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Raster Dreams
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Ok, while I enjoyed the first chapter from the view of the search party and the image, The whole chapter sped by way too fast.
I think you should slow down and spend more time on each scene.
Neat, written from an Equestrian's point of view. The idea that she thought the statue was of a human princess was awesome. Why else would they build a giant statue?
clearly and ocean
oven in her
Maybe you were always a pony, and your human self was a lie! (Someone should write that kind of coping measure)
Earth pony deuteragonist? Neat. We need more earth ponies among the side fics. I wonder how long it will be before the two parties cross. Hope it's not too quickly.
Neptin. The word you want is neptin.
This has promise! Keep up the good work!
6333377 Well, that's embarrassing. Thanks for pointing those out.
Heh, this is off to a seriously good start, lots of good perspectives and ideas. Love that whole 'don't give a fuck' style of your protagonist. Do go on.
Doesn't Manehattan have a similar statue? I think I remember seeing one in either Cutie Mark Chronicles or Rarity Takes Manehattan …
Just as a ref: Updating in back-forth pattern tends to confuse readers.
6382679 I know. I intended that one to be there from the start, but it slipped my mind and I kept forgetting to add it in, so I did it now. It (probably) won't happen again.
I finally cracked up that. Well done, dear Author, well done.
The changeling mind from a first person perspective is also seriously well done, especially the feeling of a brain suddenly gone multiple cores and the illogical inability to feel much other emotions than confusion. Oh, and contemplating what your own brother's soul tastes like.
Have that green thumb.
Do go on please.
Peter seems to be having a harder time coping with Changeling Brain than Riley did, but then, who knows how long Riley was alone in the City Museum before Alex and Adrian found her? She might have gone through the same thing at first.
Speaking of, Peter's got the distinctive earmarks of a Royal: the crown-like "antennae" on his head, and the different horn (which, in his case, resembles young Chrysalis from her FIENDship is Magic story, or Duchess Chrysalis from the Mirror Universe arc). Knowing what I do about insects … is he a Queen?
6384836 Keep in mind, Peter's almost 22, while Riley's between 9 and 12. His brain was nearly finished developing and is nowhere near as pliable as a child's.
And yep; queenie. 'He's' just too busy to realize some of his, eh, key plumbing, isn't quite like it used to be.
6384214 I was feeling iffy about it, especially the badly scrambled paragraphs, but I'm glad somebody liked the idea.
6384888 Fair enough. And boy, is he going to be in for a surprise!
Now I'm wondering just how much of the east coast Odium actually hit before coming to Alexandria, because given his obsession with destroying Changelings before they could become a threat to him, Peter would have probably drawn him like a moth to a flame …
Hmm, seems like Celestia is an evil cunt in this story. So, conversion bureau? Or am I misunderstanding the plot with the little information I gleaned? In any case, it takes a good plot and good writing for me to like this type of story, so I really hope this is going to be interesting. Not enough information to tell from this chapter, though the writing isn't bad from what I have read so far. That's a plus.
Strange. I take it this other Earth was incorporeal, yes?
The way this sounds is like he is realizing doorknobs are not metal, which isn't what you are going for I think. It would be better if he said, " Wait, aren't all doorknobs metal?". This implies that he knows doorknobs are metal, yet he is expressing his disbelief since metal shouldn't shatter that easily. Unless the doorknob actually wasn't metal... If so, ignore this.
Wow, the longer I look at the word doorknob, the less and less it looks like a real word.
Why do they keep saying mummy and daddy instead of mom and dad, or even mother and father? How old are they exactly, because it sounds like they are pretty young.
6384888 Didn't Petter say his brother was older than him? I'm confused.
Anyways, so far this has potential. Like and fav.
6393303 The whole situation and what caused all of the transformations ends up being infodumped on the protagonist of Last Pony On Earth on August 8th. I won't spoil much, other than that many people are of the opinion that the princesses' handling of the situation could have been better. It has very little to do with malice.
And yes, Peter's brother, Jacob, is older than him, and is almost thirty years old. Mummy and Daddy are just the names they've used for their parents. It's a little more immature than just Mom & Dad, but you also have grown men who say 'Mama,' and so on. Some even just call their parents by their first name.
That must have been the way Sunset felt, seeing as she also came expecting thousands of ponies with a well established leader.
A very nice view of the experiences of one of the average search parties. The Lady Liberty deliberations work well.
Looking forward to more.
6393335 An old house like would readily be found in Boston might easily have cut or polished glass door. While it would shatter or shouldn't shatter some door knobs on older homes are like a hollow plastic toy with nothing in the center so with enough strength it would dent or deform
This might be a little confusing at times I get the impression that author is British or at least studied what is called UK English. This comes from using tarmack, mummy see that more in still from Britain
Alright chapter. A few spelling and grammar mistakes, but nothing another sweep couldn't fix.
Seems we got a new character in our mists.
Heh... I like this. A lot.
Can changelings die of ruptured stomachs? Careful there Peter. Oh and don't kill your brother, even though I imagine that deep, brotherly love can kick a changeling into almost delirium.
And velcro-hooves like an oversized fly? Brilliant.
Also, the AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH response on first sight is probably going to become a mite tedious after a while. On the other hoof, the Equestrians will probably shoot first.
On edit: that picture! You're good.
6393303 Random galactic phenomenon entirely un-due to celestia due to wipe out all humans.
Celestia unable to fix humans to be able to accept new magic in old form in time, so converts them to ponies and displaces most in time to save the human race.
Yay! One of my favourites just updated.
