• Published 12th Jul 2017
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Fluttershy's Darkest Secret - Cutest Boxer Puppy Ever

Fluttershy wants to be malicious to her friends for some reason, is it because she's evil?

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The Main 5 Saving Equestria

So they started hosing Equestria 2 hours later, they were finished then they went to Canterlot to meet Princess Celestia and Princess Lunar. “It was, Fluttershy who has been doing all of this please help us save Equestria Princess Lunar and Princess Celestia,” Twilight explained.

The both Princesses said. “Okay!”

“Thank you Princess Lunar and Princess Celestia,” Twilight said, 5 minutes later, they found Fluttershy she had a whole army of animals everyone started to fight, Twilight Sparkle cast a magical spell on the animals they turned good again now they were fighting Fluttershy.

Twilight said to the main 5. “Ok we are going to make a trap a trap is going to fall on Fluttershy, get it?”

The main 5 said, “We got it!”

“Good,” Twilight said, so they started making the trap, 10 minutes later they were done. “Pinkie stay there so Fluttershy can get close to the trap.”

“Okey dokey! Fluttershy over here!” Pinkie Pie said.

“There is no where to run Pinkie,” Fluttershy got close to the trap.

“Now!” Twilight shouted, the trap fell on Fluttershy.

“Grrr, I will get you for this!” Fluttershy said.

“No you won't!” Princess Celestia cast a magical spell on Fluttershy she turned back to her normal self again. “I think this is not the end of evil Fluttershy so you ponies have to keep an eye on Fluttershy to make sure this doesn't happen again if it does you have to tell us we need all of the elements of harmony we can't lose them.”

The main 5 said. “Ok eyes peeled, cross our heart hope to fly stick a cupcake in our eye!”

“I’m so sorry I didn't mean to I’m so sorry please forgive me,” Fluttershy said.

"We forgive you!” everypony said, and everything was back to normal in Equestria almost, because of the ponies that were killed!

Comments ( 9 )
Comment posted by PixelMoon deleted Jul 31st, 2017
Comment posted by MIKEANTHONY321 deleted Jul 31st, 2017

Thanks for reading my story Forget Love. I'm returning the favor. Here are some minor things that irked me:
Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends like hurting them she is evil and she is inviting her friends for a sleepover
Fluttershy wants to plan something for her friends as she invites them for a sleepover. Her dark secret will finally come out.

“Found it!”
“Found them!”

Ok everypony
Okay, everypony

Princess Lunar
Princess Luna

Rarity said, “Darlings oh please, darlings please stop fighting when you darlings were fighting
(she might use darling once in a sentence, but 3 times?)

The both Princesses said, “Ok!”
Both Princesses said, “Okay!”

Overall, you have a nice conflict to work off of. I wish I knew what the cause of Fluttershy turning evil was. Perhaps that's something that could have been addressed.

Thank you for correcting me sometimes editing is fun. :twilightsmile:

Hi there mind if I use that cover of yours one more time?

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