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Valorousspectre


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Soarin. A household name across Equestria. One of the fabled Wonderbolts, Soarin has no shortage of fans, of both the male and female variety, not to mention those that supposedly love him. But there's something different about this one, about these letters. For one thing, they're not in envelopes and, let's get real, who sends scrolls anymore?

In a tale where Anonymity is considered everything by the young, lovestruck mare, will she ever be able to reveal herself to him in time to court him properly? Does she even stand a chance? What is she hiding that is so important that she cannot reveal herself? Will the author ever stop asking these stupid questions?

Canon to the Demonheart Sub-verse. Not an official part of the storyline, occurs after "Pyrophobia."
Sequel can be found here:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/42725/Ghosts-of-Skeleton%27s-Past

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 140 )

A pony who's special talent is, what I'm assuming, scaring people. Interesting.

1008485
Bingo my friend. Hit the nail on the head so hard you busted straight through the wood you were nailing.
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Some constructive criticism is always welcome if you have suggestions.

The last half of this chapter is in italics. I don't know if it was intentional, but I noticed an extra italics bracket before it started. :derpyderp1:

Not at all bad. Certainly not what I was expecting, but in a good way. I think this deserves much more views and likes than it has. A couple of minor typing mistakes, but bearable. All in all it flowed smoothly, and was quite touching. Much better than half the romantic stories the dolts on this site manage to come up with. I will say, is there or will there be a sequel to this, detailing more between what happens between Skeleton Grin and Soarin? Maybe more about Skeleton Grin's past? If so, I'd say I MUST read it :twilightblush:

I have to say that this is an amazing story, I don't think I've read anything quite like it since I started reading pony fan fiction. I noticed a couple tiny mistakes here and there, usually just something not being capitalized. As for the story itself the OC was pretty unique and the development between her and Soarin was interesting. On the flip side we don't know much about Skeleton, how she got here scars, or how she came to be where she is now in both location and mental state. I suppose that's not really vital to the story but I would have loved to learn more about her, unless she's an OC from another story that I haven't read and I'm just missing out on something there. Also I know that things have to end at some point, but I would have liked to see what happens in the maze, and possibly further into the future between the two. Nevertheless I think this was a perfect end to my day, a great fiction and the thought of getting warm in my bed :derpytongue2:

P.S. I hope you eventually find the inspiration or inclination to write more about Skeleton, I said it already but I'll say it again, I'd love to learn more about the background of this OC. :pinkiehappy: And it looks like I'm not the only one with similar thoughts.

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well, to be honest this was going to be a one part tale, but I received that many requests concerning her past and her future I'm considering continuing it in a small story concerning not only future but past as well.

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Sorry about the mistakes I've made, I tried to catch them all. I have a tendency to get overexcited when I write. You're not missing anything from another story though, Skeleton Grin is one of my many characters and she made her debut in this tale.

I did actually begin to write a followup tale, 'Ghosts of Skeleton's Past', but I never got very far with it when I got caught up with all my rewriting. I might continue it it inbetween the rewrites though. It'll stop me from being bored at least and that's something.

Thanks for the praise guys :twilightblush:

This was fun, yet short read. Cheers!

1009253 There's no need to apologize for the tiny mistakes, it happens to everyone and it can be hard if you try to catch those errors by yourself. This is one of those stories that I can look past these little details and enjoy the story for what it is, especially since they're pretty uncommon in this fic. The title for the follow-up sounds interesting and I hope you do continue with it so I can sate my curiosity :pinkiehappy:

Nicely done!
I personally agree with comments #4 and especially #5,
they wrote better than what I could and very similar to what I would have so that's why I agree with them :pinkiesmile:

Again beautifully executed and I desire more of Skeleton Grin

>Says the story's a "one shot".
>Has eleven chapters.
Seems Legit.
All joking aside, it looks like it'll be an interesting read. Here's to hoping the OC's enjoyable.

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It's short in comparison to most. Only 16 and a half thousand words as opposed to 44 thousand.

I won't lie: The story felt rushed at the end, although the pacing was good otherwise. What I wish most, however, is that we'd gotten to know Grin better. Although scars often get noted as a Sue's quality, execution matters, and here the execution works well: I desperately want to know Grin's story. Almost as desperately as I want to know why the story was titled "Nyctophobia" when a fear of the dark did not figure into the plot at all.

