Um...
Knock knock knock.
"Coming!" hummed Fluttershy from the inside of her cottage, singing to herself.
She trotted over to the door, opening it wide and smiling with all her teeth.
"Hi there!" she quietly chirped.
"Uh... Am I in the right place?" asked a weird, echoing voice.
Fluttershy's smile froze as she set her gaze on the pony before her. Swiss cheese legs, black fur, weird green eyes, a changeling was standing in front of her house. In front of her actually.
"Mmm... Wait! I know you! Are you Fluttershy?"
Come on Fluttershy! You've got to by some time to try and warn the others...
"Y... Yes?"
"Discord's been telling me a lot about you in his letters!"
"In... In his letters?!"
"Yes we write to each other. I'm... nicer now you know. Please don't be afraid of me."
Fluttershy just stared blankly at the queen of a whole evil race, telling her that she was nicer now.
"I'm here to see Discord? He told me he could like... reform me".
"Oh... Okay" said Fluttershy. Well... If Discord was okay with it, she might as well be too. "Wanna come in?"
"Thank you".
Stupid! Stupid stupid stupid! kept thinking Fluttershy while staring at the changeling.
There was an awkward silence. Chrysalis had already sat down. What could Fluttershy say...?
"Do you want some tea?" finally asked the yellow pony.
"Uh... sure" said Queen Chrysalis, not wanting to deny the hospitality of Fluttershy even thought she didn't like anything else than love.
Fluttershy went in the kitchen, a little troubled by the awkwardness of things. She thought of a few subjects they could talk about before coming back and seeing Chrysalis and Angel staring at each other. Just... staring.
"Um... I got the tea!" said Fluttershy, forcing a smile upon her lips.
The queen jumped, thanked her and the silence came back.
"Why do you want to be reformed ?"
"For personal reasons and because I've learned that Celestia has started to banish ponies to Tartarus. Also, the economy is better in Equestria."
"Oh."
Silence.
"How is your um... family?"
"Good, good they're all doing fine."
"Okay."
Silence.
"Why did you end up at my house anyways?"
"Discord told me too wait here for him."
"I see."
Silence.
"Does anyone ever call you... Buttercups, Fluttershy?"
"Butter... No sorry."
"It's fine, I was just wondering."
Silence.
"Do you like animals Fluttershy?"
"Yes I do."
"Right."
Silence.
Silence.
Silence.
"When did Discord say he'd come?"
"Today."
"But what time?"
"I dunno."
"Oh."
Great.
"Listen, Chrysalis I am spending a good time with you but..."
"You're bored?"
"Um..."
"It's fine! I'm bored too. What should we do?"
"Let's go in the garden. I can introduce you to my animals if you want?"
"Sure."
Queen Chrysalis followed Flutteshy outside her cottage and towards her garden.
Animals of all sorts were exposed there and happily trotting, flying, running or slithering about.
"My! This one is pretty!" said Chrysalis, admiring a giant peacock. "The colors are amazing!"
"Thank you! It's called a peacock! And this is a cat!" she said, showing a white kitten with an adorable bow.
"Would it be a problem if I held him?"
"No! Of course not! Here."
Fluttershy put the kitten on the Queen's shoulder where it immediately started to hiss and growl and scratch around.
"Oh dear!" screamed Fluttershy, trying to get it back but it jumped on her face, scratching her to blood.
"I'll get him!" came the voice of Queen Chrysalis as she fired her horn. A disgusting green substance trapped the terrified thing. "All done! Are you okay?" she then asked to Fluttershy.
"Yes I'm fine. Let's go inside maybe?"
"Good idea" approved the changeling as they walked back to the cottage, not noticing the orange cow pony running away.
"How can you discuss the flavour of milkshakes?!" screeched Pinkie.
"It's questionable!" replied Cheese Sandwich.
"Ohmygosh!! Just how COULD you?!"
"I guess it's the milk!"
"How can YOU have a problem with milk?!"
"What do you mean by that?"
"Cheese is made from milk!"
"WHAT?!"
"You didn't know??"
"There are a lot of things I don't know!"
That's it...
"I ON THE OTHER HOOF JUST WANT TO KNOW WHY YOU TWO ARE HAVING THIS DISCUSSION IN THE CASTLE??" yelled Twilight.
The two paused and looked at each other then at her and then said in unison :
"Bunnies."
"Excuse me?"
"Bunnies!" repeated Pinkie. "Bunnies will always solve your problem..."
"... When you don't know what to answer!" completed Cheese.
Twilight gritted her teeth together :
"Just... How...? But... They aren't... UGH!" she finally breathed out, giving up and sinking from her chair to the ground.
"Twilight!" yelled some pony, entering the library, "Where are ya?!"
"Here Applejack... I'm here... On the floor..." mumbled pitifully Twilight.
