Keeping The Dragon

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Dusk Melody

Dusk Melody #1 · Aug 14th, 2018 · 11 · ·

I'm sorry. The description needs a lot of work. There are tense disagreements, wrong verbs used throughout and it is very off-putting to a reader.

Thequietone04

Thequietone04 #2 · Aug 14th, 2018 · 1 · 3 ·

I liked it

HF Fury

HF Fury #3 · Aug 15th, 2018 · 2 · ·

It's not bad but seriously you need to cut back on the description, it gives details that don't need to be there and makes the first part of the story feel almost like cut and paste. You also need a decent proofreader/editor. I'll give it a like only because I can see what it could be with decent editing.

omeaga911

omeaga911 #4 · Aug 15th, 2018 · 2 · ·

Pretty good… but needs a little tender care in the editing department

Comment posted by Ryshinki deleted Sep 3rd, 2018

Infamous Paradox

Infamous Paradox #6 · Aug 15th, 2018 · · ·

I like how the story is going, but the pacing is a bit too fast when introducing characters especially right at the end, you probably could have stretched it out a bit more by making Spike, mate with two at the time, that could have help in adding a few more chapters and expanding it the story.

OmniFox

OmniFox #7 · Aug 16th, 2018 · · ·

Did I already told you about another Spike shipping story?

ShadowSpider

ShadowSpider #8 · Aug 18th, 2018 · · ·

Not bad but it really needs an editor. There are grammar mistakes abound. Mostly when it comes to tense. Which makes a story very hard to read. The pacing needs to be slowed a bit. And the large blocks of text needs to be chopped into smaller bits.

Please feel free to PM if you are interested in an editor. This is actually fairly tame compared to other works I've seen and edited, and could be cleaned up in an hour or two.

Claws And Hooves

Claws And Hooves #9 · Aug 19th, 2018 · · ·

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Can you give any references?

dlazerous

dlazerous #10 · Aug 20th, 2018 · 1 · ·

Commas are your friends, please use them. This needs an editor in the worst way. This idea for the story is good but the run on sentences, poor punctuation, tense changes, all make it impossible to read.

AmansMarium