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Marecum
Hey Luna, let's have sex. Expect lots of non-con. PFP by Kipsu
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Powerful and blunt. ^_^
You could go with a little more descriptions and "meat" on a blowjob and anal parts. Same with humiliation and dirty talk from stallions, there was a nice part with her "deserving it" from being an uppity tourist, but it was over too quick.
Overall, it is a solid story, I like the pacing, feels raw and realistic.
I've read a lot of rape stories but this one was absolutely horrifying. Most rape stories focus on showing how good it felt to the rapist and don't focus on how horrible it was for the victim. This was mostly a description of what it was like for the victim, which doesn't make for good rape fantasies unless your kink is hurting other people (this is not the fantasy of most people - including people who have a rape fetish. There's a reason why the "eventual consensual rape" folder exists in the rape group.).
This isn't meant as a criticism - merely as an observation. This is most likely why you got so many downvotes. As I was reading the story I was waiting for the arousal to come, but it had a really hard time because the story was about 80% focused on how horrible it was for Rarity and only 20% was about how good it felt to the rapist. Most people have a rape fantasy because they enjoy the domination and power, not because they like causing others pain (there are people out there that do, but most don't). The story wasn't poorly written, but I'm still refraining from giving an upvote because of this (I did not downvote the story).
Don't let this discourage you. You still got a good number of upvotes so people did like the story and the subject matter. But if you want to appeal to a larger audience, you should focus on the rapist more and not the victim in your next rape story. Maybe you don't care about people downvoting your story. There are people on here that write scat and diaper fetish stories that are like 95% downvoted and they write dozens of them despite that. I write a lot of incest stories, which usually have at least 20% -30% downvotes due to the subject matter. Whatever you want to write is fine. I'm just giving you my thoughts.
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Heya! Thanks for reading my story, even if it wasn’t exactly what you were looking for. I completely agree with what you said; lots of people don’t go to rape stories for the honest and brutal pain the victim goes through. And for those people, I would definitely say this story isn’t for them. This fic is, in fact, meant to be titillating to the reader, but is targeted towards those who get off the hardcore agony and reality for the victim. For those intense sexual sadists who enjoy seeing others suffering. I know I personally don’t seek out “eventually consensual,” if I’m looking for rape I want something intense, detailed, and focused on the sadism.
That is not meant to be a slap to people who DO look for fics like the ones you mentioned, but the truth is this fic was entirely intentional with its detail and POV focus. I look towards artists like Headless_Rainbow for inspiration, her fics get majorly downvoted often times but she still has fans. Even now, I don’t look to the downvotes I got (I fully expected a majority downvotes), I’m checking out how every few hours someone puts this story into their “favorites.” This story went into a lot of people’s faves, and that’s good enough for me. Knowing that I’m not the only one who enjoys this stuff, and that others in fact did too, motives me to make more.
Thanks for the read though! I really appreciated reading this observation
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I actually liked the pain and suffering Rarity experienced, sadly there just wasn't nearly enough of it.
Overall, it was alright. Straightforward rape, use and forget, sort of like a condom. I think you stressed Rarity's 'generosity' a bit too much. Giving one streetworker a hot drink while ignoring a dozen others seems like a vain and superficial getsure to me.
I like the victim point-of-view, although omniscient might be more satisfying, depending on your bent.
A number of typos and questionable sentences, but that is to be expected.
There is my humble opinion. Not a bad start.
This is good! One thing that I dont get though is how they knew Rarity was certain to get pregnant? She was afraid of that and they sensed it, but I don't get how it becomes absolutely certain. Was she in heat? Did I miss something?
This is a sick and disgusting story.
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If you dont like rape just avoid.
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I'm still going to say my opinion, so I don't know why you even replied back, random. Weirdos like you don't need to be around kids.
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I'm just saying, the writer says in the description that the fic will include rape and a lot of bad stuff. So if you dont like the idea you can just avoid it.
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And I'm just saying that if I want to go under a comment section and state my opinion, I am tf
This was an absolute delightful read. Thank you for giving us all such a fun bit of Rarity rape.
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I'm not about to go on some spiel about you not being entitled to your opinion or any shit like that, because that'd be stupid to say. What I will say is that you aren't in the best of positions to share that opinion in such a tactless manner because the warning signs were there on the story's cover page. If you read it anyway and were disgusted anyway, then by all means have that opinion. Have it, but keep it to yourself.
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This is a mfing comment section, meant for opinions. I can comment wherever I want to.
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Then at least be tactful about it. It's not like the author didn't have the decency to warn any who considered reading the story about the content that would definitely be upsetting to some people.
With how beautiful Rarity is who could resist fucking her?
I enjoyed it
Good fic, but I’d personally love a ‘rape aftermath’ followup chapter.
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I think the draw of this one is that it's a more accurate description of what rape is like. Most rape fics have the mare feeling pleasure and hating themselves for it, which is also hot, but it's not what real rape victims feel.
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I have to agree there isn't enough fics that concentrate on how actually horrible it is for the victim. Of course there's nothing wrong with liking either one of those, any more than there's something wrong with liking any kind of violent fiction.
Anyway, very well done fic.
Damn I wish for once one of these stories had an aftermath. I read for the aftermath.
But anyway, yes, this was... good? Well, in terms of writing.
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Yeah some kind pony like Coco Pommel or a kind stallion find her and she can recover from the trauma. The stallion could fall in love with her and help her get justice and raise her foal, or maybe get an abortion?