Chapter 8 Part 2: The Custody Begins
Diamond Tiara had always wanted to visit the Friendship Castle. She'd already been inside Princess Twilight's previous treehouse home and was not impressed at all, despite her expertly faked enthusiasm on the day, and was eager to see what the alicorn's new upgraded digs were like.
The thought of touring such a prestigious building really appealed to her sense of glamour and celebrity, alas without any official business there she dared not venture anywhere near the crystalline structure, and despite bountiful nagging sessions to mean ol' Miss Cheerilee, her teacher refused to organise a class trip there as "The Princess Is Always Busy".
Now as it turned out, she was actually going to be living there for an extended period, thirty-one days or thereabouts. Just that very morning, she would've been absolutely cock-a-hoop at the mere notion of spending a surprise holiday at such a distinguished, luxurious address, which even eclipsed her own humungous mansion for sheer size.
So many beds to bounce on, such an abundance of bannisters to slide down, so many rooms to explore... and if Daddy could take a break from his heavy workload to accompany her and Spoiled would do the decent thing for once by staying far, far away, this vacation might start verging on perfection itself.
Alas, circumstances being what they were, Diamond wasn't particularly looking forward to being the 'guest of honour' at the royal citadel at all. Especially as she'd be spending most of her time with somepony who she regarded, up until now, as a certifiable nutcase.
Still, she was a Rich, and Rich's 'just ain't quitters at all', as her real father would say. She was Diamond by name, and Diamond by nature: hard on the inside, and impenetrable on the outside. She'd lick this little obstacle no sweat, then it would be just her and Daddy all alone forever more, and she'd never have to see Spoiled Milk ever again when the repulsive mare took her long awaited one-way ticket back to Fillydelphia. She'd be at the train station to see Spoiled off of course, but the mood would be one of celebration, not misery.
Even with all the awkward stuff her dreadful stepmother had sneaked onto that darn contract, the confident filly was positive she could cope with whatever setbacks life might throw at her in the next few weeks. The gratifying sight of Spoiled, looking all depressed and forlorn as the locomotive ground to a halt, knowing that her way of life was coming to an end and it was a return to milking cows and making cottage cheese for a living for her, was worth the price of admission alone.
All Diamond had to do was grit her teeth and survive the unwanted administrations of her obsessed birth mother for a short period of time, then she was home free (in more ways than one). Speaking of which...
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"Are you comfortable up there, darling? Is there anything I can do for you?"
"...Yes, Ms Glimmer. No, Ms Glimmer."
"Pardon me? I think somepony forgot to call me by my proper name. So, let's try that again... shall we, dear?"
"... I'm fine, 'Mom'."
"Now, that's much better. I understand it might take a while to get used to thinking me as your new mother, which is why we should try to practice these things early on. I can't tell you how much I'm looking forward to having you around! I mean, as much as I adore your Uncle Spike and Auntie Twilight, they do spend lots of time together and sometimes I feel a bit left out. Now that I have my own daughter back though, I'm sure the pair of us will never feel alone ever again! I've got so much to tell you, teach you, show you... oh, I simply have to introduce you to Trixie! She's not going to believe it when I tell her..."
"Can't we just talk about all this later, please? In case you hadn't noticed, 'Auntie' and 'Uncle' are already well out of sight on the path in front of us. Also, don't forget... this is only for the next month, and as soon as that's over I'll be back to living at Rich Mansion. Whether we stay in contact after that, I just don't know."
"Y-Yes, of course, darling. That decision will be entirely up to you, and by the end of it I hope to prove that I can be the parental figure that you truly deserve, after all the suffering you must've gone through. Fancy me leaving you all alone with that monster and her never-there husband for the best part of a decade! What on Equestria was I thinking?! Time for a fresh start for both of us, I say. I realise it'll be tough at first, but I firmly believe with all my heart, that if you give me a chance..."
"I appreciate all the effort you're making so that I feel special 'Mom', but right now I have to admit, you're making me just a little uncomfortable. We've barely met after all, and the first thing you did was drag me along with magic, so it's a little premature to assume..."
"You're right, you're absolutely right. Maybe I am rushing things a tad. It's just that I've been waiting for this day for such a long time, so you'll have to forgive me for going a little overboard! I'll quieten down a bit, but you can't expect me to stem the flow of happiness which is running through me now! One day, when you have fillies or colts of your own, I hope you understand what I mean."
