Fluttershy's Darkest Secret

Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends like hurting them she is evil and she is inviting her friends for a sleepover. Her dark secret will finally come out.

Chapters (4)

Inviting Her Friends For A Sleepover · 11th Jul 2017 · 263 words
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The Sleepover · 11th Jul 2017 · 40 words
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The Secret Comes Out! · 11th Jul 2017 · 424 words
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The Main 5 Saving Equestria · 12th Jul 2017 · 310 words
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Comment posted by Misty Spell deleted Jul 31st, 2017

PixelMoon

PixelMoon #2 · Jul 13th, 2017 · · · Inviting Her Friends For A Sleepover ·

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Sparkling blaze

Sparkling blaze #5 · Aug 14th, 2017 · · · The Main 5 Saving Equestria ·

Great story

Bad Dragon

Bad Dragon #6 · Sep 9th, 2017 · 1 · · The Main 5 Saving Equestria ·

Thanks for reading my story Forget Love. I'm returning the favor. Here are some minor things that irked me:
Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends like hurting them she is evil and she is inviting her friends for a sleepover
Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends as she invites them for a sleepover. Her dark secret will finally come out.

“Found it!”
“Found them!”

Ok everypony
Okay, everypony

Princess Lunar
Princess Luna

Rarity said, “Darlings oh please, darlings please stop fighting when you darlings were fighting
(she might use darling once in a sentence, but 3 times?)

The both Princesses said, “Ok!”
Both Princesses said, “Okay!”

Overall, you have a nice conflict to work off of. I wish I knew what the cause of Fluttershy turning evil was. Perhaps that's something that could have been addressed.

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