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Cutest Boxer Puppy Ever


Hey! It’s your favourite boxer here. Just chilling. Won’t be on much though we can catch up on discord.

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Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends like hurting them she is evil and she is inviting her friends for a sleepover. Her dark secret will finally come out.

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Comments ( 11 )
Comment posted by Misty Spell deleted Jul 31st, 2017
Comment posted by PixelMoon deleted Jul 31st, 2017
Comment posted by MIKEANTHONY321 deleted Jul 31st, 2017

Thanks for reading my story Forget Love. I'm returning the favor. Here are some minor things that irked me:
Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends like hurting them she is evil and she is inviting her friends for a sleepover
Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends as she invites them for a sleepover. Her dark secret will finally come out.

“Found it!”
“Found them!”

Ok everypony
Okay, everypony

Princess Lunar
Princess Luna

Rarity said, “Darlings oh please, darlings please stop fighting when you darlings were fighting
(she might use darling once in a sentence, but 3 times?)

The both Princesses said, “Ok!”
Both Princesses said, “Okay!”

Overall, you have a nice conflict to work off of. I wish I knew what the cause of Fluttershy turning evil was. Perhaps that's something that could have been addressed.

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Thank you for correcting me sometimes editing is fun. :twilightsmile:

Hi there mind if I use that cover of yours one more time?

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