"While I'm glad you're pleased with seeing me for the first time in years after you left me behind 'Mom', and I honestly want us to have some kind of a relationship, it's going to take a while for me to adjust to having you around, so let's take it easy for now, shall we? In the meantime, we better get a move on. It'll soon be pitch black, and Luna isn't going to wait for us 'til she raises the Moon, you know..."
"... And I've just remembered: Twilight locks the castle up after a certain hour, and I don't want to be stuck outside in the rain again! You think she'd make an exception for her personal student, but you'd be sorely mistaken. Hold on tight to my mane darling, I'm about to cast a spell which should give us a little burst of speed..."
"W-Wait. I'm not saying you're incapable of that feat 'Mom', because word around town is that you're quite the magician. But don't you think that's just a little drastic, considering we're only about a mile from..."
"No time for hesitation, dear! One thing you'll quickly learn about me is when I make a decision, I stick to it. Well, apart from the choices I made to remove everypony's cutie marks and wipe Auntie Twilight's friendships from existence, but maybe it was for the best that I didn't follow through with those. This is the incantation's maiden voyage too, I'm so excited! I've been waiting for just the right occasion to try it out, and I can think of no better moment than with my own flesh and blood here to witness it firsthoof! Brace yourself..."
"W-What?! E-Er, actually I've just noticed, it's quite a nice evening. I-I think I'll just climb off your back now and walk the rest of the way, if it's all the same to you. No offens..." WHOOSH!
Spike and Twilight, having said goodnight to their other friends and having a genial conversation about something or other a thousand yards on the road ahead, suddenly found themselves bowled over like tenpins as a pinkish blur suddenly careened past them at a pace almost worthy of a double Rainboom.
Standing up to dust themselves off after the breakneck phenomenon had passed, they were in doubt as to the identity of the culprit... and for a change, it wasn't Dash being reckless as usual.
"You'd think after hypnotising all of her friends into submission, swapping Luna and Celestia's cutie marks over and almost causing armageddon, Starlight would be a little more careful with her magic..." Spike frowned in annoyance, making sure the precious parchment he carried with the princess's weekly itinerary on it wasn't ripped or smudged as a result of his unforeseen stumble. "Still, at least Diamond now has a taste of what to expect from the next few weeks. This ought to be interesting..."
"Now Spike, you shouldn't treat the period Miss Tiara will be staying with us like some kind of intriguing diversion. They're both going to need supervision in their interaction, especially early on, and this important task can't be treated with casual disregard. " Twilight gently chastised her favourite dragon, as she observed Starlight's accelerated form rush off with a screaming filly on top clinging on for dear life. "When I'm not around to oversee things between the two, it'll be up to you alone to steady the ship. Can I rely on you to help me out, once more? I know it's a lot to ask, especially as it may cut into your free time. If it's too much of a problem, just say the word..."
"H-Hey. Look at who you're talking to, the guy who saved an entire Empire from destruction and successfully helped negotiate long-lasting peace between ponykind and Changelings." Spike grinned nervously, sounding a lot more confident than he actually felt when it came to dealing with troublesome family reunions. If it was up to him, he'd jettison this 'ship' at the earliest possible opportunity... but he couldn't let Twilight or his new friend Starlight down. "It'll be a piece of jewel cake, you just wait and see. You know you can always count on good ol' Spike..."
"Oh, thank you so much! What did I ever do to deserve such a humble, selfless dragon?" Twilight beamed from ear to ear, and wrapped Spike up affectionately in her wings, giving him a warm hug. "I know Starlight would welcome an extra pair of claws around the place, too. I also have some books on filly-rearing in the depths of the library, that I never thought I'd get the chance to use. Do you fancy having a quick look at them on our return, so you know what you're 'up against'?"
"S-Sure Twi, if you think it'll help..." Even after all these years, it took but a simple pleading look from his best friend to get him to cave in, and he snuggled against her feathers blissfully. "...But I was thinking more in terms of how Starlight is going to handle all of this. I mean, you've already seen how intense she can be when she gets really excited, and with all of these new rules she can use..."
"Hmm, yes it is rather odd that Spoiled Rich would suddenly allow Starlight to have so much freedom with Diamond..." Twilight mused, her wide smile fading rapidly upon hearing the dragon reference the small print at the end of the now official contract. "I can't even begin to imagine why she'd not only allow Starlight to take her 'daughter' away, but give her all this extra leeway to hoof in terms of what she can do. I'm sure there's got to be a hidden catch somewhere, Spoiled wouldn't just give up on her 'prize possession' without a fight. You and I will have to stay extra vigilant until we figure out..."
