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Vartil-Shadowalker


I write to let my active imagination out, but I'm learning as I go.

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My name is John J. Rambo. I'm a warrior well was, I sit here in my rocking chair bleeding out I think how'd it come to this, where will it go. All I know is my fight here is done and I'll keep all of their memories alive...even if I'm not

I DO NOT OWN THE RIGHTS TO RAMBO OR MLP:FIM ALL RIGHTS GO TO RESPECTIVE OWNERS

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As a Rambo fan I approve just fix the typos

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I'll go threw and fix them, I'm trying to come up with how I want to execute the next chapter

ok not bad, I'll keep an eye on this.

This is interesting. I'll keep an eye on this

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Thank you I'm gonna hopefully have chapter 2 out in a couple days I just need to dicide what town I want it to take place in

I like the story but please get an editor

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Im new on here so I don't know anyone that could help me

Go back and proofread the chapter 2 or 3 times before posting. You'll catch alot of your mistakes then.

Keep it up. I find this very interesting

What?
They are all human weapons. You didn't even change names.

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Could you point out where you saw that i didn't see it on my double check

Now, I haven't seen the movies, but how is Rambo a "machine"?

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Just a figure of speech, or is it?...nah its just a figure of speech

Alright ill try i've had writers block and ive beem trying to think of the introduction for Artificer and a way, mostly like what race do I want him to be earth, pegasi, or unicorn, im leaning towards unicorn tbh, his childs name and race if you have any suggestions please feel free to share them

How about just making Rambo with the ability to appear everywhere
he sees and some pocket storage dimension to make this treck more easy

I'll check what weapons and machines , inventions , ithems I got notes and share some notes

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Alright give me your ideas and I'll try implementing some im still kinda stuck on Artificer like i kind of have an idea im leaning towards him being a unicorn black smith cause this d and d youtube video gave me a really good idea for a golem that i want to implement. I've narrowed it down a bit but most of it is still confusing that and I only have my phone and because of the virus my local library is closed and i prefer writing on a laptop and my job has cut me to literally only two days a week so Im barely getting by, I'll try and have the story updated by next week if I can, I just don't want to disappoint readers and deter them from the story, I really want to do something semi original

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Currently I sugggested vARIOUS OISONS , POISON RESARCH AMMUNITION , ACID BULLETS , ACID GRENADES , OTHER BULLET MODIFICATIONS WEAPONS , PROTHESIS , TRANSMITTER ,
Suggested golems/robots to work aditionally .

Vibration dagger with vibration muff of the handle to make it cut better faster more things .

some Armour

I have A fuck ton to check the restt of weapons and ithems

got bored annoyed searching in my old notes , still that info should be interesting

"Of course mommy, Name: Distraction, Designation: To help mommy get sister back, Programg to sleep in my bag, until it hits the ground. I am then to call out mommy, and tear my way out of the bag to protect you. I can make myself burst into flames using the sodium metal on near my joints to start the fires, and i can also use the acid bag in my stomach to blind enimies and corode metals, stones and other iteams." Distraction said finishing its preset designation.

Pretty good equipment

"Very good Distraction, now go bavk to sleep, and I'll have you start your programming if i need you to." Artificer said and with that the glow in the golems eyes died and Artificer set about making some new ammunition for his friends. "Sharo Talon, Derpy, I know you'll see things my way and when you do, you'll have new ammo that brings oain and suffering."

This text means clarity Ithink you mean

Very good Distraction, now go bavk(Back) to sleep,

"Sharo Talon, Derpy, I know you'll see things my way and when you do, you'll have new ammo that brings (pain)and suffering."

The Equipment is satisfactional , what are dum dum bullets .

This bullet is great , With this design Those Caribu should now have even bigger difficulties)

I'll check if it is more ideas , but that is still good enought .

Hmm Very concentrated of hidrogen sulfite could be used as flamable gass , maybe bomb full with methane and gunpowder?

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other small mistake , glad to help . By the way inspired by analisis of Shereck's fart source concentrating methane or flamable gass aditionally may help as second resorce plus flamable gass is more easy tto replenish than matherial in some occasions .

Concenrating me

"Of course mommy, Name: Distraction, Designation: To help mommy get sister back, Programing to sleep in my bag, until it hits the ground. I am then to call out mommy, and if you don't answer I am totear(to tear) my way out of the bag to protect you. I can make myself burst into flames using the sodium metal on or near my joints to start the fires, and I can also use the acid bag in my stomach to blind enimies and corode metals, stones and other iteams." Distraction said finishing its preset designation.

