An autistic brony who is the owner of an OC pony named Charming Thunder and a big fan of Star Wars.
This story is a sequel to Equestria Wars Episode XI: Attack of the Vines
A few months later since the defeat of Omega Brony and Twivine, Danny had a vision that Arthas the Lich King and Havoc, Discord's Twin brother have returned to Equestria and has started a war in Equestria. Charming Thunder will be dealing with Arthas while Danny deals with Havoc hoping to resolve the upcoming darkness.
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I'm fascinated at this story. At all your stories, actually.
They aren't grammatically incorrect or have terrible spelling, but the content and execution of these stories is... questionable.
First off, a small nitpick; this has little to nothing to do with Star Wars. If you're going to make something Star Wars related, then make it Star Wars related, not... this.
Second off, a question; why do you add things in the story that sometimes aren't even necessary? The Borg? Last time I checked, the Borg had nothing to do with Star Wars. The Lich King? I don't know about you, but I don't remember the Lich King had ever swung around a lightsaber before.
Finally, and probably the worst thing about this story; Charming Thunder. Ugh... just typing that sends a shiver down my spine. He's boring. There, I said it. He's plain and simple with no defining character traits whatsoever other than "Perfect". And he's in ALL your stories. Either improve his Gary Stu personality or make a new OC, either one works.
Or put actual hard work and determination in your stories, that works too. Seriously, it feels as if you make these stories on a production line. More quantity and less quality, if you will.
You may think I'm an asshole, and I don't blame you. But I am willing to help. If you need an editor, I know a guy that knows a guy.
6738174 the next episode will. next time pm me ok?
6738174 That was hilarious, SuperKamek! In all honesty, I couldn't stop myself from laughing. And sorry, sonicdash123, but I have to agree with SuperKamek. Charming Thunder is a Gary Stu. I can make better OCs than that, just ask Lightning Rod (one of my OC). I challenged the whole 'OCs that are OP are Mary Su/Gary Stu' thing and made Lightning Rod. He is extremely aggressive when angry and gets angry very easily. Example: he once broke a pony's leg when that pony only slightly ticked him. Yes, he's overpowered, but that's where his weakness lies, he can't control his own anger.
On a different (but similar) note, this a great series of events, but it make no sense sometimes. Like having human/humanoid Jedi ghosts in a land of ponies (not including HiE's). You could have at least had the ghosts be ponified.
Also (and lastly), you could do with some more original stuff, like giving a character a light-saber that's like a chainsaw or something. I personally have created some pretty interesting light-sabers (the unorthodox kind). Example: I thought of both a light-spear and a light-whip (both of which I'm not allowing you to use in your stories (these are my ideas I'm sharing, after all)). That's all.
Just how many episodes will this story have?
Which chapter tells about the resurgent class star destroyer?
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