"Oh... But what are ya doin'..." then Applejack spotted Cheese Sandwich and Pinkie Pie next to each other. "Oh. Right. He's back."
"Yep!" muttered Twilight getting up. "What did you want Applejack?"
"It's Flutershy! She's been attacked by Queen Chrysalis! I saw her in her garden with blood on her face! We've gotta go now! I didn't interfere because she seemed strong..."
"What?? But... Ugh! Okay let's go!" yelled Twilight, panicked as she was already running out the door followed by the cow pony.
"You know what this means Pinkie?" asked Cheese in a very serious way.
"Yes I do Cheese." she replied in the same voice.
Then they looked at each other and giant smiles covered their faces.
"CONFETTI CANNONS!!!!!" they both yelled.
"So..."
"So..."
"Enjoying Ponyville?"
"Yes"
"Right."
This is never going to end... Just WHERE is Discord?!
"Is your face better?"
"Oh yes thank..."
Discord appeared in the room.
"Discord!" both the mares shouted, relieved and happy to end the awkward silence.
They looked at each other, blushing slightly.
"Well!" smiled Discord. "I see that I've been missed! Sorry for making you wait Chrissy, I was busy with chaos!"
"What?!" they both screeched. "You mean to say that you left both of us here alone just because of CHAOS?!"
Discord winced at what they had said at the exact same time.
"Woo... Hit a girl nerve there..."
Fluttershy and Chrysalis glared at him for just a few moments more and then burst out laughing, seeing their evident complicity.
The draquonecus smiled happily at that and took them both in his arms.
"Ooooooh! Two of my very good friends becoming friends! Now THAT is going to be chaotic!"
They all giggled together as the door opened.
Awkward silence came back as Twilight and Applejack watched Discord giving a big hug to Fluttershy and a villain.
They all just stared at each other for a while until...
"TIME TO KICK SOME CUPCAKES!"
"AND CHEESE!"
"CONFETTI CANNONS READY?!"
"YES SIR PINKIE!"
"GOT THE MUSTACHES?"
"THEY'RE RIGHT HERE!"
"THEN... FIRE!!!"
Batter and melted cheese fell on their heads.
"Oops! I guess I put the confetti in the oven and the batter in the confetti cannon... AGAIN AGAIN!"
"Same thing here!"
Then Cheese Sandwich and Pinkie Pie looked at their now battered and cheese covered friends, two were being hugged by the Lord of Chaos while one of them was the queen of an evil army. Then there was the unhappy looking princess of Friendship and the element of Honesty giving them the death glare.
Twilight took a deep breath, put a smile on her face and said happily :
"I'm going to go kill myself now!"
I'm so sorry for writing this story... 
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no don't be sorry for writing this story because i like this story and i will be waiting for more chapters for this story if you do make more chapters which i hope you do
Pretty decent.
Found a small typo.
to
This story made me laugh.
"I'm so sorry for writing this story" Never be sorry!!!! More?
6303631 Sorry but that was the only chapter :)
6303856 Your comment made my day
6303674 Thanks!
6304652 ok
6304652 Glad to hear it.
Don´t be sorry. Ever.
It is silly and made me smile and I am sure it will make many more smile, even if just for the last sentence.
6304884 Thank you so very much :)
Phrasing's a bit iffy here.
*put
Proofreading is important!
Then she happily trotted away to go looking for rope.
Many errors. Could use a proofread. Characterization is sketchy. Ending is weak.
It was decent, a bit of work around the story such as adding more lines of detail, going over what you have and reading it out loud to yourself can really help bring out the comedy. It's certainly an interesting idea, but the whole awkward silence joke did drag on a little too long. for comedy mixing with Fluttershy and Chrysalis I would have certainly pictured more events where Chrysalis wanted to observe some of the animals that Fluttershy takes care of and then getting everything backfire with each new animal, only hurting Chrysalis in the process.
Any chance
I, we could get an alternative ending?I liked
6426869 Glad to hear
Poor Twilight is going to have an aneurysm.
Well....I can safely say that I have NO IDEA what I just read....but it was good.
6492810 Uhhhh thanks I guess.
6493129
Well, for the most part, the story was all over the place, and it was hard to tell who exactly was speaking at times. I do really like the premise, though, as it seems fairly interesting, having Chrysalis show up at Fluttershy's at Discord's recommendation, and how both she and Fluttershy react (at exactly the same time, and in the exact same way to boot) when Discord does show up.
I think-- I think I was just subjected to a literary drug trip.
6499598 Damm right you were
ha so...we shoud stop her...right
6945728 Maybe?
that ending defiantly falls under dark comedy....which is the best type of comedy. the whole thing was amusing in the sheer about of awkwardness of it but that last line just made me laugh.
7080305 Thanks!
7573402 Glad this made you laugh XD
Huh. I never thought Twilight would go that far. I'd just imagiine her smiling, and walking to the nearest home depot for some special supplies..