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Fleur De Lis writes a letter to her sister.
It starts cold and unappreciative.
Then her heart starts to melt and memories come back, exposing her feelings for her sister to see...

But... Who is her sister?

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Dat plot twist at the end :D

#calledit

:coolphoto:

Flur you ignorant prejudice basterd she's your family your only siser and you have the gale to disown her you are a disgrace to be a sister ! :ajbemused:

And here I thought that Fleur might be the adopted one and Pinkie might be her sister. But nope! I was proved wrong! I liked this story a whole lot!

That ending... I can't even... Sir/lady, great job really. That was one big hell of:
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When condition was said, I knew it was derpy.

I've seen one where Fleur and Bon Bon are sisters, and this is the first time I've seen a Fleur and Derpy sister fic. Now that I think about it, this may explain why Dinky's a unicorn...

Damn! Feels story from nowhere, this was a good one and im happy to have read it! Take my favorite and like

Very well done. :twilightsmile:

While an interesting idea, I felt this was rather telly. As an example, take these lines:

Fleur felt suddenly a little sad and wanted to open up a bit more, even if it would mean to hurt her.

I'm opening up to you now. And I do not know why. The one thing I know is that it has been very hard for both of us ever since mother died...

This is pretty stilted, it's not the best way to convey this point. Perhaps something like this would work better. "Thinking back to that day, Fleur felt that she needed to explain why things had changed. I suppose I have not done the best job of holding to my promise, but it has been very hard for both of us ever since mother died..."

Excuse me, I need to go smack Fleu De Lis alongside the head.

6434963 Thank you very much, appreciated sir/ lady :moustache:

Lol that plot twist was a plot line for me XP

6434889 yay you're not the only one who thought it was pinkie pie.

6434889 yay you're not the only one who thought it was pinkie pie.

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