Twilight's protracted brooding was interrupted unexpectedly by a loud snore, and she glanced down to see Spike fast asleep in the midst of her plumage, breathing peacefully while little smoke rings rose arbitrarily from his nostrils. The long day at both the spa followed by the trip to Rich Mansion had taken much out of the baby dragon, with the lengthy stroll back to the castle the final straw regarding his ability to keep himself tethered to the waking world.
Upon seeing this, Twilight shook her head with a knowing smirk, before carefully positioning the snoozing reptile onto her neck for the rest of the short journey home. "I keep forgetting you're still a child yourself, too..." The alicorn mused, as she proceeded at a noticeably slower rate than her super-quick unicorn protege. "With all that you've achieved in your short life so far, no wonder. We'll talk more about this in the morning, right now I need my number one assistant to be up bright and breezy in the morning, so it's straight to bed with you once we get inside. Pleasant dreams, Spike."
And with that final remark, the alicorn set off for her castle without further delay... where she was about to encounter a very finicky Starlight needing to use the bathroom something awful, while an agitated Diamond Tiara rolled her eyes in exasperation nearby. The flustered unicorn might not be locked outside that night, but she was beginning to wish she'd at least asked for a spare key at some point since her arrival in Ponyville.
Not only would it make her feel like she'd truly earned her mentor's full trust, it might also prevent any 'accidents' when she needed to empty her bladder desperately in the future. After all, it's not like she could go anywhere on the ground.
For goodness sake, what was she... an animal?!
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You'd expect Spoiled, having witnessed the temporary departure of her number one project for fame and recognition, to be at least mildly upset, but you couldn't have been more wrong.
In fact, she almost seemed in a jovial mood, as she sipped straight from a bottle of Filthy's 'strictly out of bounds' favourite white wine, while mumbling incoherently to herself: "Fools... they can't see the bigger pictures... threaten me in my own home would they... trying to take what's mine... I'll show 'em! I'll show them all!" HICCUP!
After Diamond's tearful farewell with her father, which resulted in the devastated stallion galloping upstairs as soon as she departed, Spoiled was quite put out when the most emotion she received from the exiting filly was a slight growl and a pair of narrowed blue eyes, before the youngster left with her head held high, not looking back even once.
That ungrateful little... after everything I did for her! Spoiled snorted drunkenly, while swilling down the last of the fortified liquid. Still, I can't completely blame My Diamond for her unforgivable conduct of late. It's those three little runts who turned her against me, along with their interfering sisters! Now, with the reappearance of that damned unicorn, things just keep getting more and more complicated. Even my own marriage may be at stake! Well, not if I have anything to say in the matter! Time to call in an old favour..."
And with that final cryptic thought, Spoiled proceeded to smash the empty glass bottle into the middle of the roaring fireplace, while staggering over to a nearby writing desk to grab a piece of paper and a quill. Having dipped the latter in a pot of ink, she then proceeded to begin writing a letter to a certain someone in her best cursive... well, as good as one can scrawl when they're half-inebriated, anyway.
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Dear...
How are you? How is your family? Now that the mindless chit-chat is out of the way, let's get down to business. You may not even remember me, but as sure as heck I remember you! I see, I'm Filthy Rich's wife, and I have a bit of a problem...
"Deadpansnarker ain't one for quitting'. 
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Oh no, please don't stop writing this, it's really interesting. I'm almost certain Spoiled will be defeated and I'm so looking forward to that.
What's that materialistic monstrous Machiavellian mess of a mare got up her proverbial sleeve?
Listen, the fact that you have 491 thumbs up (for only 33 downvotes) proves that you are doing wonderfully.
There is always a bunch of people on this site down thumbing every fic they come across without valid reasons. You are the author, you decide how to write your fanfic and where to bring it. There are a few people on fimfiction who spend their days hammering their view of things, demanding it to be done, over and over again. And sometimes, there is someone who creates multiple accounts to try and make others think they are several persons, to pat their own back, to thumb themselves up and others down. If people abuse PMing to you, just block them and ignore them.
Now, noone can please everyone all the time. So, don’t let these people get at you.
Please, don’t stop this great fanfic. Too many great fanfics are now dead, abandoned, and it would be sad to see this one join them.
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Try and wait for more than 2 months.
Also, deadpansnarker, like every fanfic author, is doing this for free. He doesn’t have an airdate limit, and can take the time he needs.
Them plots be athickening.
