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Shaded Changeling


If it was going to be perfect, I wouldn't be in charge.

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This will be interesting.

This will be good. Looking forward to her wake up call.

I sense a tg coming up.

7172718 you realize that saying that was redundant, if you read 'A Day In The Hives - Lust' ?

This is gonna be interesting.

Nice start. A few small typos and a case of two of awkward grammar, but pretty good otherwise.

Well, that was interesting... Nothing like fucking reason into someone.

I'd choose death over reformation but then again I'm an outlier. Still I saw some of myself in dirty, not a lot mind you as I'm not involved in trafficking but in the fact he's efficient, ruthless, and unapologetic. He regrets deaths but only if said death cost him money or denied him a chance at money. So he is a lot like me. Cold and calculated.

7184357 I would choose death too, death is better than living a "miserable" life...

Dirty Deal is literally a pimp. How is he not experienced with sexual activities? I mean, he's got to at least know the theory part of it for his business to work, right?

7192373 He's also a stallion naturally, he understands how it works, he is just rather uncomfortable with it being the other way around.

7182364 #afatebetterthanafateworsethandeath

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It's an interesting take on reformation, typically a simple mind-altering procedure is done (whether by magic or some kind of friendship event), but here we see the opposite: keep the mind, but here's some shoes we've glued on!
We're not entirely sure she deserves the massive second chance, or that they keep extending kindness despite his adamant refusal (this isn't an injured wolf scenario quite yet, we anticipate that a bit later).

Can't wait for the next chapter! :pinkiehappy:

Duplicate section about three quarters in.

So she gets a hint of the hive mind, huh? Well, a bigger one than during the transformation anyways. Keep going! ;)

7265198 Eh heh... Yeah... sorry... It's late here.... I'll fix them up... :twilightblush:

Amazing chapter! Keep up the good work!:pinkiehappy:

Usually you have to first ask to pass a test via fucking. *Eyebrow wiggle*

Great chapter.

Awsome Chapters ^^

Hmmmm I dont know should i feel sorry for him or not :facehoof: (I hope that really comes across)

Very well written.

I finally got around to reading this. It's actually fairly interesting and the premise is pretty unique in how clerical it's treating the subject. I'd like to read more.

Alternate title: "Dirty Deal, Done Dirt Cheap"
Way too many capital letters.

buisiness

business

it’s glistening Labia,

its

breath threw her nose.

through

she fill me in

fills

Comment posted by Khiten deleted Jun 16th, 2020

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Dirty Deal, Done Dirt Cheap

This is the power of my [ S U T A N D U ]

This chapter contained approximately 293 ellipses.

Take a bow, I guess.

8018745 Yeaaaaaah.... I'm not sure if it is a bad habit or something, but i put ellipses in whenever I think there should be a pause in speech that wouldn't necessarily stop the sentence/phrasing. It is probably a really bad habit though... :twilightblush:

8020155 Is this story going to ever update or is it basically abandon, because the plot is actually quiet intriguing and i am curious as to how it will end

8143440 It isn't a main project that I will be putting a lot of writing into... It is more likely a sort of side project, that I will work on when I get the inspiration for it or can't think of anything else... I am sort of focused on another project of mine, but who knows. Cause I sure don't. I will tell you that it will update when I get around to it... But don't expect it to occupy a lot of my time, just be pleasantly surprised.

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holy shit you're almost right 294 ellipses
what the fuck? why???

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