic writer.
I like the little touches, like how she doesn't "Golly" until after hearing her new friend, and how her friend becomes more aggressive and erratic the more she relies on it. And forcing her sister to move first, proactively becoming reactive.
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Throughout most of humanity and the internets existence, there were no voting mechanisms on stories. Traditionally one expresses their liking by spreading or talking about it, not clicking on a colored arrows.
an interesting concept, I hope for a sequel that takes this further
Schizophrenia. Or a demon taking over. Well done.
This could do well with a few lines of g̜͓̐́͘ͅl͓͌i̮͔̔͛t̬̘͈̻͌̋̀̕͞ͅc̛̞͚͎̖̹̉̂̚͝h̥̫͚͉͛̎̈͛ ̠̗̰̭̺̀̽̃̓͡t̼̰̑̄e̲̎͘͟x̲͌ţ̲͉̫̉̊̃͆.
The characterization in this story is complex and interesting. I love how it simultaneously works as a cute slice of life and as ominous foreshadowing for show events. I would really love a sequel, especially if it was modern show timeline's Cozy Glow's actions with Cozyheart being the voice in the head, along with her meeting up with Flitterheart again.
And now I'm wondering where she came from... timing might fit a fragment of the Nightmare, but this doesn't quite seem it's style.
Well done. I'd like to see more of this.
As adorable as this is, it makes me sad that this poor little girl is going to get stuck in stone because of the evil voice in her head.