Water proof from RUST And it's own acid must be considered of cource , or antydote to lessen the impact , of cource

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I'll add those things in a later chapter, along with a few other things I'm thinking of

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IF I have time to check what else . could offer ,
beside those I did not had time and Ihave to check tons of pages and is not a joke.

Do you like the idea for the poison arrows and the fast firing crossbow ? Fast yet silent but powerful ,
Bolts/arrows should be esier to make than guns .

Supressors for silent weapons of cource
depends what is more comfortable , fast shooting sniper crossbow or the mentioned rifles befoure offering some rifles
For now I offered bullet modifications .
And that bullet is pretty good as I said
and better to use guns

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I'll look into cross bows but theu aren't going to be making many weapons mostly ammo, plus I'm going to have them update they're wagons in case their found and Ive gotten a few ideas of the internet for armor and wagons

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Basicly the cross bow can zoom like sniper and shoot powerfull shots , But silent . That is simply said .
depends what is easy to make for ammo . or just ejecticng the projectile with pressurre . or like hiccup's shield .
And some adjustingfor the size of the ejected crossbow .

And also offered if shooting wood stakes/or something big as spear
shafts something akin portable balista but with reduced weght
with out decresing the power output much and if can be loaded more of those as well .

The thing to be better accurate and powerful than hand
trown knife from proffecionalist to with speed of arrow/bullet
and the same projectile adjusting the size , if that would not hinder .

I think something similiar to rubber may work for
the bullet adjusting the size when is loded , and if can not hinder shooting as well if not just to fit whatever is jammed and shoot it .

As I hammer away to shape and mold the armor I can't help but be amazed at what I've managed to create. Sharp Talon's armor was finally finished and it was the most advanced Griffith armor I had ever designed. I decided to use a mix of Steel, Titanium and Tungsten and not only is it durable it'll stop anything short of a damn high powered explosives.

Lucky shot at the openings could hurt ther .

There are WEAK SPOTS FOR LUCKY HIT OF DAGGER , Battle senbon or arrotw to sneak trought . The chance is still 2/5 % at worst
needs keen eye and precision .
https://www.wattpad.com/872619223-page-3-drawings-redaction-number-2-untitled-part

As I hammer away to shape and mold the armor I can't help but be amazed at what I've managed to create. Sharp Talon's armor was finally finished and it was the most advanced Griffith armor I had ever designed. I decided to use a mix of Steel, Titanium and Tungsten and not only is it durable it'll stop anything short of a damn high powered explosives.

Someone with ought dignity and keen eye could aim in the exposed part of the thigs
and the armpit

Derpy's armor was the same way almost. It was revolutionary just like Sharp Talons, it allowed full mobility of the wing's. It also used the same metals I also created small dimension boxes. Think of them like a back pack, a never ending backpack that can hold anything. My armor was more simple I didn't need to carry weapons, I only need to carry Distraction . I also made it so that my armor wouldn't interfer with my magic and as a just in case I also added a few throwing knives to my ensamble.

Thighs , Armpit , Neck

Derpy's armor was the same way almost. It was revolutionary just like Sharp Talons, it allowed full mobility of the wing's. It also used the same metals I also created small dimension boxes. Think of them like a back pack, a never ending backpack that can hold anything. My armor was more simple I didn't need to carry weapons, I only need to carry Distraction . I also made it so that my armor wouldn't interfer with my magic and as a just in case I also added a few throwing knives to my ensamble.

I did not see neither the armour , neither distraction ,

please send a link and notify me in new updates .

Rambo's armor was the hardest' I had to completely make his from scratch. I incorporated all of the features from my armor, Derpy's, and Sharp Talons. The only difference Rambo's had was, like mine there was no where for wings, instead he had a few holsters actually attached to his armor and he actually made his own machete and knives for it. I also made his armor more dark than ours were, which got me thinking I need to darken them up so this way we aren't seen if we infiltrate at night.

NO CAPES !
The Openings marked in red have about 0.1% of exposed part
still pretty good , much better than some armour designs wheh opened the hands to the chopping block
https://www.wattpad.com/872637545-page-3-drawings-redaction-number-2-untitled-part

I had built many thing in my line of work impenetrable armor, top of the line weapons, shields, for fucks sake I even built a fucking golem. But these wagons were the epitome of my life's work, they were the largest things I had ever really worked on I mean I know how to build a boiler but I've never done it before. Derpy and Sharp Talon had finished the second wagon as I was putting the finishing touches on the first wagon and it was finished I admired my work for only a little bit and set to work placing the armor on the second wagon.

Engine ?make it ligher?

I have finally finished the second wagon, it took me four hours but it's finally done.

That looks more like a tankish wagon .
Aerodynamics , more stream lined like a car .

Ok what wolves / Timbber wolves ? ?

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