Considering what an unstable nutcase Starlight is at the best of times, this is going to be hilarious and a violation of every foal safety law in Equestria.
Also 493 upvotes vs. 35 downvotes. Threatening to throw the towel if he gets more downvotes.
Honestly mate, don'tcha think you're being a wee bit of a drama queen about this?
The game is afoot. Spoiled makes her first move.
Twilight start reading those terms asap... also look into the possibility of Spoiled falling victim to "mysterious circumstances" but make sure the "mysterious circumstances" don't seem like they come from the crown or Starlight...
at this point im not sure if milk will win or not AND I LOVE IT
As my dad told a very nosey neighbor one time "I know it's wrong but that's the way I want it".
It's your story and you have a vision of where you want it to go. Anyone else can either keep reading or not their choice.
Spoiled is not going down easy is she, yea we know she'll lose but what insanity will she unleash before being put in her place?
Brah, I need more. Starlight is gonna need some reeeaalll help along the way.
I have to say this. I know it's stressing you out that you're getting down votes and PM's about bronies not liking this fic for whatever reason, but let's face it; EVERY author on this site has to deal with that. I've not seen a single story that didn't have at least one down vote, and there are those that down vote anything that doesn't fit into their narrow views as to what makes a good story.
This is your story, and it's a good one. So don't let a few rotten tomatoes spoil the whole batch. You can block those that bother you in PM's too, and if you feel you're being harassed, then tell a moderator.
Looks like Spoiled is about to make her first move!
It's good to see that you're continuing with this story. Don't let these people get you down with downvotes and PMs, telling you to 'change' certain parts. It's your story and you write it however you want! If anyone had a problem with it, then tough for them!
I for one, really enjoyed your writing so far and if I'm allowed to give you more than one upvote, I would gladly do so!
I look forward to the next chapter!
Plenty of others have already given words of encouragement, so I honestly feel like this is unnecessary, but I want to give my two cents anyway.
Not everyone is going to like everyone's stories, and just because some readers are downvoting yours shouldn't be a reason for you to stop. If you enjoy what you're writing and how you're writing it, then keep on truckin'. Clearly there are plenty of people that are enjoying what you're writing. The fact that you have over 500 upvotes is proof of that.
I've had people telling me how I should be writing my own story, and it does tend to grate on my nerves, but I'm occasionally given valid points that I've used later on, so just be sure to filter out the people that are just straight criticising you from the people that may be offering constructive criticism. As writers, if we can't accept constructive criticism, then we're really not going to get any better.
Point is, don't let the few outweigh the many. There are plenty of us that are enjoying your tale, and are eager to know what's coming next. The ones that aren't can screw off.
Keep up the good work!
Dude, look at your upvote/downvote score.
If you honestly think you can't stand another flurry of downvotes that will NOT seriously affect your overall score, then you seriously need to grow thicker skin.
No, I did not downvote your story.
As T.O.M. might put it:
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle, How could a pony in Ponyville get that twisted? I suggest subjecting her to Pinkie. Non stop. For a month. That will either fix her mind, or shatter it into tiny bits. Love, Princess Celestia.
and just like that spoiled's already lost. you realize that if she intends to play dirty to the point of illegality, twilight's likely already had her house watched right? there is probably a pegasus or thestral somewhere nearby with a pair of binoculars requesting a warrant right now. if your going to play the legal game then at least show twilight as possessing some competence in this matter, have her throw her weight around. so far you've had a lady with no actual authority throw power around she doesn't have against a princess.
Two things. Glimmer is making me cringe a bit. “Calm the buck down!”
Spoiled has me worried. I think sh’es going to try and sabotage the contract.
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And everyone is entitled to their opinions, with the right to like or dislike. Those who spam the same things in PMs and in comments, demanding things, are wrong.
I sadly had to read this a bit faster because i habe rarely interner where i am for two more weeks, but I think Starlight is to eager demanding thatbDiamond already calls her mother.
Hey, I can understand how you feel when it comes to stuff like down votes. Negative reactions don't feel good but you're doing really well actually. You've got a heck of a lot more support than criticism. If you're ever feeling bad and not sure if you want to continue, just think about all the people who love this story and you might find the confidence to keep going.
One final word and it's perhaps the most important part, this is your story. It doesn't matter what negative reactions you get, heck it doesn't even matter how much support you have. All that matters is that you enjoy it, that you like the story and continue it at your own pace in your own way.
Having said that, good luck with the story from here on out.
11 downmarks compared to the actual hundreds of upmarks you've received so far?
