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Prince Artemis takes his marefriend on an adventure to an island he used to visit. An island otherwise lost to the outside world thanks to the passage of time.
But what happens if they encounter some unusual locals who worship the moon?
The story is partly inspired by Amarynceus's amazing Tuna boat picture.
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Quick note on spelling- I think somehow you meant bowl and not bowel- though I do wonder what island versions of Kirin would drink out of. Probably not intestines. Though that's a minor fix if so.
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Otherwise, I really liked this non conflict story. The island kirin sound like a really cool idea and I was thinking more Maori influence as they entered the story. Though now I am wondering what a Kirin haka would be. With how infrequent the show moved outside of the relative normalcy of Equestria, having a random island like this is a nice change of pace- the scenery you put in there, yet again, made it feel real and immediate. Cause I didn't have moments where I was confused about the island and what it looked like. Felt like a realized island and while you could probably extend this into a larger overall story if you wanted to- this was a nice breather episode. And I'm so used to you writing female Luna that having a male version, while odd and not expected, wasn't half bad. The dialogue between the two of them made me laugh especially when Twilight was so adamant on cataloging everything of the journey- very on point there.
I thought this was rather cute too since this felt like an early Twicorn story since she's not all into the kirin's honoring her and pretty much making her a part of their stories. And seeing that Artemis got drunk off of the beverage they shared sounds rather unexpected but cute. Especially since I don't write Luna as a pony that can often get inebriated.
But overall, more Kirin stuff, especially odd alternate Kirin stuff like this is fun and world buildy.
that was a joy to read
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Thanks.
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Derp. you caught me there. Thanks for pointing that out. You missed my purposeful spelling mistake though I see. Guess no rum for the two ponies after all.
Yes, I guess there is some maori influence in there too. Mostly just a random Kiwi though. Having spent so much time in Fiji, I can say there is a lot more Fijian in the kirin of that island
A Kirin haka would certainly be something epic. Maybe if they explore other islands they will run into a group who does it
I actually really enjoyed writing male Luna. It's a further different layer to the ship that already sails so well. And i was totally writing this with early TwiAlicorn in mind. I do consider alicorns still able to get inebriated, they just have a high tolerance. Artemis was being given a double dose and hence it affected him
Judging from the lack of reception thus far, I think this story will remain simply a one shot. As fun as it was to write and explore, I think I already have more than enough on my to write list. It was a fun worldbuilding exercise and something very different to FotR, Crashing Angels or even Our Daughter, so yea.
I gotta finish that next chapter of Our Daughter... I just realized its been over half a year since last chapter...
Hmmm, nope.
Artemis was the goddess of the moon. Among other things.
You genderbent her and slapped on some basic moon horse traits.
This felt like a violation of two characters, not just one.
I mean,... male Artemis is male Luna because~ different pronoun?
My main issue with this is that there's nothing in this story that wouldn't have worked with female Artemis/Luna.
The character shows no stereotypical male behavior or character traits that feed into the story.
Most instances of fanon Luna are more alpha than this male deity.
It's just gender bending for the sake of it.
And technically this shouldn't even have a Luna tag. She's not in the story.