The two of all those little gems in here where I laughed the most. It doesn't show all that much that it isn't edited by the way. The soft horsies, the armor plated bug, your writing flow... love all of it. This just works and I really look forward to the next chapter!
Just... what happened to the comments? Strange.
6830065 Flattery will get you many places.
It's been a few months since the last update, when all the ones before it basically came within the same month, so I'm not terribly surprised. When things pick up again, there might be an increase in visible activity. We'll see.
Nice to see this is still updating.
Late comment is late.
Well, they wouldn't know, would they.
This is beautiful. I really, really like your search party perspective; it's unique in all the side stories so far. Sharknado.
You bring up a very interesting conundrum, something that hasn't been addressed yet as well: the search parties have a mission to fulfill, a mission that was designed on the assumption there would be thousands of ponies that could help each other.
Now you find one in a city devoid of ponies but full of death traps and predators... leave him to fend for himself and concentrate on the mission? Can you live with yourself after giving out a possible death sentence in the name of completing your task? A task that has turned out infinitely harder than it was supposed to be? Or do you take him with you and let yourself be bogged down? What if it's a foal?
This situation could warrant a 'dark' tag all on its own, depending on how it works out.
I love this story.
Dang... such beautiful fangs and then no taste experience with meat? That's rather sad.
Still, the picture of a changeling queen passed out in a mess of every conceivable foodstuff in the supermarket? And 'can I lick you?'
Someone just went off the deep end for a moment.
Had to laugh at the 'armadillo impression'. What a gang. This trio meeting the search party is going to go over so well.
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So far in the series, the most detailed images of this statue are in the episode “The Gift of the Maud Pie”.
http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/The_Gift_of_the_Maud_Pie/Gallery?file=A_statue_inspired_by_the_Statue_of_Liberty_S6E3.png
http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/The_Gift_of_the_Maud_Pie/Gallery?file=Maud_and_Rarity_inside_the_statue%27s_crown_S6E3.png
As Peter is a changeling, a shape shifter, he should with some training be able to regain his human appearance, although he would still be a changeling under his human appearance. Peter could trade a sip or two of love, from ponies and other species, in exchange for Peter’s ability to use human tools and machines with his human appearing body. Peter could someday become similar to the alternate universe's Chrysalis who has no body holes while still having fangs featured in Friendship is Magic Issue #18.
http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/Queen_Chrysalis?file=Comic_issue_18_Alternate_Chrysalis.png
7170781 That's not exactly what I have planned, but you're not too far off the mark.
Is anyone else looking forward to finding out more information about cannon changelings in the episode, “The Times They Are a Changeling”?
7424998 Thank you. Now I'm imagining 'Beantown Bug' as an animated short film, MLP style. The crazy has been doubled.
I'd pay to see that.
And well, yes, I am looking forward to more canon changeling goodness.
From what I've read I guess the spell was supposed to have a slightly more things alive outcome instead of going "maybe I should vaporize 99% of things"
I can see what you mean with side chapters not doing the search story justice. There's a lot going on and it's really interesting. I really like the 'Changeling tampering confirmed' message they relayed back home. Good stuff.
Considering their panic at meeting a changeling (guess that chitin saved his life), it's maybe a good thing they didn't encounter Peter first. Imminent heart attack... and he might have tried to lick them.
This story remains great!
7477377 The 99% are just too lazy to get their souls properly aligned. Now look at the trouble they've caused!
Damn... the funny has begun to leak out of the story, the process given all the more impact through the contrast with the comedy value of the beginning. I wouldn't define character development and the forming of a three-way psychological crisis 'nothing exciting'... don't be harsh on yourself.
There's also a lot of attention to detail, like the soft clop when trying to put a comforting touch to the shoulder or the scraping sound when wiping his brow. Little details that really spell out the beginning loneliness of a changeling. And of course the acute awareness of others being terrified of you.
I guess the rate of attempted suicides among the returnees will be the highest for changelings by far.
Good chapter.
WOOOHOOO UPDATE!!!
Damn! This is good. So much content in such a short chapter.
Delicious.
Keep up the delicious work.
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Speaking of canon changeling goodness, what do you think of the season six finale episodes, “To Where And Back Again”?
ITS ALIVE!!!!!!
First thing: hey guys, couldn't you leave a tiny little comment every now and then? Can't just be me who's enjoying this.
Alright... month break or not, who cares? I definitely shouldn't be the one to talk and as long as you keep updating this, I'm happy.
I loved this chapter - no-one has so far described a cooking session in detail. So that's already really nice. The changeling specific way of doing it, that's just cool. The parallel processing his brain is capable off is one of the strongest point of this character and so far the effect hasn't gotten old. I pity him. Is a changeling even capable of forming real friendships with ponies? Must be incredibly hard to do, what with the instinctual fear of one side and the feeling of rejection on the other side, no matter what you try to do. A rejection you can simply read.
Still great work. Carry on please.
Ah, the mundane made awesomely difficult, one of the hallmarks of Ponies After People tales starring new returnees.
Just as a side note, from someone who owns one: the Magic Bullet is actually a buttonless blender. After you attach the blade unit to the cup and set it on the motorized base, you just push down to activate. Should be relatively simple to operate with hooves, assuming you can screw the blades onto the cup!
7862278 I have one sitting on a shelf in the kitchen and I didn't even notice!
...I have lot of appliances in my house.
That said, I do pity him. There's no way out and everything looks like lose-lose. And loose as well.
Your character development is glorious.
Great story.
Brilliant!