My name is John J. Rambo. I'm a warrior well was, I sit here in my rocking chair bleeding out I think how'd it come to this, where will it go. All I know is my fight here is done and I'll keep all of their memories alive...even if I'm not
I DO NOT OWN THE RIGHTS TO RAMBO OR MLP:FIM ALL RIGHTS GO TO RESPECTIVE OWNERS
As a Rambo fan I approve just fix the typos
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I'll go threw and fix them, I'm trying to come up with how I want to execute the next chapter
ok not bad, I'll keep an eye on this.
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Thanks I'll try not to disappoint
This is interesting. I'll keep an eye on this
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Thank you I'm gonna hopefully have chapter 2 out in a couple days I just need to dicide what town I want it to take place in
DO MORE CAPS LOCK!
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Gotcha
I like the story but please get an editor
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Im new on here so I don't know anyone that could help me
Go back and proofread the chapter 2 or 3 times before posting. You'll catch alot of your mistakes then.
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Alright thanks
Keep it up. I find this very interesting
Spelling errrrers !!!!
Asid good
What?
They are all human weapons. You didn't even change names.
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I'll double check it and fix it soon
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Could you point out where you saw that i didn't see it on my double check
Now, I haven't seen the movies, but how is Rambo a "machine"?
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Just a figure of speech, or is it?...nah its just a figure of speech
More pls and thank u
Alright ill try i've had writers block and ive beem trying to think of the introduction for Artificer and a way, mostly like what race do I want him to be earth, pegasi, or unicorn, im leaning towards unicorn tbh, his childs name and race if you have any suggestions please feel free to share them
How about just making Rambo with the ability to appear everywhere
he sees and some pocket storage dimension to make this treck more easy
I'll check what weapons and machines , inventions , ithems I got notes and share some notes
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Alright give me your ideas and I'll try implementing some im still kinda stuck on Artificer like i kind of have an idea im leaning towards him being a unicorn black smith cause this d and d youtube video gave me a really good idea for a golem that i want to implement. I've narrowed it down a bit but most of it is still confusing that and I only have my phone and because of the virus my local library is closed and i prefer writing on a laptop and my job has cut me to literally only two days a week so Im barely getting by, I'll try and have the story updated by next week if I can, I just don't want to disappoint readers and deter them from the story, I really want to do something semi original
Currently I sugggested vARIOUS OISONS , POISON RESARCH AMMUNITION , ACID BULLETS , ACID GRENADES , OTHER BULLET MODIFICATIONS WEAPONS , PROTHESIS , TRANSMITTER ,
Suggested golems/robots to work aditionally .
Vibration dagger with vibration muff of the handle to make it cut better faster more things .
some Armour
I have A fuck ton to check the restt of weapons and ithems
got bored annoyed searching in my old notes , still that info should be interesting
Pretty good equipment
This text means clarity Ithink you mean
Very good Distraction, now go bavk(Back) to sleep,
"Sharo Talon, Derpy, I know you'll see things my way and when you do, you'll have new ammo that brings (pain)and suffering."
The Equipment is satisfactional , what are dum dum bullets .
This bullet is great , With this design Those Caribu should now have even bigger difficulties)
I'll check if it is more ideas , but that is still good enought .
Hmm Very concentrated of hidrogen sulfite could be used as flamable gass , maybe bomb full with methane and gunpowder?
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fixed thank you
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other small mistake , glad to help . By the way inspired by analisis of Shereck's fart source concentrating methane or flamable gass aditionally may help as second resorce plus flamable gass is more easy tto replenish than matherial in some occasions .
Concenrating me
"Of course mommy, Name: Distraction, Designation: To help mommy get sister back, Programing to sleep in my bag, until it hits the ground. I am then to call out mommy, and if you don't answer I am totear(to tear) my way out of the bag to protect you. I can make myself burst into flames using the sodium metal on or near my joints to start the fires, and I can also use the acid bag in my stomach to blind enimies and corode metals, stones and other iteams." Distraction said finishing its preset designation.
Water proof from RUST And it's own acid must be considered of cource , or antydote to lessen the impact , of cource
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I'll add those things in a later chapter, along with a few other things I'm thinking of
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IF I have time to check what else . could offer ,
beside those I did not had time and Ihave to check tons of pages and is not a joke.
Do you like the idea for the poison arrows and the fast firing crossbow ? Fast yet silent but powerful ,
Bolts/arrows should be esier to make than guns .
Supressors for silent weapons of cource
depends what is more comfortable , fast shooting sniper crossbow or the mentioned rifles befoure offering some rifles
For now I offered bullet modifications .
And that bullet is pretty good as I said
and better to use guns
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I'll look into cross bows but theu aren't going to be making many weapons mostly ammo, plus I'm going to have them update they're wagons in case their found and Ive gotten a few ideas of the internet for armor and wagons
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Basicly the cross bow can zoom like sniper and shoot powerfull shots , But silent . That is simply said .
depends what is easy to make for ammo . or just ejecticng the projectile with pressurre . or like hiccup's shield .
And some adjustingfor the size of the ejected crossbow .
And also offered if shooting wood stakes/or something big as spear
shafts something akin portable balista but with reduced weght
with out decresing the power output much and if can be loaded more of those as well .
The thing to be better accurate and powerful than hand
trown knife from proffecionalist to with speed of arrow/bullet
and the same projectile adjusting the size , if that would not hinder .
I think something similiar to rubber may work for
the bullet adjusting the size when is loded , and if can not hinder shooting as well if not just to fit whatever is jammed and shoot it .
Nice
Lucky shot at the openings could hurt ther .
There are WEAK SPOTS FOR LUCKY HIT OF DAGGER , Battle senbon or arrotw to sneak trought . The chance is still 2/5 % at worst
needs keen eye and precision .
https://www.wattpad.com/872619223-page-3-drawings-redaction-number-2-untitled-part
Someone with ought dignity and keen eye could aim in the exposed part of the thigs
and the armpit
Thighs , Armpit , Neck
I did not see neither the armour , neither distraction ,
please send a link and notify me in new updates .
NO CAPES !
The Openings marked in red have about 0.1% of exposed part
still pretty good , much better than some armour designs wheh opened the hands to the chopping block
https://www.wattpad.com/872637545-page-3-drawings-redaction-number-2-untitled-part
Engine ?make it ligher?
That looks more like a tankish wagon .
Aerodynamics , more stream lined like a car .
Ok what wolves / Timbber wolves ? ?