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Meet Wing Song, a pegasus singer popular in the downtown bars of Manehattan and known by many who frequent "The Carrot and Ale." With an insatiable love of engineering, he's found working at his day job in a carriage repair shop, toiling away at loose wheels and broken harnesses. He grows tomatoes in planters on his balcony, and loves to share their sweet taste at picnics with his friends and colleagues. Also, he's served ten years in Manehattan City Prison.
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Wow, that description is all over the place, you need to fix that.
6632136 What description?
The description for the story itself.
You do know how fics work on this site, right?
I just want to say... this is a very brave thing you are doing; writing a story about an ex-con pony coping with hiring prejudices. This is a very real problem in the human world today, and support groups are springing up in communities all over the planet. This is one class of people for which there is no pre-existing civil rights protection, federally or constitutionally, for their right to work. 'Regardless of legal status as an ex-convict,' does not exist on any job app, under the heading of 'equal opportunity employer.' In the United States, even the ACLU does not currently represent this class; presently it is too engrossed in furthering LGBT rights, to represent the interests of this class. It is very hard and frustrating for these people to find and be hired by employers with more open minds and forgiving hearts, and it continues to put a bad light on criminal reform.
I would like to see this story develop further. Also, I invite you to read my little contribution to this topic; the FiMfic entitled 'Ex-Evils Anonymous.'
6655271 I'm glad you've enjoyed this topic. I have a few other transcribed interviews concerning enhanced interrogation and civil forfeiture that you might like. Working on reading your work now.
I like this. I'm always interested in the ways that fanfic can deal with issues that happen in the modern world, and I think you're on to something with this format. There are probably a few ways you could make it better, though. For one thing, I'd advise removing phrases like "He said," or "he paused" when it comes to Wing Song. Interview formats work best when there is no mention of the setting except when it is brought up in dialogue, or maybe some stage direction-style comments if they're relevant. Otherwise keep it simple. You do it with the interviewer great, just replicate it with Wing Song's dialogue. Also maybe consider changing the italicized format to bold, since imo it's easier to read for a long time.
Otherwise I think it's pretty good; there's not much of a narrative here but it's also not that long. If you were looking to expand it into a story, I'd think about introducing some element of plot, either in the story of Wing Song's life or in the actual interview process (maybe it has a negative effect on him?). But as a one-two shot it's not a big deal.
6902479 Thanks for the feedback. I've always found difficulty with writing the interviewee, so I'll be trying some things out the next time I get around to one of these. As for a plot, these weren't intended to form a story around the interviewed characters, though in my mind I do generate a background story for the interviewers who coordinate these things.