This story is enjoyable. I have read many stories here on Fimfiction, ranging from expertly done to shallow. With your story I can definitely say I truly enjoyed it. I felt connected to the main character and, though it was short, immersed within the world you created. The music you were inspired by was also a good background to read this story in, it complimented the mood. Keep up the good work, and even though this is a good place to stop with Prime and Coco, I wouldn't mind reading more about them. You had my curiosity, now you have my attention.

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I'm glad to hear it, and thank you for the follow!

I'd never developed an OC before, but I felt like there were no potential suitors that would fit well when it came to courting Coco, so I had to make my own.

The hardest thing about this story was making them their own person, and not a manifestation of myself, and while there are certain parallels between Prime Value and I, I think I did a fairly good job.

The atmosphere was actually really easy, I don't live in the city. Though before writing this, I had visited New York's Time Square, and that was the vibe I wanted, which coupled nicely with Prime's cynicism.

All in all, I was theory crafting potential sequel ideas, but nothing tangible enough to make them concrete. If there is a sequel, it won't be for a long while. Though if you want to expedite the process, you can PM me any ideas you may have.

More on the way soon! Two one-shots lined up and finishing a story that's been on hiatus for nearly two years.

Done and done, eheh.

Great story, Jack, really. The cannonically accurate ending was both sweet and satisfying.

I want to see more of these kinds of stories, not just from you, but on Fimfic in general. I could feel a sense of emotional attachment that you had these two, and it made the writing all that more passionate.

Adorable, cute, and it only got better as I progressed.

Good job

This was a nice short and fluffy read. I'll do a shout out to hopefully get a few more readers for you. I enjoyed the story!

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You're the best.

A nice, short and fluffy read. I liked it very much.

And it has good potential for a sequel.

Cheers!
\m/

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Thank you, though I'm not sure if I'm ready for a sequel any time soon.

...Why did I never found this fic in the past? And I was on the progress of making a Coco fic too

This is definitely a classic, I can clearly picture Coco saving someone that ends up like Prime. The length of the story is a bit... 'unique', I would say. It definitely goes for a while, but the scenes are short and pretty compact, so it doesn't feel too long, though there are some parts where the pacing is a tad too quick, it's still pretty good~

You mentioned the 'drunk Coco cliche', but I'm glad that Prime didn't take that opportunity, making the drunk Coco more cute then anything else It might actually be a necessary to get things going~

I think one of the strongest moment in the fic is when Rarity finds out about Prime's brothers, offers him a job, but he declines. Wasn't expecting that at all, knowing how he seems to care for Coco by not being a burden and able to get his own money. Now I wonder what happens if he accepted that job, does one night of 'yee-haw' with Coco before he departs... then he get to return to Manehatten when Rarity opens a branch there, setting a happy reunion with Coco? That sounds pretty legit

I'd give this fic a solid 8.5/10~ Definitely a gem of value