Don't give it up. People are dicks.
You're doing amazing. Don't ever let anyone or anything push you down.
They're just jealous.
Did Twilight say 'filly-rearing'?
even though some ponies will say mean things about your story i highly recommend you continue because for everypony who is mean there are even more that love this story. I personally am looking forward to seeing how it ends. i have never really been a fan of starlight glimmer but this story is extremely good and i encourage you to follow through. those who are sending pms are just being haters and personally i would ignore them.
Your caring Pegasister twilightcheff
Good for you on sticking to your guns.
Anyway, I think Starlight's getting a little too enthusiastic. I don't blame her, and it's in character for her to not do things in half-measures, but still, she might want to tone things down.
I'm glad you're coming back to this now, don't worry about those few downvoters who just want the story to go the way they want it to. People are always like that on this site, the majority of us just want to see how this plays out. We know the likely endgame is that Spoiled will be defeated, we just don't know what she's going to do or try to do before then.
It does make me wonder just who it is Spoiled is contacting, and what she in mind? I doubt it's a simple fillynapping plot when Diamond is asleep, the chances of at least someone being there to witness any attempts is quite high.
I'm sorry, but I've got to stop the tape for a sec.
This line was so wrong and insensitive I had to reread it three times to make sure Spoiled Rich wasn't saying it*.
Starlight has no right to demand this of Diamond Tiara, whose whole world has turned inside out by a pony she's barely known a week. Adopted parents sit back and wait for that moment to naturally come. They wait for months, if not years. Why? Because you can't automatically force a child into that position. It doesn't matter whose uterus she came out of, she BARELY knows her. It's not right and it's not fair to demand this of a child who clearly has a problem with it and can't say no.
Being called "Mom" in this situation shouldn't be a demand, but a request. A request you wait more than a day to make. This move is absolutely selfish on Glimmer's part and not okay in the least. Badmouthing the home she just came from in front of her isn't cool either (she's not wrong, but you don't say that while the kid is in the room).
Granted, it's also totally in character for Starlight Glimmer, but it still left an ugly taste in my mouth.
If it was your intention for that to be a bad move, no harm no foul, but it really didn't read that way.
*Honestly, since Spoiled is so cartoonishly evil in this, I can't take her seriously at all, so Starlight ended up came off worse than her as a result. I've seen more than one terrible foster parent pull literally this exact thing.
On another note, as far as the wall of downvotes goes, I'll tell you this:
There's good criticism and bad criticism, and I'm not going to tell you which of the comments you've gotten is one or the other, since only you can make that call in the end. It's your story and ultimately you're the one who knows where it's going or what the structure is, so it's also up to you to decide if you want to listen to complaints or not.
I'd advise against both dismissing or accepting all of the complaints, however. Just as a general rule.
11 downvotes is enough to put an otherwise accepted work into question?
Well anyways, the only problem I had with this chapter was, of course, Starlight being overly excited and rambunctious about bonding with DT. Yeah, it's kind of in character, but then again, I absolutely HATE the canon version of this character, so for me personally, that's not doing any favors.
This is so good.
You're sitting at a 92% positive rating on this story, and you're thinking of cancelling it over a single percentage point worth of votes?
I can't begin to understand the reasoning, but I'll be interested to see where this story goes, nonetheless. Here's to the (hopefully) next several chapters.
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As a former foster child, I do second this. It is incredibly rude to coerce someone you've just met, who has been ripped from their home (intentions and situation notwithstanding) to refer to you in such a personal, close way.
In my experience, it can take months to years for a child to get to the point of calling a foster parent "mom" or "dad", and even then it's at the pace and behest of the child. Pushing a child to call you a certain thing so soon breeds resentment.
Starlight's heart is in the right place, but she's coming on super strongly.
Dont let the few get to you, this story is amazing
Hmm...Spoiled’s game looks an awful lot like rumspringa right now, apparently with some added devilry.
the was a great chapter but like many here have been saying the pat where starlight basically didn't sit well with me I feel like its too much to ask for the person u just met about a week ago to call you mom other than that I feel like its good and the downvotes don't matter there are many great fimfiction authors that got downvotes and didn't stop and are now stories I would recomend for example change, the whole bride of discord series and someone still loves you they are always are getting some downvotes and that doesnt stop them just go with it why waste your time on the haters I mean celebrities, athletes, youtubers and many other people dont worry about those type of people care for the people that are complementing or helping you out but dont just quit like you said in the stories rich's arent quitters so dont stop now
I loved this chapter, please don't stop writing, I'm hitting the thumbs button as hard as I can!