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Fear of the dark is factored in many ways, simply not in the normal way. While I didn't actively make anypony afraid of the dark literally, there are many ways for one to perceive darkness. For example, In the darkness one perceives things in different ways. Soarin was kept in the dark about her identity, and he began to fear that he'd lose her, eventually giving into the fear and brought back out quickly by Fleetfoot. Skeleton Grin perceives Soarin's acceptance and affections for Fleetfoot, that were made in chaste and good faith, as a death warrant for her potential relationship, Her identity itself is kept in the shadows. She covers herself in black garments, appearing dark and mysterious. She hides her talent, keeping other ponies in the dark.

I'm using it as a big metaphor. Fear of the dark pertains to fear of the unknown in the way that the darkness veils the known, making our minds perceive it as unknown, or hides things that we'd rather know or would best be kept within the light.

It's complicated.

I loved it! :heart::twilightsmile: I really loved the pacing, it was juuuust right! I'm in love with the OC, and I hope to see more of her! Her backstory would be very interesting! :eeyup:

My good sir, I give you 9 lovesick Koalas out of 8!

Why do I feel my OC, Monotone, would like this mare you've got here?

I like it. Nice work.

I feel ridiculous reading this. I'm listening to the Knife Party remix of Save the World, by Swedish House Mafia. Listening to hard dubstep while reading a touching romantic fic is just...you get my point. :rainbowlaugh:

1009852
If it makes you feel better, I wrote most of my fiction (almost all romance) whilst listening to Hollywood Undead.

Simply amazing. Now I just need you to check me out of the insane asylum, okay?

Always watching the clock...the clock doesn't stop...it can't stop...it won't stop...I don't want it to stop...tick...tock.

Awesome story bro! keep up the great work! :twilightsmile:

A great read especially on my day off from work! Thanks for making my day Valorousspectre! :ajsmug:

oh man, just took me about 5 hours to read, totally awesome! :rainbowkiss: loved it too. i cant wait to see more. :pinkiesmile:

I don't really like romance stories because...I just don't, but this one is nice.
I like it. :twilightsmile:

1009852 I like that song. xD

I was getting bored waiting for updates to appear... so i went browsing and i found this. now trust me when i say that ive read alot on this site (3,128,000 words:pinkiecrazy:) this is one of the best in my books

Great job, this is awesome!

Oh please make a follow up story to this :pinkiesad2:

Amazing! I loved this story from start to finish, and Grin is a very interesting character. It would be amazing if we could know more about her and her backstory. All in all 10 out of 10 for this fic it's been a while since ive enjoyed a fic like this :twilightsmile:

Holy jesus Christ in heaven I've collected a few comments on this!
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This was actually a stroke of inspiration tale, so it's a little rushed, particularly towards the end, But I'm glad you like it and I plan to.
1013284
Awww, Thanks buddy. I certainly try~
1013403
Well, I'm glad you took five hours out of your life to read my story~ I'm grateful you did and glad you enjoyed it.:twilightblush:
1014045
Would you look at that! Even peoples who don't like romance like this story! No but seriously, I'm glad you liked it.
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Hory Sheet that's a lot of words. Thanks a lot for the compliment man, it means a lot to me.
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Danke
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Well thank you for the compliment~ And that brings me to our last comment...
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A followup story. You know I've gotten a lot of people ask me on here and fanfic.net if I can/if I am making a followup tale for Nyctophobia. You know, originally, I was simply going to leave it at this, but SOOOOOOO many people wanted to hear about Skeleton's past that I... well...
You'll have to keep an eye out won't you?

1024829 What can I say? Believable, well written. Romance isn't my thing, but I'm a sucker for a good story.

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I'm writing a sequel for it describing Skeleton's past if that interests you.

1025875 Sounds great. I'd like to read that. :twilightsmile:

1024829 oh I'll be keeping a very very close eye on you :trixieshiftleft: :trixieshiftright:

Wow, that was touching :heart::heart:
I hope you'll write a sequel or something :), I really want to know more about our little Grin, she's absolutly cute and a lovely OC, one of the best I know so far to be honest^^.
Great story, dude, I really like your style and your story ideas fit perfectly with that what I desire :D. I beg you for writing more stories like this, or at least continue this one. I love this OC. I love her character so much, even if I dont know so much, she caught all of my heart.
Keep it up!
Sincerely,
Galicorn
(sorry about my enlish^^-> ain't my first language)

Wow, this is making a great late night marathon. Thanks man!!! :rainbowlaugh:

Wow this was sooo good! WHY DOESNT IT HAVE MORE GREEN THUMBS? :flutterrage:

You have an excellent story here <3

This is one of the best fics I have ever read. And I mean that honestly. Have a mustache: :moustache:

Love this story. Its brilliant:rainbowkiss:

So good cant stop reading this. Love it:pinkiehappy:

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