The very ending.
"Help somepony please help" Spitfire screamed into the hospital Scootaloo was fading away and needed help right now three mares came rushing out and put Scootaloo onto a stretcher and rushed her off to get help Spitfire watched as they carried her away "this is so tragic" Spitfire thought to herself a blue pegasus was walking through the entrace behind her he went to talk but didnt have it in him he collapsed on the floor Spitfire turned around "Oh no Soarin" he had a huge chunk missing in his chest it was revealing his rib cages which were all mangled three mares sprinted passed Spitfire and put Soarin on the stretcher and rushed him off Spitfire sat down where Scootaloo was before and put her hooves up to her face and started crying she thought to herself "Yesterday everything was perfect and look at everything now this is all so tragic" Rainbow Dash was fading away her breaths were weakening Scootaloo was still breathing steadily Soarin was injured but he was'nt to bad he was coping they were currently bandaging him up.
A few days passed Scootaloo was still unconcious Rainbow had gained conciousness but was never going to fly again and Soarin had been let out of the hospital the day before but he refused to go he sat by Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo the whole time he requested that Scootaloo got moved in with Rainbow Dash to keep her happy.
Rainbow looked down at Scootaloo and sang to her "I'll sing it one last time for you you've been the only thing that's right In all I've done And I can barely look at you But every single time I do I know we'll make it anywhere
Away from here light up As if you have a choice Even if you cannot hear my voice I'll be right beside you Scootaloo i love you and it seems you want me as much as i want you and nothing could make me happier" Scootaloo opened her eyes "Mum i love you too."
(Authors note) I have greatly struggled to write this story due to personal issues this story is a dark one i know but i hope i ended it happily for you.
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good story but hey my advice is get an editor for your next story
:3 that was awesome....good job on making this :D
what happend to Gilda?
37253 she died bro read the last story again
... I have no thoughts.
358989 Dude shut up and quit being a troll haven't you got some puppies to go drown?
370444 Wait, what the fuck? I didn't write those... Sorry, I think my account got hacked
I enjoyed the story itself, but the grammar...damn. :S I'm glad everyone is still alive 'cept Gilda, she gave her life as a sort of self redemption to Dash, I like that shit.
Please make a sequal
Great story dude
good story horrible writing srry
No words. The ending was perfect.......
I hope that I did not sound like too much of a prick in my previous comments. I feel like you might want to stay away from this story if it would bring up bad memories for you but, I feel like you should have it gone over and edited. It would make it so much more enjoyable for everyone it there were some actual punctuation marks. I wish you the best of luck in your future stories. Keep on writing!
me no like.
really good story. the writing was a bit off but was compensated by the story. Ending was good, still more DETAIL!!! Would be amazing if you wrote an epilogue.
Buck me, mind blowing storyline
yea, maybe check over your writing afterwards but apart from that, this was awesome, had me hooked the entire time 
What the hell why is rainbow dash not able to fly again
Why is the ending so tragic and how on earth did soarin, rainbow dash and scootaloo able to take so much damage and still be fine and why didn't celestia or luna step in to save then and who did you put that bit in about soarins chest that was just gruesome and why did Gilda die
Ok I re read the ending it wasn't so bad and the story is pretty good and pretty weird and I'm sorry for like half of the comments I made but the bit about soarins chest is still gruesome but the story is good sorry for the bad post
but why didn't celestia or luna step in to save them
Get an editor,good story,but seriously needs an editor and proof reader.