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Agreed. I'd be devastated if this stopped so soon!
>> 8435517 Yes, it was supposed to be a bad move on account of Starlight. She's made a neophyte mistake on assuming DT will accept her just like that which she may pay for later...
In terms of Spoiled's character, I'm just writing her as she is on the show... haughty, and only thinking of herself. She might get character development later, but you'll have to wait to find out about that.
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Dont you dare take this awesom story down!
Or im going to send Fluttershy on youorig00.deviantart.net/2c47/f/2017/112/d/1/fluttershy_s_vector_by_matthewboyz-daie9m8.png just kiding but for real dont Take it down i woud miss it to much.
How you write is amasing
spoiled rich is so well done that i get goos bumps reading her lines so Thank you for making this goos bump making story. (Sorry for my bad english)
8439607 I personally just don't like Starlight. She had potential to be probably the most relatable antagonist in the show to date, even MORE so than Nightmare Moon.... and then the S5 finale happened. I kind of like to pretend she was an orphan who was abandoned because she didn't receive her cutie mark at said age. THAT would have made her actions believable and even understandable given what happened to her. But no, she nearly ended the entire planet because her friend moved away and she never bothered to stay in touch.
Sorry for that small rant there. Starlight will honestly do that to me.
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Rumspringa is a period in a young adult Amish person's life when they can go into the "English" world (meaning, among the rest of us), and try out the non-Amish way. After a set time, they then choose if they wish to be Amish or "English." During rumspringa, they find all the strictures they had before are lifted...thus they tend to go completely nuts, way off the deep end, and way, way too much partying, drugs, erm--romancing, etc., that when their period of rumspringa ends, the overwhelming majority of them choose to be Amish, as the "English" world is far too insane to want to live in.
Hence, my thinking Spoiled may be working a similar angle.
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Sadly, this is Internet. Famous and great stories always get a bunch of thumb downs from haters, out of jealousy, .... Just look at how many thumbs down fanfics like "Past Sins" have got.
Just ignore the trolls.
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I'm glad you have decided to keep this story. Also if you ever start to have doubts feel free to talk to me about it. I will always be there for those who i consider friends
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I think it eould help you if i explain what I meant last time.
I'm not exactly telling you to change anything and was merely commenting on a choice a character made.
I admit I like it if they kind if learn their lesson afterwards through. I mean maybe Diamond being angree and not wanting to call her mother already, or another character telling Starlight that she can't expect Diamond to already see her as a real mother figure , something like that.
Otherwise i'm completely on her site, I'm just always thinking how the other Characters like Diamond have to feel about it abd slightly dislikr it if they don't make it clear what they possibly think.
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Will Twilight's future role in this story involve getting fed up of Spoiled's speeches to the point she jumps on her and a catfight ensues?
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As far as the foster care stuff, if you need editorial assistance and information on how that sort of thing works, feel free to shoot me a PM.
With the downvotes, I do understand the significance that they can do to a story's heat rating, but most of that really matters when the story is brand new. Once a story is established, and has a dedicated reader-base, you are pretty much guaranteed a bump to the 'popular updates' list. Instead of looking at the rating, maybe take a look at how many people have favorited, or are following the story. These people specifically want to know when you update, and are willing to take time out of their own schedules to come back again and again to your story. When looking at likes, they are 'impressions' from a reader, whereas the favorites and bookshelves prove that you are engaging with the reader.
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No problem I just hate when good stories end, especially when they had a chance to become something big like instant teenager by seasonthewiccan she just stopped suddenly and I waited for 2 years she never updated it again. I hope you do good and yes I indeed do need to work on my punctuation.
Yeah I see how the color coordination for diamond tiara works
None of her adopted parents have her color (except Spoiled Rich but even she has a darker shade)
Double Diamond and Starlight's color would have been a perfect fit for Diamond Tiara
Which makes this story all the more real
Is it sad that the first thing that popped into my head after reading that sentence is, "How come there isn't DT x Starlight ship art yet?"
And I mean romantic ship.
I hope there's a chapter in this segment in which we don't see Spoiled at all.
I know it's too much to have her not mentioned at all, but every thing she does just makes me wish I could punch her more.
I find it odd that a contract that will turn Starlight's life upside down for a month does not require Starlight's signature.
Guess Starlight had too much to drink.
I can’t help but wonder if Starlight has been in this situation before, and whether or not she made it every time if she has.
My mind is weird.